Chapter 2
Chapter 2
“Are we there yet?” Warrant Officer Eric Migzaiz asked with a yawn while looking at the blue ring form of hyperspace.
“At our current speed and course, about two more hours until we arrive at the Theta Site, Eric,” Max said.
“So that would be a no.”
“Affirmative.”
“Then why didn’t you say so?”
“Where is the fun in that?”
“You know even for an A.I. you have a weird sense of humor,” Eric said as he turned away from the view port thinking to himself how the hell he went from a lowly Specialist in the U.S. Army to a commander of a mobile Ancient defense platform. Oh, yeah, it is because I have an ATA gene about as strong as Colonel Sheppard’s, I so got sent to the Atlantis Expedition and had the BRIGHT idea to sit in the control chair of said the defense platform that my team found, thinking that the post was out of power. Which just so happened to be home to a clingy A.I. that hates the Wraith, which, as soon as that happened, decided to show up and attacks. When my team, who had left to get Rodney to shut off the force field that was keeping my rear in the chair, got back though the spacegate, the only thing they found was a bunch of debris that was what remained of the two Wraith Hives and four cruisers. They thought that I was dead, which to be fair I was thinking the same thing. But the Firestorm had jumped into hyperspace as per her last command, which I am glad that I was able to overrule.
Eric sighed and thought about all he had learned about the vessel he was once trapped on. It turned out that the platform’s name, when translated, was the Firestorm. It was semi-controlled by the onboard A.I. he called Max. She was built in the wearing days of the Ancient/Wraith war as the ultimate weapon against the Wraith. At three thousand meters long, she was built around the same particle weapon the Lagrangian Point satellites had, but it was far more powerful. She also had several smaller particle beam weapons with settings for both anti-ship and anti-fighter operations, with two drone weapon launchers to round out her armaments. She had the ability to build new drones to replace the ones used in battle, along with the ability to repair herself. In appearance, she looked like a more streamline version of Destiny, with wings added to the bow. They had just left the Sigma Site shipyards a few hours ago, which installed eight Asgard beam weapons, and Asgard beaming technologies technology. Even with three ZPMs and solar energy collected by diving into stars, she was still severely underpowered, so they also put in four naquadria enhanced Neutrino-ion generators to help with the power issues. For mobility she had a Stardrive similar to the type found on the Ancient city ships such as Atlantis. Also on board were special booths that looked like the transport booths on Atlantis, but really were synthesizers for food, clothing, and air; for more complicated things, there was a molecular construction device that was hooked up to the control chair on the bridge. While for defense purposes she had a shield similar to one on the Ancient city ships that took up most of the power.
Of the control systems, she was controlled by a control chair. Max had some control, but her programing limited her to self-defense and repair. When someone with the ATA gene was in the chair she could have complete control, but could be overruled by the user which she imprinted on, allowing only that person to gain control. She could overrule it to allow other people to use to chair, which is why he could be, and why he was in, command. Though she did say that she would allow Colonel Sheppard or General O’Neill to use the chair, but only in emergencies, because she trusted Eric not to lose his cool when she does, which sealed the deal in choosing a commander for the Firestorm, earning him a promotion to Warrant Officer from Sergeant, he was promoted at Atlantis shortly after he arrived.
That was very true fact about the soldier known as Eric Migzaiz. He had an extremely long fuse developed over time, caused by his speech impairment, his small size, five-six and one hundred and thirty pounds, and he was picked on mercilessly when he was younger. Add in the fact that he was in foster care since he was three and was adopted at ten; all this did not do him any favors in the social department. He had both brown hair and eyes, and he was the type of guy to disappear in large crowds only to show up when you least expected it. He joined the Army right out of high school as an artillery firefinding radar operator but was transfered to the Stargate program when his ATA gene was shown to be so strong. He was sent to Atlantis as a sensor operator and as a backup control chair operator. He occasionally went out on missions because staying on Atlantis with nothing to do got boring real fast. It was one of these missions that got him in the situation he found himself in.
