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New to the fandom, binged during quarantine.


The young jam-maker can't really remember what his life was like before he was bringing his cart to the market everyday, but he remembers being distinctly unhappy. Not that sitting in the hot sun at a rickety old cart is much better. Through his conversations with a lively and persistent young mare, he may be able to have a change in perspective for once, especially when new opportunities come his way.
Assuming he doesn't fall into bad habits and forget about what's right in front of him, again.
The Princess surely had the best intentions for him when she gave him this dream, after all...

My submission for the Friendship is Optimal writing contest.

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Comments ( 13 )

Well, this is . . . . something

It's gonna take me a long period of time sorting out whatever this . . . . emotion I got from reading this.

Still, for whatever reason you are writing this, thanks. I . . . . appreciate it

Strange to say for a story about small horses but this has got to be one of the most human takes on FiO I've read. Everyone just trying to figure themselves and each other out, how do they fit in the world, how closely do they want to walk the well worn paths of their lives that chase them into paradise. You even have Celestia just trying to see if she did alright and worrying that she was a bit heavy handed, or hoofed. Really just a great read with an uncomfortably relatable tone and situation. Really beautiful work!

Huh. I have a feeling this will stay with me for a long time. Really well done, and thank you.

There’s a lot to unpack here, but I like this a lot.

This story was haunting in absolutely most wonderful way! I loved it! :twilightsmile:

Definitely one of the most...human stories about sentient pony AI's I've read. Very well done, it's quite interesting to see what seems to be an early CELESTAI still figuring things out. Though I will say, the idea of being in the supposed utopia afterlife and still having to go to work is one of the scariest things I've ever read; maybe add the horror tag? :trollestia:

This was a pretty good story, but I’m a bit confused by the ending; are they early emigrants, about to have their world reset, or are they testing out prototype Equestrian Experience VR equipment?

This is an amazing story. Just two souls trying to figure themselves out, and embarking on a journey through out the whole ordeal. Very thought provoking. I have the same question as Mythic Night though, that ending really needs some interpretation.

Xanni #11 · 1 week ago · · ·

Great story! Very enjoyable. One small niggle: "Timberwolf" is misspelled as "Timbrewolf", which would be a lot more musical!

God dammit I can't hold all these feels.

That reminded me of The Salarymare's Infinitude in the best way. Excellent work.

This was a very impressive first story to drop here on FIMFiction.
Thank you for sharing it here.

Welcome to the herd.

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