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'Oh, it's you. it's been a looooooong time. you know, since you Murdered me' oh look, cake...

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It has been 800 years or so since a new layer of the dream realm formed, and in those 800 years a new visitor to Equis has been learning about the world from those inhabitants whom it can pull into it's realm.

Much to the surprise of Luna, this being is more than meets the eye and is certainly powerful, to an extent. Do they mean any harm, or do they have something more sinister planned? there is only one way to find out...

This story contains inspiration from bloodborne and in turn, H.P.Lovecraft with my own twists and changes to make it more my own.
spoilers for later chapters: this will be revealed as a human in equestria, though not via some kind of merchant or some such. death, gore, violence and swearing tags are for what will likely come in the future.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 35 )

This start looks really promising!! Can't wait to see what you make of it! Keep on writing :)

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Thank you so much! I was worried no ine would like it. I shall keep writing as soon as i can!

Keep up the great work

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Awww, thanks! I will try. I am trying to find the time to finish up the next chapter, will be out soon should all go well

Is he a draconequus or a dragon/wolf hybrid I don’t know

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Dragon/wolf hybrid. I didnt want to make a draconequus, too cliché for my tastes

Could be a fun story, looking forward to seeing more of this. I hope there will be more of a mystery build up. At the moment I think you might be rushing it a bit, but nothing really bad, maybe lean in on the investigation side so more.

Also, while I am very busy at the moment, if you are ever interested in commission another cover art, let me know I hope you will consider me here is a videos of my work I hope you like it.

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There are a lot of secrets left to uncover, ny friend. A lot of mystery to explore.
And yeah, i felt like i was rushing it, but i also wanted to get something more out so it didnt become stale.

And your art has definitely caught my interest. Let me know when you are a bit less busy and we can talk commission pricess, ideas etc

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sure thing dude, will be looking forward to it. I just got a few big ones to finish and then I should be available for you. and in the meanwhile I hope to keep on reading this story, and on that note take your time with the story, I hope you won't make updates everyday, because I have trouble keeping up with daily updates, so you could always create backlog just in case ideas run dry for a while or that you need put more work on your chapter.

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I cant update anything daily, so no need to worry about that xD it takes me a few days just to decide what i am going to do for the chapters and then i need to write them and edit them to the point i deem it at least acceotable so, at the most it would be once a week

Hmmm lots of potential with a solid start

Tracked

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Thank you kindly! I hope future chapters will live up to that potential

Pacing seems fine to me, I suppose the only way it could be perceived as rushed is if the main character’s origin isn’t explained properly as this story went with the, “start in the middle” route. Either way the premise is interesting and the description of the main character’s form sounds great! I’d love to see some more art of them or maybe some ponies reacting to how they look! :twilightsmile:

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Well the characters past is going to remain among the shadows for quite a while at the least, with some hints here and there (partially because I haven't git it all figured out yet xD) but i am glad that this has caught yourbinterest, and thanks for adding this to your favourites!

As for art, i do actually have quite a bit of art of them, but i, kinda prefer using descriptuons instead as it alliws yall to imagine them in your own ways

Huh, interesting. I'm liking this one. You have a lot of potential here.

As for changing your work, that's almost never a good idea. Readers really don't get updated on the changes so some may get lost if the previous chapter gets changed too much. The only time I think its a good Idea to make changes to published work, is if you performed a huge boner. Either writing yourself into a corner you can't get out of, or taking the story in a direction you realize was a horrible idea.

A good example of that was an Author who wrote a character cheating on a spouse, then spent far too long torturing the guy. To the point where it began negatively affecting the story. Lost almost 1/3 his readers. What he forgot is that stories have to bounce emotions. You can have dark, but you have to balance that with lighter moments. Making the story a emotional roller coaster is great writing.

What he did was four long chapters in a row that were all dark. It pulled the mood down and his story lost the "Fun" of reading it.

That's one of the few examples of a reason to redo a chapter or series of chapters.

Any way, great start and I'm looking forward to more.


The Monk
“Puberty was a curse for those inflicted with it, and boundless amusement for others who survived the process.” -Scarheart

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This, is some really nice advice. Thank you! I am hoping to get the next chapter out soon.
And i love how true that quote is xD

This is great can't wait for more!

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Awww, thank you! I have been hoping to get another chaoter out for a while but have yet to be happy with the chapter hopefully won't be much longer

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Well, if you find it confusing, then, re-read and know that so far, very little is based in the waking world of equestria, but is instead in the dream tealm. And dreams being dreams, are formed of the minds of those dwelling within

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Well, to be completely honest. The 1dt 2 chapters are purely to set up for what is to come

Keep up the great work 👍

oh i had forgotten about this one. always glad to see a story update.

YAY update!!
great chapter

Your fic description has some grammar errors in it, I'd suggest checking it.

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Will do, thanks for letting me know

Hum, not sure what is going on after so long sense the last update and the situation. I am guessing that the guy has been taking care of Luna's dream scape and apparently has a physical presence in Equestria, in ruins suggesting that humanity has come a gone and only old forgotten ruins left of them.

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The ruins much like most of the main character is remaining a mystery for now, but you are not wrong, not quite right, but not wholey wrong either

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And here i was hoping i might be able to leave it a bit longer before writing the next xhapter. Now people are finding this again haha. Hope you like what is to come

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This, is some really nice advice. Thank you! I am hoping to get the next chapter out soon.
And i love how true that quote is xD

I just randomly came across this story again and not being able to remember it, I gave it another read.

I don't suppose you're working on a new chapter? It really is a story here worth finishing.

Monk
"(On being born) Isn't it interesting that the very first act we all do, is a crime so heinous that it comes with a death sentence." -CyanFox

Hoping for more soon!

Will the story continue?

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