A prideful veteran of the Lunar Uprising finds herself taken prisoner of war in short order when changelings invade Equestria. Instead of being the defiant hero she wished to be, she gives in to despair and abuse, turned into the opposite of what she stood for. When she is saved from the nightmarish prison camp, it comes at the cost of her dignity and loyalty to Princess and Country. But surely, it is better to live a slave than die a patriot, right?
2021 entry to the Equestria at War writing contest.
[Tag warning: no sexual violence, but tagged as 'non-consent' for psychological trauma.]
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awewsome story mate keep it up cant wait for your next story
This is really good. The way that Valour's phsyci was desconstruced over the course of the story had my attention through the whole thing. Not sure why this story has only one comment.
I don't have much to add to #2 comment, that were pretty much my thoughts as well. It's very immersive, which makes the darker elements work really well.
What an awesome story! This was the first thing I read on here (and the sequel), and I have to say that I’m excited for a possible part 3! Also, I am now officially disgusted playing as Changeling Lands in the HOI4 mod.
I have mixed feelings about this. On the one hand, prose was mostly good save for a few pretty big hiccups. On the other, a lot of the German was wrong and frankly jarring.
Valour's descent into emptiness was quite interesting and well-written. While it wasn't an enjoyable read, I can still respect the craft. Usually, a big pitfall of writing like this is that there is no emotional payoff. I thought this fic was gonna fall straight into that pit.
It didn't, and I was not expecting that in the slightest. And I have to admit, the emotion that was used for the payoff was also quite surprising. Usually, fics like that go for either a happy ending, or a tragic/bittersweet one.
Not this one, and I think it's praiseworthy.
The emotions I felt when I read those last few pages are all too rare in fiction. This sick sense of satisfaction, of schadenfreude, coming from the fact that it was all deserved. It wouldn't have worked the other way around, because no one would have gotten attached to someone as horrid as Empty, but this was masterfully executed.