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Dragons are terrifying for none can hear the words inside the roars. Fluttershy, the only pony to understand them, is silent and terrified for a different reason. The girls are attacked by a foul group, but are saved by a silent, purple dragon.

Canterlot has sent a witchhunt for dragons in the surrounding area. There are knocks at the door. Fluttershy answers to find her saviour—bleeding, quiet, and on the run. Saving him means more than stopping the bleeding.

The guards are still looking. Friends harbour pains and prejudice against all of his kind. Mobs gather in fear of the unknown. And Fluttershy, deeply knowing dragons, fears them for a different reason. Yet she's the only one that will be able to understand what this kind dragon has to say.

Will she be able to save him? Will this one be different from the rest? How did Fluttershy acquire this ability? Why does Twilight regard all dragons with scorn?

The clock is ticking; the witch hunt is on.


[Cover by Fidzfox]

Editing by Zaid ValRoa.

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 21 )

But it's better than being his last night.

Gritty, time to see how well she can work on a dragons physiology

"Captain! You're out of line! There's no reason for this!"

Heat of the moment and all that but nonetheless the captain needs to assess who he's talking to better. Accidentally intimidating someone is still intimidation.

Either way I'm liking it so far, keep it up :yay:

I want to read more! This is already a good book indeed.

This is so awesome!!!:rainbowdetermined2::rainbowdetermined2: Can't wait for the next chapter!!!

Most interesting. :moustache:

This should have AU tag, no?

This seems wildly interesting. Can I also ask that you link the source of the cover picture?

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Check the description first, bud.

No mess of gems or, dear I say, a carcass or skeleton of sorts?"

Y-You have a lot of blood less. Wounds cold and maybe infected.

seems like these should be dare and loss

I like the start of this a lot. Well done!

Looking forward to more!

you have my attention.

The question silenced the room. The rookie looked side to side at his troops, sliding the shaft of his spear into the side hole in his armour. Tucked beneath his wing as he turned. "All I see is one big misunderstanding."

I like him! :pinkiehappy:

This is a very interesting read, and has loads of potential. Only critique I have is a relatively small and technical one--at times of action the writing starts to get a bit...not hurried, but disjointed. I imagine because the writer is getting caught up in the heat of the moment, which is totally understandable, but I occasionally found it difficult to keep key details straight on just what was happening when. For example, in the big fight with dragons in the first chapter, it took me entirely too long before I figured out there were three dragons in total, and I never did totally figure out which ones had pinned which ponies throughout. So I would urge the author caution about this and making sure all details are presented when needed and with clarity in those moments.

Other than that, though, the concept's solid. I'm curious to see what will happen next. :twilightsmile:

This is gonna be great.

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Thanks for the saves bud.

Glad you enjoying the beginning.


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Thank you for the critique.

I'll focus on being clear more than anything else.

I hope you stick around.


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Good to see you bois here.


To all.
~ Yr. Pal, B

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- Ah yeah lol. Usually the link is on the picture itself, where there is this little button called "source" on the bottom left. That's why I asked.

I’m gonna read this another time, I just gotta ask, who’s giving all the comments a thumbs down?

You, my friend, have gotten my attention.

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Who ever does the thumbs down hasn't a life. pitiful putz they are.
This story has what others don't. Well thought out depth.
Well done

Wow, thats a good setup

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