He sighed again as he thought about the current situation on Earth. The entire planet was in a middle of a reformation caused by the Stargate being made public in the worst way possible, an attack on Earth itself. The Lucian Alliance decided that the best possible way to stop the Tau’ri from interfering with their plans was to attack at the heart of the matter, which was Earth. So with a fleet of twenty Ha’tak motherships and an Ori Mothership that they somehow got their hands on, they attacked. Which was a bad idea on their part for two reasons; very good reasons. The first reason was that the Firestorm had just made into the system after finally getting enough power to cross the galactic divide, and was able to help the newly repaired and upgraded Prometheus to defend Earth. The Prometheus was heavily damaged by the Ori weapon over the planet Tegalus and barely made it back to Earth. Her repairs were delayed by the urgent need for the more powerful Daedalus-class battlecruisers, but was fast tracked when the Wraith super Hive showed up in Earth orbit. She was upgraded with new beaming tech, new engines, two Asgard beam weapons on her wings, and the newly developed nuclear rail gun that shot a nuclear warhead at Mach two that replaced the missiles, though she still had several setup for anti-fighter operations. The NRG, as it was called, was developed in response to the ineffectiveness of the missile launcher systems caused by the missiles being shot out of the sky. The NRG also increased the number of nukes that the Prometheus could hold from twelve, to about a hundred. It proved to be very effect, for she destroyed four Goa’uld motherships with it alone out of the eight that she destroyed. After the show the Prometheus put on, more of her class was ordered with the upgrades. The Firestorm destroyed the Ori Mothership with her primary weapon and took out another eight Ha’taks before Atlantis got involved and destroyed the last four, but the battle was not without casualties.
The cities Hong Kong, Los Angeles, Chicago, London, New York, Moscow, D.C., Paris, and Berlin, to name a few, were heavily damage. Over ten million people were killed during the attack. A Ha’tak crashed into a small town thirty minutes east of St. Louis, which was Eric’s home town; his entire family was killed in the explosion. It took an entire day for Homeworld Command to get back in contact with him. After he stated who he was, he learned of what had happened. Every ship and all SG teams were ordered to return to Earth.
Earth’s allies also sent ships render aid and support. The Free Jaffa Nation sent six of their new redesigned Ha’taks with healers; the Travelers sent one of their Aurora class ships that they have recently found. Even the Wraith, at least those who been cured of their hunger by Todd, sent one of their hive ships to help. Thankfully for them they arrived last, about a week after it happened which gave Stargate Command enough time to explain that these Wraith were allies and not to be shot at. With that in mind though, they still kept a few ships between both the Firestorm and the Hive, just in case.
It was crazy down on the surface for weeks as the public panicked, but they soon realized that their governments had been doing this behind their backs for close to a decade and a half, and that this was the first in a long series of attempts to attack Earth that succeeded. After everything was said and done, the public wanted blood. Which lead to the Alliance’s second mistake, they united Earth. Originally it was a couple thousand Tau’ri fighting them. Now, now it was close to nine billion whom all wanted their heads on a gold with silver inlay platter. Once this happened and Earth’s allies realized that the Tau’ri had been fighting with a small fraction of their total strength, they went to a “safer” orbit… around Jupiter.
The first thing that happened was the creation of the Tau’ri Council, as it was called. It dealt with everything about the Stargate, the defense of Earth, dealing with their allies, basically anything to do with dealing with other planets. It was stationed on Atlantis which was moved with the gate from Cheyenne Mountain, to the Antarctica Ancient outpost which turned out to be a drone weapon factory power by geothermal energy. All the world's militaries retrained themselves to fight off world threats and several defense satellites were put in orbit, while shipyards were built in several countries to speed up production. The Lucian Alliance was about to figure out why the Tau’ri were named the Fifth Race by the Asgard.
During this time the Firestorm was moved to the Sigma Site to receive her upgrades. While that was happening, Eric was debriefed on what happened to him and what had happened while he was away. He was given his promotion to Warrant Officer so he was able to command the Firestorm without going to officer school for six months, but it was stretching the regulations a lot.
Now he was on his way to the Theta Site to pick up his new crew. He just knew that the majority of the crew would be scientists to study the Firestorm because what was the use of a crew on a ship that practically ran itself. That and the personnel files told him all he needed to know. So he had Max take the long way to the Site to delay the storm of questions that he barely survived the first time around, and was not looking forward to a second time. He knew most of them were going to be about the level of the telepathic link to Max enhance by a watch like device which was made to suit his unique brainwave pattern and to communicate on an instinctual level with him.
