Equestria has been empty for centuries. The cities are abandoned, inhabited only by rats and birds. The ponies, or what's left of them, are scattered, isolated, and generally disagreeable.
Twilight tries to remain optimistic despite it all. Stories have taught her the fate of most immortals, forever resigned to be bitter and unproductive, and she will have no truck with it.
She reminds herself who she is. The Princess of Friendship. The Element of Magic. Personal student of Princess Celestia. Such accomplishments, deserving of pride, a reason to keep her chin held high.
She practices gratitude for what she still has: her ever-faithful companion, Spike, her full range of faculties, and her books.
She doesn't think about the Exodus. She doesn't think about Ponyville. She doesn't think about Spike's deteriorating health.
For the past one thousand, ninety eight years, Twilight's told herself things are going to get better. She's still waiting.
(My eternal gratitude to Pizza Pony for the cover. You can find their DeviantArt here: --> https://www.deviantart.com/provolonepone)
An auspicious beginning to an exciting new fic! I'm looking forward to reading more!
This seems like it's going to be an interesting fic. Looking forward to chapter two.
She just teleported her to the more safe place, isn't it?
It looks like beginning of interesting story, I will track it
huh I wonder if this mean twilight will want to make a sanctuary? or is she of mind that no place is safe for long?
Honestly there wasn't much here i might come back later when there's 2-3 chapters and give a proper review
P.S good luck
I like the environmental storytelling. Vivid imagery.
You have my attention.
bridging this into g5? the whole thing about ponies being split into tribes again, the other races being awol and magic being (at least acording to the synopsis) a no show?
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I wouldn’t recommend putting the G4 and G5 in the same world
That would only affect the G5.
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actualy hasbro has already stated that they 'are' in the same world
several hundred/thousand moons in the future specificly after the adventures of the mane six have faded into legend, stories told to fillies and colts at night to make them feel beter
magic has been lost (this one is a bit ambiguous in the synopsis as its not clear if it means actual magic or the magic of friendship specificly), the elements forgoten, the tribes fractured into seperated comunities once more.
edit: and if you meant the story here rather then the cannon worlds sorry for the misunderstanding
10780830 So Discord just plot-conveniently disappeared. As did all the other creatures. I guess dragons are extinct. And pegasi can't fly or alter the weather. And unicorns are just horses with horns.
Setting the movie in G4s world with such restrictions is TERRIBLE writing. Equestria's world is far too structured on magic to survive without it.
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They’ll probably have plenty of hurdles to clear when they come to them. But we’ll only see how the writers have tried to handle this question and others like it when the movie comes out.
10781052 They're going to try to handle that AND have a plot surrounding all-new characters, AND introduce the lore from G4... all in one movie that's like to be 90 mins at most.
I don't envy them at all if they're actually going to put if serious effort to make that work. Pacing at warp speed, with the characters running at full-speed while screaming exposition non-stop in-between explosions might allow them to squeeze it all in. Given kids' severely limited attention spans these days, it might work!
Oooo, really interesting so far. Can’t wait for more
Great story. I can’t wait for the next chapter.
There is one thing I want to say thank you for. And that is for the way you showed immortality. Thank you for not making it a never ending angst fest.
Ahhh, nothing like a post-apocalyptic adventure, Twilight doesn't seem to have been affected so far, but only time will tell if that remains to be the case.
I just hope that little filly is okay and is able to point Twilight towards some new friends, Spike is great, but he can't be there all the time, especially since they both need to eat.
Looking forward to it, I hope it's not a short foray through The End, I really enjoy that environment.
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Well if magic is gone at least they don't have to worry about windigoes...
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Fixed. Thx for pointing it out
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Actually, my friends and I don’t Like That
Hasbro turned pony into a superhero
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Another thing... The chapter Title being just a single thin character is difficult to click.
it seems like a good story. Good luck.
