Chapter One
The Sixth Race
In the depths of space a bluish light with a white center appeared, and streaking out of the light a ship of war came into being. The starship looked like a diamond with the last quarter of it cut off. On the bow was a symbol of a half sun and moon with dark green flames surrounding it, sitting on what looked to be two crossed arrows. It was a ship of the United Eponian Nations, the Ponyville.
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Captain Twilight Sparkle sighed as she made her way to the bridge, her hooves making a muffled clop-clap sound thanks to the rubber shoes that were standard issue to all the creatures that had hooves, from ponies to the changelings. She was mentally compiling a checklist of things that positively had to be done in the unexplored system her flagship jumped into.
‘Okay we have to do a complete sensor sweep for any hostiles or hazards, have Dash ready to launch to investigate if anything is picked up,’ thought Twilight as got on the turbolift to the bridge. ‘Then I need to write a report to Grand Admirals Luna and Nyx about anything of interest in this system. As Fluttershy would say, “Yay.”’
“Captain on deck,” bellowed an ensign as Twilight stepped out of the lift and onto the bridge.
“As you were,” she said as she made her way to her seat.
“Anything on the sensors, Rarity?”
“Negative, Captain,” the white coated unicorn with a purple mane and tail said.
“Good, let’s get the sentry satellite launched and on station so we can head home,” she said as several of the bridge crew looked at each other in silent celebration. It had been well over the usual six months since they left the star port ,and everypony was getting antsy to go home.
“Seven months since we left and a hundred years since the invention of the hyperdrive, and the only sentient life that we’ve seen is a bunch of bug-lizard like things that suck the life out of you, and then eat what’s left of the body, bones and all. Oh, and the fact that they also have spacefaring capabilities means that they could show up at Epona’s doorstep isn’t helpful either,” her Executive Officer (XO) Trixie complained with good reason, for the UEN was at war with the lizard-bugs known as the Senris, and some allies would be both useful and helpful.
“Which is why we’re out here planting these satellites. This system is one of the dozens of systems that the Senris have to stop in to recharge their shields if they want their attack to be anywhere close to successful, if they don’t want to be cut down by the defense platforms and the fleet in orbit. The satellites will give an advance warning to allow us enough time to call in reinforcements,” Twilight said as she called up the status of her ship and got ready to write her report. “Besides, they need the coordinates to the planet first, and with the Core Protocols in place, that isn’t happening.” The Core Protocols made it treason for an interstellar map to fall in Senris hooves and all ships and outposts were under orders to delete the coordinates to any major bases, Epona included.
“I’m sure we may find some friendly aliens sometime. Remember before the war started the exploration teams did find outposts on several planets with ring like devices that were made out an unknown material that’s virtually immune to all harm. Something had to have made those things,” a green unicorn said knowingly from the science station.
“And how old did those there teams say those things were again?” An orange earth pony said she waked onto the bridge wearing coveralls and a Stetson hat. “Several thousand, if not millions of years old. Ah don’t think that that race maybe alive anymore Lieutenant Lyra.”
“You may be right Applejack, but you never know. How’s the number two reactor coming along?”
“She’s comin’ along good, but she ain’t in specs yet,” replied Applejack.
“By specs do you mean the Navy’s specs or your OCD specs?” asked a white unicorn with a neon blue mane from the comms station.
“My specs! You know that that’s the reason why this ship out powers some of the battleships in the fleet. And this ain’t a cruiser mind you, and Ah don’t have OCD, Scratch”
“Easy there you two, or do I have to put you two into the brig again to cool down?” a griffin said from tactical.
“Gilda honey, just because you are the head of security doesn’t mean that you can put everypony into the brig as you feel like it,” Rarity said without looking up from the sensor scope.
“But I am going for the record!” the griffin shot back, “Only ones that I need are you, the XO, the pink thing, a couple of the changelings, and the captain, and I’ll beat the record.”
“AND THEN WE PARTY!” said a pink blur that was the morale officer, Pinkie Pie, as she popped up in-between the console and Gilda, who then picked her up and dropped the pink mare behind her. The rest of the bridge crew looked on in amusement at the mare’s antics before returning to work.
