Very odd to think how humanity will present itself thanks to humans like Dana...

Great chapter. Im surprised the comment section is that empty yet. Guess im just lucky

Im so hyped for the Cloven of the Sun

Man I think I've read the original at least 7 times over the years. Takes me back.

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Man I think I've read the original at least 7 times over the years. Takes me back.

So did I, back in the day. This heavily updated and highly expanded version of the original story will take you back and to some brand new places as well. Hope you enjoy!

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Indeed, good to know some storys return from the grave
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Most intriging

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Most intriging

That’s one word for it!

When I read this story and admit that humans will probably have at least one Dana in the first contact group with another race... Starwars become more than a movie or series titel...

I really like how the humans were introduced as a rumor and background object before they entered the story. It’s a unique take in my opinion. But I’m also very curious about how the first few years of interactions went with the Equestrians. Seems like it would have been interesting.

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I really like how the humans were introduced as a rumor and background object before they entered the story. It’s a unique take in my opinion.

I can’t claim credit for that since it came from the original Feathered Heart story by Demon Eyes Laharl, but thanks.

But I’m also very curious about how the first few years of interactions went with the Equestrians. Seems like it would have been interesting.

It’s a fair question to ask. Before Demon Eyes Laharl left the site, he said he wanted to do a “year one” Gentlemanverse story detailing the opening of the portal and what happened in the first year after. It would have been very interesting and I have no idea what his plans for it were. All I have to go on, unfortunately, were one or two things he mentioned were going to happen in Feathered Hearts in the future, so I’ll incorporate that much, at least.

She was almost at the first level when she was hailed by Fortrakt. He was waiting in the middle of a landing point, an upraised stone stage filled with soft soil, smiling. He was early, which was not surprising given he prided himself on his puncutality. He was also dressed in a blue vest, and while it looked snug, his smaller frame made it a far better and less awkward fit than hers.

punctuality

Great forshadowing 👍

Misunderstandings, how fun

Way to make a impression.
I guess this is how first contact might really look like if politicians will try to win prestige for selfish reasons.
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Literally from another world, common sense and things like food or architecture would be foreign by default.
How they share languages are unlikely as well.
Story reader benefits and all. I use it myself of course.

Two observations.
One, I am a teensy bit confused when Gilda was talking to her superior they were described as female but she still said "Yes Sir"

Two, one of the apparent leaders of this Diplomatic Corps is a selfish queen bee who I can only hope will not damage the entreaties with her foalish whining.

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Welcome to my favorite current story! And my most popular one. Needless to say, hope you enjoy it. I take it you enjoyed Five Star Service?

Two observations.
One, I am a teensy bit confused when Gilda was talking to her superior they were described as female but she still said "Yes Sir"

In the griffon military, officers are called ‘sir’ regardless of gender. That the Marines do not will be a bit of a running joke later on.

Two, one of the apparent leaders of this Diplomatic Corps is a selfish queen bee who I can only hope will not damage the entreaties with her foalish whining.

In the original story, she disappeared quickly with no explanation, so I’ll be giving an explanation and valid reason for it here.

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Laughing can give away many things, but also tell wrong stories.
Beware of first and second impressions.