Bow Hothoof's R-A-I-N-B-O-W

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Autumnblazelover61

Autumnblazelover61 #1 · Feb 28th, 2021 · 5 · · Family Fun ·

Yes! Yes! YES! This story is just as amazing as I expected. The part where her mom was cheering Rainbow on was especially hilarious.

AndwhatIseeisme

AndwhatIseeisme #2 · Mar 1st, 2021 · 3 · · Family Fun ·

Thanks. That's basically the scene that the rest of this fic sprung from. It just seemed like such a fun mental image that I wanted to write it down.

Wolftamer54

Wolftamer54 #3 · Mar 1st, 2021 · 3 · · Family Fun ·

Pretty good, all things considered. Shameless clop, short and to the point. But still fairly effective. Everypony felt in character, Dash with her arrogance, and Windy and Bow in their support of her. The bait and switch reaction was also somewhat fun, going from “oh shit” to “oh yeah” like that. Solid enough sex scenes, certainly enjoyable. Honestly, no real harm in leaving Scootaloo out. The little stinger at the end is pretty funny, and it still leaves something to the imagination. This may not be the best story, and I think I have read some others from you that I like more, but for how quickly you banged this out, it’s a pretty impressive feat. Nice work.

AndwhatIseeisme

AndwhatIseeisme #4 · Mar 1st, 2021 · 3 · · Family Fun ·

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Thanks. I always like to hear that my writing is in character for the ponies I'm using, that's usually one of my top priorities when writing. Taking these characters and transplanting them into sexual situations while keeping their core personalities in line with the show is half the fun of making clop.

Azure Fang

Azure Fang #5 · Mar 1st, 2021 · 4 · · Family Fun ·

and a family that really needs to hear of closing the goddamn door

No! It's much better to face these kinds of things with a sense of poise and rationality!

AndwhatIseeisme

AndwhatIseeisme #6 · Mar 1st, 2021 · 2 · · Family Fun ·

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Thanks for chiming in.

Wolftamer54

Wolftamer54 #7 · Mar 1st, 2021 · 2 · · Family Fun ·

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Oh yeah, that's definitely a big part. It's always nice to get a sense of who is having sex, not just what they're doing. And I think you did that pretty well here.

*Rainbow Dash*

*Rainbow Dash* #8 · Mar 2nd, 2021 · 2 · · Family Fun ·

needs a sequel! something say that leads to this: https://derpibooru.org/images/2539253?q=uploader_id%3A217509 :D:D:D:D:D
Soarin finds out Dash's secret after drinking to much cider one night, but to Dash's surprise he finds it a huge turn on! and also Scootaloo joins is as well!

Shakespearicles

Shakespearicles #9 · Mar 3rd, 2021 · 3 · · Family Fun ·

The comedy tag is well earned.

AndwhatIseeisme

AndwhatIseeisme #10 · Mar 4th, 2021 · 3 · · Family Fun ·

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Thanks for the praise, but you've got my mind spinning on whether it's a good or bad sign that my stories are the only ones you've commented on in this contest. I'm awaiting final judgment with anxious dread.

Lunatic God