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Mlp_Starry_Night


We're in this together, right?

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It was for Equestria, but Celestia feels only regret for banishing her sister. Life has not been kind to her for the past few days. Ponies spreading rumors, fear of the sun and moon cycle stopping in it's tracks. But one night while walking through the Castle of Canterlot, she visits the library.

And finds something...

Maybe she's not that alone after all.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 4 )

Wow, that was a very interesting story! The introduction was very emotional, and I thought the whole experience in the library/archives was very interesting to say the least. My one recommendation would be to limit the amount of informational sentences you place in an emotional section of a story. Your writing should always flow together with the evoked emotions, and simple sentences that states facts can rip a reader out of the experience (it wasn't a major problem, but I thought it would be helpful to mention it).

Overall it was fantastic, and I can't wait to read more from you! :twilightsmile:

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Thanks for the advice. I'll certainly remember that when it comes to my writing.

Gives me nostalgia to "A Lullaby For A Princess."

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One of my favorite songs. :twilightsmile:

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