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More than 23.000 years ago ponykind and a bunch of other races have colonized an empty galaxy, creating a space world of misteryes, danger, political intrigue and oppressive multicorporations. It is the Empyrean Age, were semi-immortal capsuleers roam the heavens trying to carve a place for themselves next to the core nations.
Twilight Sparkle is the protege of Empress Celestia of the Amarr Empire. She is about to perform her pilgrimage to the EVE Gate and become a capsuleer. However a primeval evil is strring and an ancient foe is about to return, Twilight will have to build her strenght and find loyal friends if she wish to survive in the intricate adventure she will be throw in.


Hy, this is my first fanfic ever. I'm not english or american, go easy on me, feedback is apprecieted yadda yadda yadda. I don't think I'll ever finish this story, is more of a personal experiment of combining ponies and EVE spaceships (I don't play the game but the visual are GORGEUS). Enjoy.

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Comments ( 41 )

speaking as an EVE player, best of luck on this, mate.

I'm doing the same thing, but it's a Human/Pony encounter :rainbowkiss:

Be our scorekeeper Largefish! :scootangel:

I like the concept but you really need to proofread before you post. Quite a few spelling errors (and if I picked up on them you know others will)

Hmm I was once a eve player I almost got a galentten battleship.... I still could...

79988 Yeah, I knew it would happened anyway :ajbemused:, I'm not at all uset to write such long text in english

"used", what did I just said? :applejackconfused:

79983 I noticed that, but I wanted to have fun traslating the characters in the EVE universe. Lyra is a Jovian for example, can you guess why?

Pinkie Pie would be so op in the eve universe, that pinkie sense would be a life saver. She would be almost impossible to catch unless she wanted to get caught.

I am still wondering why Twilight would care about shields on an Amarr ship (seriously I once made a bait punisher that had around 10k eph armor tanking is key). Well a few amarr ships can be fitted with a shield gank or sniper setup namely the zealot (sniper hac). Oh well Twilight is still a noob, and if all she had after was a dram she should of tried to lure it into gate gun range (they never miss).:trollestia:

This is really interesting and looks very promising. I especially like how you distributed the races between eve factions, and how Celestia got the Amarr and Luna the Gallente... so fitting :yay: I'll be sure to follow this in the future.

Now on to the critics... as said before, you really need someone to spellcheck your story :pinkiegasp:
Small error in EVE history : the ORE corporation sn't a jont ventre between the Empires, but a Gallentean corporation that found extremely rich asteroids in outer space and became independant when the Federation wanted to requisition it. Outer Ring Excavations
Also, Twilight ? Ten jumps in low sec (albeit in an Empire-controlled Region), and you think it will be uneventful, and you activate the autopilot ? :facehoof: Is it your first flight ever ? You're really lucky the Dramiel didn't have a Warp Disruptor fitted :twilightsheepish:

Anyway, don't fret too much about my rambling, and keep up the writing ! I'll be waiting, watching... :pinkiecrazy:

I aplaud your efforts, everything fits so far.

celestias attitutde twards the slave trade, along with spike, twi and pinkie. you have done a wounderfull job of translating the characters:pinkiehappy:

I play eve and I love your interpritation

I predict that applejack is Matar, with the extended familly, that would be pretty intersting, due to the fact that all free Matar HATE the amar for the most part and wouldnt have a problem reminding twi. as for the apple family occupaiton, the only two options i can see are either miners, or pirate hunters.:moustache:

mining, because basically farming in eve.

pirate hunting, because, Apple bucking and PH is basically the same thing, knocking your next meal out of the sky.

OR a combo of both:trixieshiftright:

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Speaking from experiance 90% of dramiel pilots are retards. Remember the guy who lost a dram to a badger?

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On the note for a combo of both...

Yay for battle hulks, or even better one of tests battle rorquals:trollestia:

Yay, an EVE crossover! :raritystarry: Nicely done.
Suddenly I have an urge to reactivate my account. And maybe add some... modifications :trixieshiftleft:

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Twi isn't flying in autopilot, she use it to highlight the next gate she must take. She was reinforcing the shield because hull tanking spells are more difficult, beside she got a punisher because she was a special case. Also don't forget that she start in my story with the color patter of her mother
Hmm, the ORE as Gallente doesn't fit too well since I wanted it to be a dragons+diamond dogs faction...

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I wanted AJ to be Caldari, since she is the only State-type character I could think of (the family corporation type). But she IS a miner and a PvE player since she use artillery (artillery=bucking :ajsmug:)

And Pinkie will TOTALLY become a spec op :pinkiecrazy:

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You do remember there is a difference between armor tanking and hull tanking.

(In eve there are hull tanking stuff and armor tanking stuff)

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Wathever, I've stop playing the game 6 months ago. I'll try to stay coherent to the internet stuff as much as I can

EvE backstory allows for so much more than simple ponification…

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I'm open to suggestions

About the new chapter Pinkie act so miserable because she know that Twilight is a slave sympathizer. She was enslaved as a filly, beaten and now she was forced to kidnap one of the nice amarrian to gain her freedom. I will explain it in the next chapter

And I know that rescue plan was stupid, but it was a plan from RD after all :rainbowdetermined2:

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Well, instead of rewriting with ponies you could extend the universe. There's old Milky Way, there are wormholes, there are Joves. The story takes place millenia after collapse of the EvE gate, millions of years after humanity left Earth. You want some comedy - incorporate Lyra meme here (humans were, humans no longer, humans may or may not return). You want some tragedy with a human in Equestria - let some greedy capsuleer find a wormhole leading to a system with a strange sun (hey, magic as a star effect, you don't even have to invent explanations, let EvE devs do that :D). You want happy ending for that tragedy - let CONCORD or Joves find that capsuleer. Etc, etc...