He then felt the deck give a small shudder as they dropped out of hyperspace. “Max, it’s been barely fifteen minutes since I asked how long it was to the Theta Site, let alone two hours. What’s up?” he asked as he made his way to the control chair just in case it was needed.
“Look outside,” was Max’s answer. He did and his jaw dropped.
“What is it?” he asked as the chair reclined to give him a better view of the hologram of the object that popped up. As he studied it, it reminded him of the Mass Effect Relays from the game Mass Effect. It was sitting in near orbit of a star.
“I don’t know.”
“Doing a deep scan of it should clear up some questions.”
“The rings in the middle have an amount of naquadah consistent with the Stargates,” Max said.
“Get closer and contact the Council, they’ll want to know about this,” Eric said as he tried to decipher what it was from the sensor readings.
As they got to within a few hundred meters of the device he noticed that it was roughly about a thousand meters long and a hundred meters tall and it was of Ancient make. Then he noticed something that shocked him. It was powering up, and fast.
“Max back us up. Whatever this thing is, it’s powering up and I don’t feel like being on the wrong end of an Ancient super weapon,” Eric ordered while he raised the shields, just in case.
As the Firestorm reversed course, the rings lit up and activated the same way as a standard Stargate. As soon as they did, a ripple in space appeared and started to pull the Firestorm to it at blinding speeds. Before he knew what happened, he blacked out.
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Okay, you might want to go back and fix those few things I told you to remove. Other than that, looks like you used the fixes. Actually, you want me to just remove stuff on the shared file?
~Lexicon, Editor for The Sixth Race
1267331
Yes and some might be from the move from docs to here. Thanks for the help.
1267357
Not a problem. I enjoy this story, and being able to help out makes me feel a bit excited that I can make a story a little better.
Here is the second chapter of the Sixth race. Edit by Lexicon. This chapter was going to be longer and explain the thousand year gape. That question WILL be explain or at least make more sense next chapter. But I hit a block, so I decide to give you this. Any mistakes are my fault cause I had to rewrite all the stuff in Italics, and sorry Lexicion for the lak of the heads up about the posting.
As he studied it, it reminded him of the Mass Effect Relays from the game Mass Effect.
Erg... not the best way to try and describe it. Sure, it's easier to do it this way, but I'd prefer an actual description
What 1267473 said.
You still haven't sold me yet on this but it looks promising, so at the same time I'm not giving up on it either.
Not much has happened yet but it seems to be getting there.
Holy crap this sounded awesome. Needs some minor editing though.
so... a Mass relay is actually an ancient stargate? SO COOL
Honestly, a Railgun that shoots a slug at Mach2 is fairly slow. Missiles go faster than Mach2 normally. Need to up that # a bit.
Remember, most rifles shoot bullets at speeds in excess of Mach1. Railguns are supposed to be at Hyper Mach speeds, Mach 6-10 or more probably, especially considering space combat, though lord knows the capital ships engage at near point-blank ranges...
Okay, I have a few problems with this. First off, the Prometheus was destroyed. We saw it fucking explode, it's gone. It sucks, but get over it, move on!
A Nuclear Rail Gun? I'm pretty sure railguns don't work that way, but it's science fiction, so I don't really care. But Mach 2? Here's the problem, it's a space ship. The term 'Mach' refers to the speed of sound, which is a moot point in a vaccuum. Rating speeds in terms of 'Mach' is meaningless in space.
Finally, the terms "Asurans" and "Tau'ri." "Tau'ri" is the Goa'uld name for the people of Earth. But it was never used by the people of Earth. So I don't think they would suddenly start using that term now. And "Asurans" was never used on the show, they were always called Replicators, or Pegasus Galaxy Replicators. Also, they were wiped out, both groups.
Gotta work on your continuity man.
Though I love the world building. Dropping it all like a ton of bricks isn't the worst way to do it, but I would have weaved it into the narrative as necessary.
Comparing the Firestorm to the Destiny, not sure it works. First off, I doubt he ever saw the Destiny, and why would the Ancients suddenly decide to bring back a several-million-year-old refuelling technology?
I can't wait to see where this goes.
