3-part story
Granny Smith lives out her twilight years happily with her family every day.
However a certain pony dressed in a black suit has come to tell her it is time to move on in the world and Granny isn't about to let him take her away.
Author's Note: Totally posting this in parts because I'm lazy and I want views instead of taking forever to get to my other projects while working on this. I'm saying that outright. When the story is complete and I get an editor for it I'll post a full extended cut for all who would rather read it that way.
Chapters (3)
*reads the description*
Hmm... is this going where I think it's going?
*reads Part 1*
YOU'RE REFERENCING THE BUCKING TWILIGHT ZONE.
*insta-fave* *insta-like*
FINALLY!!!! A TWILIGHT ZONE FIC!!!!!
Okay. Tracking. Shit, how do I do that again?
I still don't think I got the bridging (IE the flashback) fully correct. I could use some feedback on that so I can make the right changes for when I get to the final part.
Thanks for reading.
Oh yeah. It's the Twilight Zone, no doubt.
Your story is very interesting. I like the take on the conversation about the needs to stay in Equestria. Very well done.
Can I press the like button again, by any chance?
Hang on a sec.
I read nothing about them talking about who was to die. First Scootaloo was going to die, then all of a sudden, after eating pie, Mr. Death changes his mind?
Just clarify that a bit please.
1355080 hence why I needed the editor to help me I guess.
Basically like the episode, Scootaloo only has to die to replace Granny Smith. So Smith decided to bake a pie that broke the contract since she needed to not make a Zap apple pie better than ever before and raise a child of the apple family. Supposed to come off as it was the first time she passed off some cooking to Big Mac but sort of lost it at some point trying to finish so I could get back to my other stories.
When I have time or when my editor does it will come back with a clearer scene I hope.
1357179 Oh, okay. I remember now. Just maybe throw in a little something like:
I can't let that little filly die, thought Granny. I suppose I'll have to go instead.
when she's making the pie. That should clear it up.
Well done, you must have been inspired by the classic movie "On Borrowed Time".
I enjoyed the read.