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EpicGamer10075


Gamer, Writer, (Aspiring) Artist, and really fricking tired. Commissions open.

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Pretty good story

Doesn't this need to be rated M?

10706734
Yeah, I just got a bit confused with the non-graphicness of it, not to mention trying to wrestle with the different tags the two current chapters necessitate.
I just went ahead and fixed that, so thanks for the heads up.

Am I the only one that wants Spike to hump those giant purple boobs of hers? ( Boobjob/Titfuck)

Maybe, Lactation?

But since this is Teen Rating. :fluttershysad:

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It’s at depribooru.org/images/1218334
The artist is reiduran

10706779
The rating I use is only a current version; a more risqué chapter being added would change the rating of the total story.

10706798
Well, honestly, some SpikeXTwilight is planned, and will certainly require a mature rating, so there’s that to look forward to, I suppose.

10706802
Though from what someone else says, the masturbation in chapter 2 already qualifies it as mature, so that’s why it is so now.

Didn't she learn not to mess with magic too much? Look what happened when she enchanted her doll. Now her boobs............lol she needs some help.

10706779
No your not

And the rating is fixed

Is Twilight really writing this by hand/magic or is it speech-to-text? Because I doubt she would write her huffs in.

Also, this will either make celestia interviene, or convince her to just keep watching to troll teach her student a lesson

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It’s an automatic writing spell that takes what she says and writes it down.
She probably crosses out the words manually later, though.

Celestia won’t intervene for a reason that I will have to say at the end of the last chapter. It’ll make more sense then.

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Honestly I am expecting spike isn’t even sending them

Something tells me Spike isn't sending these letters like he should lol.

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It appears the cover art has changed since this message. To anyone wondering, it's picture 2512204 on Derpibooru, by Creatiffy.

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Yeah, that was because of the nipples peeking through the shirt.
Apparently they could’ve gotten me flagged for indecency, so I had to change it.
Some Leech actually had to point that out, so thank him I suppose.

Started out with a red bar.
Now gradually going green.

You seem to pick-up as you go

10718647
That tends to happen with my stories.
Not quite sure why...

10718988
Must be because you start small then gradually get better every chapter as you adapt the story.

Any chance you can make the chapters longer?

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Maybe...? I’m not too sure.
These things are supposed to be letters after all, so they shouldn’t be super long.
Even with that stipulation, I was trying to make them a bit longer, as I knew they would more sense and probably be more sexually enticing to read that way.

I may be able to make them longer, though I’d prefer to get the approval of the commissioner first.

Why do you ask that, anyway?

10722370
Well if its just letters then never mind

Kind of a meh ending with no idea what happened. Some sequels potential though. I can imagine her breasts of long burst out of the castle and stopped at like building size and at this point the entire town as been affected

10725205
It’s kind of vague on purpose. Supposed to be hiding what happened (although not very well) in order to get Celestia to interact with the milk as well, because of how it makes people who drink it also become a milk factory like Twilight.
Basically, the commissioner said it was to be like a pandemic, with the patient zero of Twilight and the infection mechanism of ingesting an infested person’s milk.
Likely to lead to a sequel as well, though I haven’t done much thinking about that.

Chapters were overall rather short, but not bad for a clop fic. Kinda want to see a sequel were all the mare "infected" with Twi's milk are turned into big breasted sex crazed zombies. Seeking other mares to infect by firing jets of milk from their breasts like a hose, were drinking just one drop is all it takes.

Becoming something like a erotic horror, were it also focuses on those who do get infected but aren't aware of it, and slowing start to convert and lose their minds in becoming breast zombies. Till they to try to force feed and have sex with uninfected mares they're with.

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Yeah, the commissioner definitely wanted to open it up to a sequel. Not quite that type of idea though...
It is pretty interesting, so I may do something with it.

I have an idea for a pseudo-sequel/AU for this.

I'm thinking that all of the send increase in lust affects Spike in a manner similar to his 'Greed' phase, creating something of Greed-Lust combo, making him want to hoard all of the girls. I even have an idea for how it progresses from Twilight, to the Mane 6, to Starlight and Trixie, and even to the other Princesses and minor characters.

Would you like to hear more?

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Seems interesting, and could possibly would with the whole pandemic thing,
That likely wouldn’t be the actual sequel though, as I was planning on a more objective and satirical look on it.
I’m interested to see what you have though.

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As I mentioned in the previous review, Spike in a Greed/Lust phase, making him want more girls. However, he retains the majority of his intellect this time around. He decides to get more girls by getting them to drink Twilight's milk unawares. He also goes back to the castle and finds a male version of the potion, used to grow his dick with some differences.
-The 'cream' is a contact aphrodisiac, which is even better if it makes contact inside.
-The 'cream' makes the user the focus of whoever drinks it.
-It does not diminish the user intelligence.

With the Mane 6, he invites the girls over for a sleepover, during their fun, Spike gives the girls tea/juice/etc with a small amount of Twilight's milk in them, over the night the girls have more and more till they're nice and horny and engage in an orgy. Spike invites himself in and eagerly joins. As he plays with them, he does various things that get them more willing to obey him, such as keeping them on edge and then finishing them off when they are at their most desperate point.

After confirming that his technique works, he goes to Zecora and offers her some, saying that's a new heathier than normal variant. After Spike has done his thing and broken her in. He has work with Twilight to perform various experiments with the milk and see what kind of ways in can be used in certain products and potions.

As the story progresses, he decides that he wants to take over Equestria, maybe the world.
His last 'targets' will be the princesses.

He'll also see it works with non-ponies, such as Dragons, Griffons, Hippogriffs, Kirin, etc.

What do you think?

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I think I may be able to do that.
I will have to make some alterations to have it make more sense, and I will need some time to write up a more detailed outline before I start writing the full story, though I should be able to do that.

(BTW, you should probably PM me with stuff like this, ‘cuz it tends to clutter the comment section.)

Looking foreword to the sequel. Loved the story, chapters are short but sweet.

I read a story in the past about Twilight's intelligence deteriorating due to a bad spell involving sexual desires. I hated that story but this was ok. If this was followed up, I'd imagine an ending where the sizes would be reduced to about Day 5-6 levels without the sexual thoughts running rampant or one where things get "worse." I'd personally prefer the former but it's up to you.

10766534
Eh, well the commissioner was a bit specific on the way it all worked. Not specifically the timetable, but that one’s really the best I could make with the outline they provided.
I did get a request for a sequel, though your idea wouldn’t fully work with it.

Another thing that would be nice if there was a sort of side-story for this that was the actual scenes of Twilight with Spike getting mind-broken. Personally I want to see that.

He, u-um, has also admitted that Pinkie somehow got her hands on some of my milk and now her breasts are starting to grow as well! And now that he knows that my milk makes the boobs of who drinks it grow, he started using it a lot more in my food... a-and I guess that I now recognize that he has been feeding me a lot more. Usually I only had three pancakes for breakfast, but now he’s giving me six, along with a tankard of milk, unless I specifically ask him otherwise. He gives me other snacks throughout the day too, like muffins, cookies, and even cake! How did I not notice that before?!

I thought so. This clopfic is for those who get off on abuse & mind control. I wondered why I felt so uncomfortable in this one.

10766552
Fair enough. I think the other story kinda traumatized me so I get antsy with stuff that leans towards it.

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I'm so surprised that you wanted a "reduction" on the bust sizes, coming from you?

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Even us weirdos have our limits with hyper titty.
But Dash will always be biggest of all in my mind.
:rainbowwild:
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