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Twilight Sparkle has the best friends a pony could ask for, and her stay in Ponyville has allowed her to spend plenty of time with all of them. But when one of her friends begins to see her as more than just a companion, will she be able notice the hints? Or will she break her admirer's heart and pit friend against friend without even realizing it?

If you like this story, check out its sequel: Two Paths.

Chapters (13)
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Comments ( 270 )

interesting :ajsmug::pinkiehappy: keep it UP :)

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Thanks! :twilightblush: I'm getting into the groove of college, but I wrote a few chapters over the summer, so I'll keep working ahead and try to get a semi-regular schedule going for this.

I fell a shit storm coming :unsuresweetie:
definitively because of oblivious Twilight :twilightsheepish:

1212674 That's good to know :twilightsmile:, just take your time:rainbowwild:, what you do in college?! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Tagged and watched.
Enjoyin' it so far!

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I'm studying political science, and I've got a heck of a lot of extracurriculars lined up. I'm blocking off at least a few hours every week for this, though, so hopefully I can crank out chapters at a decent rate.

Could use a bit of paragraph spacing(indents or newlines) to be easier on the eyes, but great!

"“Howdy, Twilight. How’s it goin’?” she asked genially, shaking her friend’s hand and leading her into the restaurant."

Shouldn't that say 'hoof'? Only mistake I found, the rest of it was a good read. Oblivious Twi is best Twi! :twilightoops:

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Thanks for pointing that out! It looked different in the story editor, so I didn't notice until you said something. I'll fix that right away.

Looks like its gunna be a good one :pinkiehappy: nothing better than a love triangle to catch the eyes :ajsmug:

Most intriguing. :ajsmug: I support Twi/Jack as well as Twi/Shy, so this should be a very interesting tale. :twilightsmile:

This looks very promising. I like! :twilightsmile:

:yay::twilightblush::ajsmug:
Haven't seen a story with this kind of triangle:rainbowkiss:
Liked and Fav'd for upcoming ship-nanigans:rainbowwild:
(secretly hoping for TwiJack+TwiShy ending to triple the fun:twilightblush:)

I like where this is going and I can't wait to see more of it. Here's hoping that you have extra chapters already written and you're just spacing them out to torment us.

Minor correction: "The sun was continuing on its log descent", I'm assuming that was supposed to be "long descent".

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Fixed! And I do have some chapters written, plus I intend to set aside at least a few hours a week for writing. At the very least, I'd like to do a chapter a week, hopefully more.

Thanks for the positive feedback, everybody. Hopefully this story stays high-quality throughout. Even I don't know where it'll end up at this point, so it should be fun to see who ends up with who.

Interesting triangle, looking forward to reading more. :pinkiehappy:

So, this chapter doesn't really have a ton of happy to balance the awkwardness and unpleasantness, but don't worry, next chapter will be more upbeat. Feedback, as always, is appreciated, and if anyone is interested in being a prereader for me, PM me and we can work something. I could use someone to help with quality control.

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And evidently that chapter didn't properly post, and I just realized that. :facehoof:
Well, I meant to publish this last weekend, but I guess late is better than never. I should published (and I mean actually publish) another chapter this weekend, too.

Damn it Twi, get back in there! And Flutters, grow a pair, didn't Iron Will teach you anything?!

I fear Fluttershy might get hurt in this fic! IF such a thing happens, I shall come for your virtual head!

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She said no? :fluttershysad:

I heard go! :flutterrage:

Aww, poor Fluttershy.:fluttercry:

Looking forward to more!

Darn, poor Flutters just couldn't pluck up the courage to tell her.... :fluttercry:

Youch, this was brutal. Can't wait for the weekend update!

Ouch........my heart......she be broken in sympathy for Fluttershy.

sad crying Fluttershy.... so many feels... :fluttercry:

Twilight, that was a dick move.

You should know better than to mess with Fluttershy. You don't want to see her when she's sad, do you? :fluttercry:

That was surprisingly crafty and manipulative of you, Twilight. Nice avoidance techniques. I wonder if Rainbow Dash will get in on the loop and how much chaos and misunderstanding she would throw into the mix.

Twilight, didn't we learn something about clever, roundabout plans? :trollestia:

Eagerly awaiting further developments!

Two corrections:

"I can't imagine she cares must for propriety and the like." - should be "much"

"One of the bunnies. He has me a little concern; that's all." - should be "concerned"

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You, sir, are a gentleman and a scholar. :moustache: Thanks! :pinkiehappy:

Why do I get the feeling there's going to be some massive misinterpretations down the line?

Poor Flutters.:fluttercry:

Ow. This hurts me... but I must read on!

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

Dagnabit Fluttershy! You've got to talk to somepony about these things! Argalurgalurr! (I can't growl)
Very interesting. Definitely keeping an eye on this!

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

Late night posts are magic, apparently. If I'm really feeling productive this weekend, y'all might get a second chapter on Sunday, but no promises. As always, feedback is appreciated, and I hope you guys enjoy it.

interesting i will fav to see where this goes

'Jackie' is likely a nickname that either AJ's parents or RD used for her at some stage.... Based on it being grief rather than emotional trauma, I'd have to go with the parent theory. :unsuresweetie:

Anyway, nice work with this. :twilightsmile: Nice to see AJ appreciating Twilight in a new light, though AJ's self sacrificing nature will likely prove to be a problem for any potential romance. :twilightoops:

Regardless, an excellent read. :pinkiesmile:

I've always enjoyed AJ's and Twilight's relationship on the show... There's nothing romantic about it (obviously), but it's noticeable that they rely on each other a lot and are the first ones they turn to when they need help. As such, I really enjoyed their interactions this chapter... I think their enthusiasm for working together came through, as well as their quirks and differences.

Weeeee. This is awesome! I'm giggling like an imbecile over here and I couldn't be happier! Some excellent allusion to AJ's past in here, enough that you kind of think you know what happened, but just maybe, just maybe you don't. Loving it.

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!!

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Who knows? We might find out which theory is correct by the time this story is through.

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I'm glad to hear it. I always feel like the two are a natural match as friends in terms of being hard-working, dedicated ponies. We'll see if that leads to anything more soon enough, I'd expect...

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I'm so glad you're enjoying it. I had a great time writing this chapter.

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And what a prize they are! :twilightsmile:

Loved this chapter! The pacing and buildup are perfect. Twilight is often portrayed in fanfics as clueless outside of booksmarts. Here, it's more believable: inexperience with romance plus the fact that no one's sure she's into mares keeps the disbelief in check.

Minor corrections:

"Fluttershy was acting like me moving one was the end of the world" - should be "moving on"

"I should be thank you, really." - should be "be thanking you" or "I should thank you, really."

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Once again, you come to my rescue. :pinkiehappy: Thanks, and I'm glad you're liking it.

Early updates? :pinkiegasp: What is this madness?
This chapter was a ton of fun to write, so I hope it's at least partly as fun to read. In case you don't notice, I tried making a funny in there, so let me know if that worked at all. :twilightsheepish:
Bonus points for anyone who spots the Doctor Who reference.

I predict nothing but hurt feelings. Big Mac is the only one in the right.

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