I'm already itching for more can't wait for the next chapter loving the idea so far
yes new chapter, very good chapter
Good chapter can't wait for more
Dang, that was a pretty good chapter! I can't wait for the next one!
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thank you for comment, very good
Loving this story so far.
There's a very interesting and subtle conflict developing here. From Twilight's "sinful" desire for the freedom of flight at the start of this chapter to when she lifts off at the end only after her friends are asleep and she doesn't have any more immediate obligations, her concern for others seems to be the only thing keeping her grounded—a prisoner of her own empathy.
The imagery continues to be fantastic. I never imagined the post-apocalypse could be so beautiful.
Also, I love that "almost-evening" line. Delightful wordplay.
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I'm glad you caught onto that! I put a lot of thought into Twi's development this chapter :)
Thanks for that
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You're welcome!
The effort shows. Twilight is recognizable, but clearly hasn't been trapped in amber for a millennium; she's watched everything and everyone around her slowly decay, but everything she's learned from her friendship lessons along the way has prepared her to cope with immortality.
There's a bitter-sweet, nostalgic melancholy here that I think could only have been possible after the end of FiM. It's wonderful.
Man, that hurt to read but in a good way. Such sadness in every line. Can't wait for more
The sheer stoicness radiating from Spike, WOW!
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How did you found some conflict in that?? I might say as well that Twilight don't want fly beyond the sun's light because it reminds her about Celestia's fate.
No, really, how?
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The image of flight is commonly used as a symbol of freedom, and the scene begins with Twilight making a conscious decision to not fly, which, by mere virtue of its inclusion in the story, implies that she's being held back. At the end of the chapter she does fly, so whatever changed in between tells us about what is holding her back (i.e. friends who need her help).
Twilight has opposing desires: she wants to take flight (i.e. be free) and she wants to take care of her friends. But she can't do both, and that's a conflict.
From Story by Robert McKee: "When the protagonist steps out of the Inciting Incident, [she] enters a world governed by the Law of Conflict . . . Nothing moves forward in a story except through conflict. . . . Conflict is to storytelling what sound is to music."
Conflict doesn't have to be two people fighting. It's about opposing wants and needs, and how the characters make decisions to resolve that opposition is what makes a story work.
Interesting story. Added to my read list.
I just found this and i got to say this is some great stuff you got going here, Cheers
You sell yourself short, man! Your writing is great!
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thank you so much <3
im glad you enjoyed it
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Cheers!
Hoping you can smash the writer's block again soon!
The atmosphere and mood of this story continue to be fantastic.
I really like the way Twilight and Spike relate to each other in this chapter. It's a beautiful tragedy. They've been together essentially their entire lives, and by this point there's very little need for them to speak. They know each other to the point that a few simple words and a silent look communicate volumes. For how much Twilight stresses herself out over the things she isn't saying, I get the feeling that it's less about wanting to say something to Spike than it is about something she doesn't want to admit to herself.
I was so happy to see this update in my feed, and I'll be just as glad to see the next. Even if it takes 1122 years...
I totally forgot this story. It’s definitely a story I love to see when Twilight needs to learn to let go, Spike will be alright he will be in a better place with all their family, friends, and more.
Though I wonder what happened to Celestia… Did she just ran off on her own adventure somewhere no pony thought of? Not sure…
With that crazy teacher who force Twilight and her class about searching for aliens makes me wonder if that’s a possibility after Spike is gone. Twilight won’t be allowed she could explore what’s really out there and make new friends.
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>even if it takes 1122 years...
No promises
i might finish it sooner
Dude this is just beautiful. Writer's block is a meanie, but I'm definitely looking forward to more! It's already a tear jerker, and I feel like we havent even gotten to the really sad bits yet.
Damn I feel you completely. I take so long writing myself. It seems alien how so many people can quickly churn out 5k chapters. You're not the only one.
I really hope Twi finds be a way to make that spell work. Can’t imagine what would happen to her if she lost Spike