Just another brony from Norway. I swear I have nothing against Twilight Sparkle.
This story is a sequel to What Dreams are There in Chaos?
An old statue. A chaotic day. Six mares unified against the odds. A new statue.
Luna missed Discord's return, and now it's time to pay him a visit, after everything changed but him.
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Screw you, Spearpoint.
I hope your waggling tongue gets you into trouble and you get passed over for a promotion.
I read the other two stories before this, but perhaps I need to read other stories of yours to understand this one better—maybe not—but I have not the foggiest idea of what this is culminating to.
The first story made me think we were taking an analysis of Discord's psychology, then the next story made me think we were gonna go for the same thing, but with Luna's side and the similarities therein. Finally, this story ended up confounding me. Are we still going for psychological analysis, is this gonna become a shipfic, both perhaps? Perhaps I'm only confused because I didn't get the impression at first that this would become a romance story.
Spear Point was an odd inclusion, but a fun one. I don't know if you'll use this character in the future, but even if you don't, I don't have a right to complain when some of my favorite books are written by J.R.R. Tolkien, king of needless information.
Also the sentence: "and I shall personally ensure that you envy Discord his imprisonment. Understand?"
Did you mean, "and I shall personally ensure that you envy Discord's imprisonment. Understand?"
Or, "and I shall personally ensure that you envy his imprisonment. Understand?"
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Wait? I'm confused? What did she do exactly?!
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She was the only witness to Luna's interaction with Discord. Any rumors springing up about it would have had to come from her, even if the story didn't outright say she told anyone.
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For what it's worth, the letter of the order was not a word to Celestia... But yes, she did tattle to her buddies, unaware that it'd snowball into a bigger rumor and make its way to the top. Not a great move, and I'm sure Luna is not very pleased with her.
I actually considered having an extra single-paragraph section at the very end about Luna retaliating somehow, but after What Dreams, any kind of retaliation that could be fun to put there would have really dark connotations. Plus it would mess with the structure.
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Your first mistake was assuming I have a plan.
It's always been lowkey a touch of both. This series sprang out of the thought that Luna and Discord would be able to relate on the whole "being sealed away for their villainy" front, so while it's somewhat about Luna and Discord's psychology it's also about their relationship as this becomes apparent to them.
Yeah, I wasn't expecting her either, but I like her. There's a good chance she'll resurface as a bit character or cameo in one story or another. Maybe Reflections in Black and Pink, which is going to have a fair number of chapters set in Canterlot from here on out? We'll see what opportunities arise.
I was recently crowned "king of overthinking minor characters" in a Discord server I'm in because of things like this. I think that's one of many points where my writing style is influenced by The Wheel of Time. Robert Jordan would go absolutely nuts with the bit characters sometimes, often giving them intricate personal lives even if the audience barely got to know them for a chapter, resulting in a total of 2782 named characters. I don't think I do it quite that much but Jordan may have increased my willingness to think that way.
My understanding is that the way I put this in the story is a valid if rare way of using the verb "envy". You can envy someone something, which means you want the something someone has. That said, I am a second language English speaker, so I could be wrong about that.
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You might be correct about that being a correct way to write that, but I'm hesitant to say it is—in fact, I rather doubt it; however as a first-language English speaker, I've certainly never witnessed it before, so if it is correct it is an obfuscated way to write a possessive. (and I'm also much too lazy to even look into it.) I would still steer clear of writing it the way you did.
You should probably write one of the ways I laid out before as that is a perfect way to use a possessive.
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It's correct but archaic, and therefore is correct for Luna to use. I'm pretty sure I used it for Luna myself one time, but I can't remember when.
This is a pony who still sometimes says "thee" and "thou", after all.
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Thanks for letting me know, I appreciate that! I figured that if it was correct, it would be archaic and obfuscated, so that's great to know.
And you're right, that is a pretty good way to write for Luna.