1274704
Your have several good points. So here is my explantions. First off, the word Tau'ri, from my research, means the first ones, and the Goa'uld start calling us that because we start to be such a problem, I figure it will be use because of that meaning, and the fact that it means the first ones strokes alot of egos in power. The reason why I call the Pegasus Galaxy Replicators the Asurans is because every fic that has them call them that and this which is my main source of information calls them that. The fact that both the Promethues and the Asurans are still around? Well in the inmotal words of Adam Savage "I reject your reality and substitute my own." 1269718 The rail gun launches a Nuclear Weapon at the target like a catapelt. So it can't shoot in at a to high of speed or the nuke will come apart.
1275069
Yeah, I know the Stargate Wiki called them that, as well as every fan fic, but they're all wrong. They never called them that on the show. The main reason they call them that on the Wiki is to differentiate them from the original Replicators, and because they called their planet 'Asuras.'
Anyone in-universe, would call them the Replicators.
So you decided to resurrect the Prometheus and Niam's Faction. I'm gonna warn you of something that I hope I don't need to warn you of. To go against the show's canon so drastically, there had better be a payoff. A reason, within the plot, to do this. Otherwise, it's just pure fanwank, and that's never good.
1275456
Actually, it's more of working within the canon. Remember the mirror? And the black hole incident that sent all the other SG-1 teams to the same reality? It's called an alternate reality, which was shown to exist within the show. It's easily plausible. It easily explains the Prometheus, and a reason that the humans might refer to themselves as the Tau'ri (other than the fact that a number of others in our galaxy know Earth humans at that.), as well as the Asurans. It's entirely plausible that they referred to themselves as that when speaking to the humans stationed on Atlantis. Or possibly Weir used the word.
All of this can be done within the canon still, due to two episodes, both involving alternate reality.
I just proved half your argument invalid, using only two episodes.
1277547
Yes, but I think it's safe to assume this story takes place in the prime reality.
Also, why would they have two names for the same race?
You know, even in the prime reality, there is a way to bring back Niam's faction, (though Atlantis would have little motivation to actually go through with it). I just hope there's a reason he included that.
1277588
Ah, but you see, there is an alternate reality tag. The question, however, is whether it's for the ponies (which, considering the time skip, may or may not be needed) or for the Stargate end of things.
1277599
What!? *looks* Oh, fuck the tags. Perhaps we should just ask the original author. But if that is the case, it's extremely cheap and renders the whole story meaningless since it takes place in a universe we don't care about.
Why throw a story into an alternate universe, unless it's necessary to the plot?
Goddamnit. I was denied the contact scene. Get on it, author!
Other than grammar, the story is good. I look forward to seeing where this goes.
1279104
Trust me, chapter 1 is way worse than chapter 2. I'm working as the editor, so if you spot anything I missed, point it out, so I can keep a better eye out.
Okay, this chapter specifically throws up a bunch of warning signs.
1. Original character with an ill-conceived backstory. ("He's fucking awesome and special")
2. 90% elaboration content. Just walls and walls of "Here's what you might don't know about Stargate." That's the absolute worst way to integrate information. You need to convey things on a need to know basis and blend it within your story instead of a one chapter data dump that nobody will enjoy reading.
3. Completely unnecessary mention of Mass Effect. When you're making references, they have to be clever so people who know what you're talking about notice it instead of "There's this video game called Mass Effect. It's kind of like this scenario."
Also, in regards to the previous chapter, you mention Nyx, an original character from another story, but it seems like she's in a completely different character. I haven't looked too deeply into it, but if you have indeed done this, you could just have easily put anyone else (like Cadence or something) into this role and nothing would change.
Dat plot dump.
While I understand that a lot has happened in the year since the end of SGU, a lot of this isn't directly relevant, and presenting it all at once is harmful to the story. Eric's backstory is also setting him up as a boring Marty Stu (he's super special and look his family is dead -- tragic!)
The bit about moving to a safer orbit around Jupiter was hilarious, though.
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Yup, that sure looks like a heavily damaged ship.
I understand you are planning a rewrite but I just wanted to read what you currently had.
The second chapter is practically skippable, because info dumps.
As far as I am concerned the technology went into completely boring direction: Command chairs, ZPMs, Asgard beam weapons. Please, humans don't even know how to build those things
10087012
This requires some editorial efforts, on the purely literal stage, including spelling and grammar.
Otherwise it is entertaining and informative enough.