Meanwhile the Captain futilely tried and failed to wrap her head around her friend’s latest breaking of the laws of physics. ‘Dammit I thought I promised myself alooong time ago that I would not try to figure out how she does that. It leads to too much suffering,’ she thought as she tried to refocus on her report that she was writing for the admirals. ‘After all, it is just Pinkie being Pinkie.’
“Well you can start planning a party right now Miss Pie ‘cause we are done and officially able to head home once we check that the satellites are all working up to par.” Trixie said from the science station where she had moved to during the banter that happened.
“GREAT! Hey Trixie, do you want to do your magic show again?” Pinkie asked as the ships XO paled.
“I thought that I said that was a one-time deal,” Trixie said in a forced voice. “That Time,” as it was called by the ones who know what happened, was when Trixie had a little too much to drink and it consisted of lightning, a processed power cable (not live thankfully), her going on about the Great and Powerful Trixie, and a frighteningly realistic illusion of an Ursa Major.
That incident was why any being in the navy that can wield magic had to wait ten months, to the standard six months for everyone else, to drink. She was lucky that Twilight was Admiral Nyx’s person student and a good friend of Princess Celestia, and was able to pull some strings because the worst she got out of it with was the subtraction of several dozen promotion points. Though being Admiral Luna’s student probably helped too. She was slated for her own command, but that was pushed back by several years.
“Now, silly it wasn’t that...”
“INCOMING HYPERSPACE WINDOWS, AND THEY ARE NOT OURS.”
“Crap! Get the shields up! Have the fighters ready to launch! Lyra, I want the types and the number of ships! Gilda, I want options! Applejack, get your rear back in engineering and get the hyperdrive ready to jump! Scratch, contact Fleet Command; let them know what’s going! Move ponies!” Twilight barked out as her ship got ready for a fight.
“Captain! I’m reading two Baseships and four destroyers and they’re firing.” Rarity shouted this from her station.
‘Double crap.’ Twilight thought as the Ponyville shook as the shields took a couple milliseconds too long to come online. The Ponyville was a Guardian-class battle cruiser, the workhorse of the fleet. At a length of six hundred meters, she could easily handle the three hundred meter long destroyers with one of her two main magik cannons that focused energy into a tight beam of concussive force. Add the forty medium railguns, six energy torpedo launchers, two hunderd anti-starfighter missile launchers, forty fighters, and tough shields, and she was a force to be reckoned with. But the eight thousand meter long needle shaped baseships, with numerous energy weapons, were out of her league.
“Damage report,” Trixie ordered as the shields started taking the punishment the Senris ships dished out.
“The hyperdrive’s been damaged, and it’ll take about forty minutes to repair,” Applejack’s voice said from the speakers.
“We don’t have forty minutes AJ. We’ll last about fifteen minutes against those Baseships. Helm take evasive maneuvers and launch fighters,” Twilight ordered. The Ponyville had inert driven engines that allowed quick turns and high speed acceleration in any direction without the use of chemical fuels, freeing up space for more armaments or cargo. “Communications, please tell me you got through.”
“I think so Captain, but I’m not positive.”
“Keep transmitting hopefully somepony will pick it up,” Gilda said as she started to return fire with the ships weapons.
Little did she know that somepony didn’t pick it up but someone did.
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I'm intrigued. Caught me with that Daedalus picture.
Gonna have to explain that thousand years though, unless I missed something.
I will withold my judgment until your next chapter.
Some mistakes and awkwardly written sentences but within my tolerances.
Also what first post said
Hmm...
1213090 yeah I need a prereader. This is my first story but I'm working on it.1212895 And that thousand years that is going to be a surprise. Hint: the only alicorns are the princesses and Nyx think about that.
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You actually referenced Past Sins? Okay. And I'm gonna guess stasis or something.
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Its something. And why don't the what-call-thems work on your phones.
FIRE ZE MISSLES!
-NopeChuckTesta
You caught my eye with the picture, and the fact that you actually used the word Tau'ri. I'll read this later, but if done right, this could be good.
Oh, and it's going on my Faves list. If it goes to my read later, I'm essentially giving it a death sentence there. There are over 100+ stories stacked up.
