“ WEARS MY BABY!!! ” She demanded, screaming at the top of her lungs.

Um, wrong version of 'Where's'.

Other than that, looking good so far.

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Thanks for pointing that out. Fixing it now.

That leaves us with one question:

How are they going to find Spike without any lead they can follow?

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Don't worry. Me and NetherTempest have an idea for that.

Hmm feel like Spike should keep that anger, just because they promise you sex doesn't mean they could have been normal bunch and talked about it first. Talking likely would have worked perfectly.

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Traces of the sleeping dust would do it.

Well, at least Spike is being treated with good hospitality, but the girls are not dealing with his disappearance too well. Especially not Celestia.

“Well Eris is attending an Ogres & Oubliettes convention over at Manehattan and won’t be back for a few weeks.” Fluttershy responded nervously.

...So is Discord "Eris" in this story, or was Fluttershy referring to his "Cousin Eris" from the IDW comics?

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Yes, Eris is r63 Discord in this story.

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"Good hospitality"?! For the most part, probably.

But, are we gonna just ignore the mini-fight with the Jackal Guards, or that hostile tensions between him and that Jackal Queen ( Who is being very rude, "forceful", and even has a superiority complex.

Despite that she is talking to a Royal Prince, and the Son/Nephew of the Pony SUN and MOON Princesses! Not to mention has family and friends with the remaining princesses.

Sure, pissing off Twilight and her friends is bad. But, he is also friends with other important rulers; Ember, and Thorax/Pharynx. And also a hero to the Crystal Empire. )

So, they probably piss off four empires/kingdoms at the same time ( Equestria, Crystal Empire, Dragon and Changeling Kingdoms ) !!!!!!!!!!

So, that potential "Civil War", or even that "Dark Force" in the summary is probably the LEAST of their concerns.

🙄

Edit: Why do I keep getting dislikes?! I'm just stating out the obvious and facts here?

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Eh people hate criticism these days

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Okay, but this isn't like a "hateful" or "trolling" criticism against the story. I do like it, I just like to criticize the Character's very poor decisions in the story. Especially the Jackal Queen for pissing off the four main kingdoms I have listed before.

Mysteries of The Forgotten, The Zenthian Jackal, Are these M.I.B references?

insert gods kind Bastet or others

I'm not in any sort of rush or hurry to bug you about this story. So far, it's a great story. I can't wait to see what you do with it. Keep up the great work and stay safe.😄👍😄👍

Its a little off-topic, but I love seeing Celestia in this warrior princess mode and dress...I bet Spike is gonna be a bit embarrassed when Princess Celestia and Queen Samira meet--can you say perma-boner?? He is a hot blooded male after all...

If I may ask, are you planning to have more art for this story, and when the next chapter will released?

Nicely done

That armor!!!!

“Girls focus!” ——)Twilight yelled, “We need to figure out where Spike is. We looked everywhere for where he could be but still no sign of him.”

and a large pauldron with the shape of the sun on her left shoulder,

and, here, we, go.

For those curious about the image used at the end of this chapter, it's 684917 on Derpi.