>10k Words of GLORIOUS POD PONIES
>I shoryukened in happiness
>
More than 23.000 years ago ponykind and a bunch of other races have colonized an empty galaxy, creating a space world of misteryes, danger, political intrigue and oppressive multicorporations. It is the Empyrean Age, were semi-immortal capsuleers roam the heavens trying to carve a place for themselves next to the core nations.
>Summary
>Ponified Eve
A while back, I wanted to write a Ponified Eve. Not Eve itself, but taking the general concept, as well as a mish-mash of other universes I was fond of. Then I realized it was a committment I could not follow through on.

You're filling that for me. Thank you. And I haven't even read it yet. o7

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Slotos gets it. Don't ponify. Use it as a creative medium.

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There is already 79983 working on that, but the other way around could work. And there is the forbidden lore stuff that Twi will go nuts for
This first ark will be about defeating Nightmare's Nation, but I guess some Warhammer in it wouldn't hurt
And there is Dust 514 for planetside events...

What have I gotten myself into? :raritydespair:

Awesome chapter ! :pinkiegasp:

Much better on the grammar :yay: thanks a lot for the effort. The story looks even more promising, with political intrigues and Sanshas messing everything (I love their ships ! :pinkiecrazy: )

Keep up the good work ! I predict this fic will be MASSIVE :raritystarry: and awesome :rainbowdetermined2:

You spelled rainbow wrong at the last bit:twilightangry2:

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>What have I gotten myself into?

Something amazing. Something glorious. Something awful.

Where I backed away from the rain-slicked precipice of Epic-Fic-Writing, you jumped headlong off. Now we shall see if the waters below are deep and clear, or filled with sharp rocks.

If Alliances don't factor into this (Test Alliance represent!), I will be a sad pony.

Alright. This needs an editor. I'd be more than happy to volunteer. Send me the Gdocs link (or whatever other medium you use) and I'll get to work.

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(:fluttershyouch:) and the first chapter was a disaster area, I'm not a smart and patient pony

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That's... thank you :yay:
But I wouldn't get my hopes so high, this is my first fanfic. I started this to experiment and while I do have a plot in mind (lots of plots actually :trollestia:) I'm going a bit on the "And then something happens!" strategy

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English is not my native language so some editing would be good...

It's interesting how common it is to call Twilight Eos in fan-fiction. Not a complaint mind you, just an observation.

Another awesome chapter. I can't wait for the next one. :rainbowkiss:

Hmm, I've got an idea. Since I'm now starting to deal with factions and alliances' wars I'll need some characters for the meat grinder. I could put some OC's that rapresent your EVE character, just tell me your ship, combat strategy, race and corp/alliance (possibly your favourite background pony)
That is, if you want to :fluttershysad:

And again I need some feedback, maybe some little suggestion on how and where insert other shi-fi elements. Got some ideas but is a big internet out there

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Commented just because you did so to mine :rainbowkiss:

Author-insert OC characters? Seems kinda iffy. If you want, you can add mine, but that is your own choice :coolphoto:

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Eh, just an idea. I've got lots of background ponies in the show anyway

Trying to make a title image. Surrender your candy or Master Moon will gobble you up!

You seem to be doing pretty well for now, especially regarding the Eve mythos, although, the grammar is sort of jarring. See if you can get ahold of someone to read your chapters and revise the grammar mistakes.

If you want to insert more sci fi stuff, talk about the components for the ships when it comes up.

I've lost my editor to real life :raritycry:

Is somepony out there willing to help me?

I did not think the Harbinger had any missile slots, and with 7 turret slots firing multi frequency that should be enough to handle rats (especially if she has 5 t2 medium drones or 2 flights of 5 t2 lights). Here is a link to the eve wiki, and my corp hates it when I link this but I cant help it.

http://wiki.eveonline.com/en/wiki/Item_Database:Ships

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dang it, totally forgot that, my bad. Okay, Twi is not firing any missile now

I like how you handled the problem with the ORE corp :twilightsmile:
Also, Inkie and Blinkie in mining... I did not think of that ! :pinkiehappy:

By the way, the screenshot inclusions along the story are GENIUS :pinkiegasp:

Conclusion : AWESOME ! This is getting more and MOAR interesting by the chapter ! I can't wait to see their reactions to the nightmare battleships :twilightoops: Maybe somewhere you could include a basic universe map for the non-eve-savvy readers, to help locate regions... but we need a map without player influence... :derpyderp2:

As for the editing, I wish I could help, but english isn't my first language so I can't really pretend to correct anything :unsuresweetie:

A Procurer? :rainbowlaugh: Those things are an absolute joke! Lol, why would any pilot be caught in one of those is beyond me.

Good chapter though.

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Check out the latest dev blog. They are getting a buff.

They are set to become heavy tank miners.

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I would like to say congratz in that frantic battle a few days ago.... Sad your alliance lost some titans and many ships.


For the Minmatar republic!

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