Lucky424
Joined 26th Feb, 2012 ·
Offline
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- errant · 5.6k words · 58 8 · 1.5k views
- Penalt · 6.3k words · 30 17 · 849 views
- ClandestineWing · 2.5k words · 27 7 · 1.2k views
- Jest · 15k words · 46 18 · 2.7k views
- Citrus Recluse · 12k words · 54 23 · 5.6k views
- The Bricklayer · 216k words · 37 11 · 1.7k views
- scribe-feather · 3.3k words · 54 29 · 4.6k views
- errant · 5.6k words · 66 17 · 1.4k views
Stats
Page generated in 0.122 seconds
Total duration
883 users online
1,322,514 hits today, 2,054,621 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Good stuff. Honestly there is a lot if potential in this for shenanigans.
Very nice. :3
Excellent story. I think this is probably the best pony play story I've read.
Unfocused
I don't know what I clicked here for. I do like bondage and all, but as a lifestyle instead of sex? Not so much. This thing's not for me.
Objectively speaking: the story is pretty unfocused, with weird pacing at times. However, it's written with quite the care to little details, and it's not so thick that there's nothing but facts, or so padded that only one in five words matter. It's easy to read and follow, even if some things don't make sense. I do think that it should've been mentioned earlier than the middle of the chapter that Twilight had done bondage before.
Topic-wise: 5/10. A theme that I like, but extended far out of my interest.
Writing-wise: 7/10 could be better, could be so much worse. It's not offensive, is all.
I love it PLS DO MORE