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Silver Dragon Blade Wing


Just a guy who likes to write stories. The Changelings brought me here. :)

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A little On-shot to The Dragonfly Hive that starts around three years before the start of said story.

This one's a bit of a test for me writing something related to romance and the first time as well, so I hope at the very least it'll be a nice bit of reading.

The Winged Thestral named Dusk Storm was always something of a loner and was never really into romance unlike his twin sister, especially after a really bad break-up. But fate wasn't done with him yet, for it all started the day he was assigned to guard the Royal Greenhouse in the courtyards of the Royal Place. There he would lay his one eye on something that would forever change his life, an Earth Pony Mare named Graceful Petals.

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Hello Silver,

I'm not normally one for exclusive romantic stories - usually I'm more content with romance sub-plots during a big adventure - but this wasn't bad. It was a nice dive into the home lives of Grace and Dusk, who haven't gotten that much screen time in Dragonfly Hive as of now, so it was nice to be able to see things like how they met and who their families are.

I still noticed you have a tendency to put character actions on a separate paragraph from their dialogue, but I've brought this up before, and I don't want to keep telling you the same thing over and over.

Besides, it still doesn't take away from a very nice character dynamic. I really got a better sense for Dusk and Grace, and look forward to seeing more of them in Dragonfly Hive.

Until then, thanks for sharing.
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I'm not normally one for exclusive romantic stories - usually I'm more content with romance sub-plots during a big adventure - but this wasn't bad. It was a nice dive into the home lives of Grace and Dusk, who haven't gotten that much screen time in Dragonfly Hive as of now, so it was nice to be able to see things like how they met and who their families are.

Glad you liked it :twilightsmile:, these two, like the others, will be having at least a few chapters focused on them at some point.

I still noticed you have a tendency to put character actions on a separate paragraph from their dialogue, but I've brought this up before, and I don't want to keep telling you the same thing over and over.

Yeah that habit is an annoying one, hopefully it wouldn't appear at least as much as before in the new chapters.

Besides, it still doesn't take away from a very nice character dynamic. I really got a better sense for Dusk and Grace, and look forward to seeing more of them in Dragonfly Hive.

Thanks again :twilightsmile:, really happy with how it turned out. So from what we've seen here what would you say their personalities are? And how about the family members we've seen so far?

Something I want to mention, I have something special planned for these two in Dragonfly Hive.

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So from what we've seen here what would you say their personalities are?

Dusk strikes me as an honorable warrior type; might be due to his accent - which I love, by the way :pinkiehappy: 👍. From the way he talks, I expect him to be one of the more powerful fighters of the group - which he sort of proved in the chapters I've seen of Dragonfly Hive - and yet, it's backed up by a kind heart, best seen through his interactions with Grace.

Grace intrigues me as well; her generous side is really shown in full here, what with her caring for the rose and allowing it to grow even though everyone else didn't think it had a chance. Really shows a determined side to her that complements Dusk very well.

And how about the family members we've seen so far?

Relatable. From Trapper teasing Dusk about being an overprotective father to Star and Cap teasing Grace and Dusk about getting them some grand kids. It just really gave a sense of family familiarity that was just nice to absorb.

And I also liked how Dusk had a lot of family members; reminded me of a friend who had seven aunts, and all of them were very close with him and his friends. People with big families that love each other that much are really lucky.

Something I want to mention, I have something special planned for these two in Dragonfly Hive.

Oh-ho, intriguing :raritystarry:. Well, I look forward to seeing where you go from there. Until then, thanks for sharing. :twilightsmile:

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It's also clear that Dusk loves his nieces and nephew by the tackle hug they gave him. :twilightsmile:

How would Shiva and co. react to the story of Grace helping that rose and even sleeping in the giant flower as a Filly?

Oh-ho, intriguing :raritystarry:. Well, I look forward to seeing where you go from there. Until then, thanks for sharing. :twilightsmile:

You're welcome. :twilightsmile: And a little hint; watch the end of "The Nightmare of the Moon Part 5" closely. :trixieshiftright:

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How would Shiva and co. react to the story of Grace helping that rose and even sleeping in the giant flower as a Filly?

They'd find it incredibly adorable. Kodo might cover for it by scoffing, and Luke might just chuckle, but the others would pretty much go 'Daww' for it.

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:twilightsmile: Wish I could draw as I'd love to see it as a picture.

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