1213812 Ahaha same here
USS Deadelus always comes to save the day, she's the most powerful ship in the fleet of the humans, I wonder if the Wraith will make an appearance, hopefully the replicators don't, they always seem to fuck things up badly with first contact. Oo-oo! what if the Deadelus is in the same system and sees the weapons fire and comes to the rescue? I am starting to sound a lot like pinkie now
EDIT: I always have a bad nerdgasm whenever you mix SGA and MLP together
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It has both SGA and SG-1 in it, but not until Chapter 3 but they be there and yes to wraith and one word Asuran. And maybe standerd replicators no stargate fic is good with out them.
1214979 hmm, isn't this battle of ponies versus the instectoids is like the humans versus Ori right?
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Try human vs. wraith.
1215083 the Wraith are technologically inferior to the Humans, Wraith have no shields and their power generators are inefficient, Humans are essentially just holding back on killing the Wraith outright
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True but five Deadelus class ships (all we built is six but one was destory by the Ori) vs forty plus hives not counting who knows how many cruisers equal a massacre for both side with with the south pole weapons platform and Atlantis throwning their weight.
Looks good, will read.
A few notes, try to avoid things like:
I am sure we may find some friendly aliens sometime. Remember before the war started the exploration teams did find outposts on several planets with ring like devices that was made out an unknown material that are virtually immured to all harm. Something had to made those things
The underlined part isn't needed and sounds awkward, who talks like that?
Also things like:
At a length of four hundred meters she could easily handle the three hundred meter long destroyers with one of her two main magik cannons that focus the energy into a tight beam of concussive force
Here there is enough information to raise a lot of questions, but not enough to answer any of them.
Like: Why are they magic cannons? Are we talking arcane/classic magic or magi-tech? Why does it need to be said that they focus the energy into a tight beam, how else would it work? Why do I need to know right now that it's concussive force as opposed to thermal or photonic?(btw, concussive force doesn't really mean much in space where there is no atmosphere for the concussion to propagate through.)
lastly (for the things that bugged me the most) please please please don't say things like energy torpedoes, there is no such thing as pure energy so if something has to be called an energy-something, please pick a reasonable type of energy, even arcane-energy.
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Thanks for the help some of the tech just as the magik cannons and energy torpedoes are going to be explain later and that one sentence I was trying to describe the Stargate, one of them was thrown into a star and survive. I need a prereader mind being one?
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I could try, I've never done that before.
FYI I'm starting school in a few weeks so I don't know if I'll still have time then.
SG-1 in Equestria would kick ass.
Well talk about everyone being there, but what happened To Cadance?
And Twilight being Nyx's student ... hmmm
Lastly, Epona? By any chance is this an "End of Ponies" shoutout I see here?
I'll be waiting for the next few chapters as well, this story piqued my curiosity.
"'As Fluttershy would say, Yay.'"
...and any interest I had in this story died with this line.
Wait a second, if this is supposed to take place a thousand years after FiM, why is Twilight still alive?
So, does Trixie ever shut up!? Complaining about the Senris is all well and good, but on the bridge!? Doesn't do good for crew morale.
All the crew introductions are cheezy and contrived. As well as the mention of the Stargates.
Not bad though.
1246977 You can write most of you critcisms as inexperaince in writing and as for Twilight, hell most of the cast for want of a better term, who said that they are the same characters as in the show, and on that note I believe that each cutie mark is unique, but that will came into play later. I will try and explain it in the next chapter.
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Each cutie mark is unique? So...what about Doctor Whooves and Colgate?
So you're new to writing huh? Well keep at it. The only way to get better is to fucking write. It works for me.
1250022 They are the exceptent that proves the rule
. Thanks for the support, here's a stash 
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Weren't all the Replicators killed? It's been a few months since I watched SGA, and I know the SG-1 ones are dead. Unless somebody made more. Or are you going Alternate Universe with the Stargate side of things? I mean, it's been proven in SG-1 for the franchise.
And you need an proper editor for the grammar. I can easily do the job for the most part, as long as you have a way to get the story to me.
This needs a bit of editing