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These Mountains You Carried

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Dewdrops on the Grass

Dewdrops on the Grass #1 · Sep 12th, 2021 · 7 · ·

Wow! First off, just... wow! The sheer love on display in this story, the emotions, the... oh my goodness. I can only dream to someday write something this good.

I adored the way Sunset cared for Wallflower despite Wallflowers worries about her self-harm, and the way in which her attempts to show how she cared, like getting the twin beds, were so easily misinterpreted. I could feel Wallflower's emotions like they were my own, and that's not hard given how easy she is for someone like me to identify with. Then things turned around and the sheer CARE on display with the sex, just....

This is love making. This is erotica. This is practically perfection in writing, and I was hooked from the start.

Good golly almighty are these two in love.

Gay For Gadot #2 · Sep 12th, 2021 · 5 · ·

Thank you for the kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed it so much.

They really do love each other, don't they?

The Sleepless Beholder

The Sleepless Beholder #3 · Sep 12th, 2021 · 4 · ·

Dread settled into Sunset’s stomach, frostier than the chill in the air. An instinctive reply formed in her mind. Despite how urgently it screamed inside her head, she held it at bay. What rose in her thoughts was prying, examining, reasoning. Wanting to know. Wanting to fix.
Time, along with more than a few long nights and many tears, had taught Sunset that wasn’t the correct approach. Sometimes there was no answer for what was bothering Wallflower. Sometimes Wallflower herself didn’t know. Sometimes it was something that would never go away. Never be solved. Only shrink and contort into a more manageable shape.
Not to say that everything was like this. No, sometimes, Wallflower just needed Sunset to hold her and tell her it would be okay. Sometimes, she needed tangible solutions. Sometimes, she just needed Sunset to be there, if simply in spirit.
It was hard for Sunset to hold back, but she needed to. When Wallflower started to flow away, she just needed to be patient, and wait. She would flow right back.

I wish I had learned this long ago. Wanting to fix a problem is almost a reflex in some minds, but that doesn’t always work.

Something worthy of someone like Wallflower, who’d never known what it was like to be spoiled.

This little bit says a lot about Wally.

Happy tears. Eyes full of love.

Ok, that whole scene was beautiful. Almost teared up.

The mareless moon shone just as bright

I find this interesting because canonically Sunset has never seen the moon after Nightmare Moon was defeated, so she doesn't know what it looks like.

“You know what they say about our generation, Sunny?”
Sunset raised an eyebrow. “Hm?”
“‘Born too late to explore the planet, born too early to explore the stars…’” Tipping her head back, Wallflower’s half-lidded eyes met Sunset’s wide-open ones. “But I say… I was born just in time to meet you.”

Wow, Wally, that was good.

Sunset’s heart thumped again; she’d been counting. She would never admit it out loud, but she had been counting, too. It took her a moment to regain her composure.

You two are adorably in love.

In an instant, Wallflower realized her mistake, and giggled. “I love you too.”

These two just can’t help but be adorable together!

A gay deer caught in rainbow headlights, Sunset could only nod.

Oh that’s perfect!

This was beautiful in so many ways. From the scenery of the mountains, to the talks about the starts and destiny, to just them being together. The love, care, worries and all kinds of feelings are so well portrayed here,

This is simply perfect, and I wish there would be more stories like this.

Great job Gadot. Your writing seems to just escalate indefinitely in quality.

Also, I don't know if all of this is meant to be in Italics

“And wet,” Sunset said, her tone growing husky and rough. “Very, very wet.”

In spite of the fire burning across her cheeks, Wallflower didn’t shy away at Sunset’s words. Instead, she leaned in close and replied in hushed tones, “You know… Those do come off.” After a kiss, she added, “If you want to.”

“Oh…” Sunset gripped the waistband with one hand. “I really, really want to…”

Wallflower’s breath was hot in Sunset’s ear. “Show me.”

particle_pony #4 · Sep 13th, 2021 · 4 · ·

Love the Howl reference. <3

Daybreaker218 #5 · Sep 13th, 2021 · 6 · ·

Very well written, brought forth a lot of emotion

Scampy

Scampy #6 · Sep 13th, 2021 · 10 · ·

It would be weird to comment about how much of this is based on real events.

Posh

Posh #7 · Sep 13th, 2021 · 5 · ·

10975458 oh, you’ve been to the mountains, huh? Name three layers of geological strata.

The Eroticator #8 · Sep 13th, 2021 · 7 · ·

This is probably the most pure sex scene I've read in a long while, oxymoron that may be.

Scampy

Scampy #9 · Sep 13th, 2021 · 9 · ·

It would be even weirder to leave a comment about touching myself while I read this <_<

Salmanzero #10 · Sep 15th, 2021 · 4 · ·

Amazing story hope you do more in the future

happytime27 #11 · Sep 16th, 2021 · 4 · ·

Once again you never fail Ms. Gadot, spectacularly cute and pure as always.

Captain_Hairball

Captain_Hairball #12 · Sep 21st, 2021 · 4 · ·

Wonderfully described, tender, passionate and intimate.

Laniakea represent.

Flora Blossom #13 · Dec 3rd, 2021 · 2 · ·

My Little review & Feedback I did this review.

Shakespearicles

Shakespearicles #14 · Mar 16th, 2022 · 2 · 1 ·

Voidwalker #15 · Dec 13th, 2022 · 3 · ·

Precision is important. At one point, I found myself thinking: I wish I could write like that. But truth be told, I don't think that would do me much good. There's already you who's writing like that, and I don't aim to be a copycat. It would be a little bit more precise to say: I wish I could write with such a quality like you do, with such a... flow, for a lack of better words. I am, a little bit or a little bit more than that, in awe. I think that's the point I was trying to make.

As for the story...
Sometimes, saying less is actually worth more. So I shall try my hand at that and leave it simple.

Beautiful.

Thank you for writing!

Elric of Melnipony

Elric of Melnipony #16 · Jan 21st, 2023 · 2 · ·

Top-notch work as always.

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