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Dragon Shimmer


Just someone who really like dragons

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This is an alternative dimension adventure of Sunset Shimmer. When she get banished from Equestria, she found that she have to go on a new adventure to find the way to come back to Equestria.
Just like or dislike if you feel this story good or not good. Your comment for criticize will help me a lot but don't be toxic. I don't like it.
I am not owned any MLP character or EBF ( Epic Battle Fantasy).
My little pony owned by Hasbro and EBF 3 and 4 owned by Matt Roszak.
The picture owned by LeonKay.
Warning: this Sunset Shimmer maybe little OOC. Sunset all in pony form.

Chapters (13)
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Comments ( 36 )

Question what's crossover with?

10799912
Eh on description there. I don't plagiarism to anyone don't worry.

Would you like some help editing later tonight?

10799959
Just not an "can't fix" fiction. Maybe I can because i am busy writting chapter 6 here :v

10799959
Or... Writting combine editing is fine xD.

What is this a crossover with? You mention "EBF" but googling that just bring up European banking groups.

10800024
Ack really? Oh boy i have to fix this. Thank you for you comment.

5 likes and 1 Dislike... That a good start.

This is pretty good!

10801789
Tks you, i am thinking about what to do next.

You seem to have a great start with this, minor editing mistakes aside. It's not really my type of story, but I wish you good luck with it!

10802095
That's okay. I would suggest trying programs like Grammarly or simply autocorrect, they might be useful. But as I said, it seems like a very good read, good luck with the story!

10802095

I’d be happy to be ur editor!

10802919
Fine. I trust you this but... I don't know how to invite you edit the story xD.
P/S: the next chapter almoost done

10802919
Anyway you should read all of the chapters though.

Nice, but grammar mistakes.. Imma help you with that!

10802925
Ok.. so how can you help with grammar? All chapter is published.

10802922

In a PM. Send me a PM, and I’ll reply with the edits to one chapter. Then you copy-paste that in place of the original. Don’t worry, I won’t change too much. :twilightsmile:

10802930
How about you point it the grammar wrong and fix it? I will fix imidiately

The premise has promise, but problems plague your prose.

Sorry, couldn't help myself. :derpytongue2:

A little trick I like to use is to build the scene in my head and let my imagination act it out. It keeps the dialogue flowing naturally.

10807320
Ok.... She have a long way to find a way to be back though

10807328
I will say that I've yet to see an EBF crossover. Just needs more polish. Maybe an editor.

10807404
Wow you really touch my pain here because I don't have an editor. And I need to think Sunset skills and stuff :v

10807569
Maybe not an editor, maybe just more practice. Keep writing, keep learning, keep improving. :twilightsmile:

Warning: this Sunset Shimmer maybe little OOC.

How so?

10808689
Idk because that the proof that.... I don't know how much about her personality.
If you thing this Sunset is too OOC please let me know and I change the warning.

Comment posted by Dragon Shimmer deleted Last Tuesday

Okay grammar problem is all fixxed

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