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Timothy1509


I have been writing Twirax stories since 2019.

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This story is a sequel to The cute unicorn maid

Thorax and Twilight Sparkle are officially husband and wife now in the Crystal Empire, the residents of the town were so happy for them. Not only that, the couple have got a son whom they named Alistair, now the changeling and the unicorn have a family now. However, their lives go off a bit rough due to Thorax always busy assisting the residents and their son attending school, leaving Twilight alone doing chores on her own. But, the unicorn will soon realize that she will not be alone.

New story! I hope you all will enjoy this one too! Also, I do not own My Little Pony, it belongs to Hasbro. The coverart, including the fan made character Alistair both belongs to Percy-McMurphy on Deviantart.
Here are the links to them
https://www.deviantart.com/percy-mcmurphy/art/Shapeshifter-694859035
https://www.deviantart.com/percy-mcmurphy/art/TwiRax-Nextgen-Alistair-784650921

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Comments ( 11 )

Cute! It would've been cuter still if Twilight acknowledged the parallels to what brought her and Thorax together all that time ago.

Also this can probably have an E rating, right?

awesome cstory mate keep it up cant wait for more from you:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

What a amazing story and a sweet story too :twilightsmile:

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Thank you, thank you very much.

Overall, this was a cute story between mother and son. I like how Prince Alistair was wanting to help Twilight out.

It may have been explained in the previous stories, but apparently Twilight is a unicorn in this story despite still being a Princess. It could have been tough to work it in, but it would have been nice if something in the story could hint why Twilight is a princess yet still a unicorn.

I also found it odd that Prince Alistair was born an alicorn-changeling hybrid instead of a unicorn-changeling hybrid. It didn't seem needed since he could have still been a Prince (like how unicorn Twilight is still a princess) and alicorn OC get a bad rap, so it's usually not wise to use them unless the story needs it.

Outside of those nitpicks, this was a nice story.

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Overall, this was a cute story between mother and son. I like how Prince Alistair was wanting to help Twilight out.

Indeed, Alistair loves his mother so much just as his mother does. He would do anything to make her happy.

It may have been explained in the previous stories, but apparently Twilight is a unicorn in this story despite still being a Princess.

Of course, but this is an alternate universe story ThePinkedWonder, therefore, there will be lots and lots of exceptions. And authors can write how they want the story in this story verse to be like.

I also found it odd that Prince Alistair was born an alicorn-changeling hybrid instead of a unicorn-changeling hybrid

Maybe I should've pointed out but, Alistair was transformed into an alicorn under the request of Princess Flurry Heart due to her wanting her cousin to be immortal as well so that they can rule over the Crystal Empire and Canterlot once they grow up and become the ponies protectors. I guess I can edit that in as well.

Outside of those nitpicks, this was a nice story.

Thank you so much!

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Of course, but this is an alternate universe story ThePinkedWonder, therefore, there will be lots and lots of exceptions. And authors can write how they want the story in this story verse to be like.

True, but when possible it's usually still good to give hints/explain why something is different, if what has changed is big, like a unicorn Twilight being a princess (i.e. maybe she was an alicorn at one point, but gave up/lost her wings and kept her princess status). Not that she can't be a princess in an AU story mind you.

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Oh okay, I guess I'll go through my story again to see what I can change.

Either than that, thank you so much for reading!

Very cute :)

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Thank you very much!

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