Agent Bon Bon is tasked with recovering a dangerous spell and a missing human. Little does she know that her best friend Lyra will try to help out as well... leading to her capture. Can Bon Bon infiltrate the sex dungeon and save the day? ...kinda?
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Author's Note:
Author’s Note: I love this version of Lyra! If nothing else, Cloppy can write a lovable buffoon, am I right? Bon Bon is solid as well, and the HAYTRIOT ACT joke got a genuine laugh from me during my edit. If there’s a better version of Bon out there, I haven’t read about her yet — exactly as she was portrayed in “Slice of Life”.
That’s about all I have to say about this one. I don’t want to waste anyone’s time reiterating myself. It’s a nice introduction to our main protagonists with well-layered hints of events to follow.
I’ll have a whole hell of a lot more to say about chapter three. That was my biggest contribution to the entire endeavor!
Lyra has always been established as a goof, even with barely any lines in the show corroborating this idea. It's so much fun, and I love this version of her as well!
calling this potion and magic dont work on the human and the criminals are annoyed about it but lyra is extatic
An interesting prediction! Not sure if that's what's gonna happen though :)
Good chapter, but the interchangeable use of "thou" and "you" and their possessive forms, and noticeable non-use of "thee", seems a bit weird.
Reposting the author's notes for anyone wanting to vote on it.
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Crap! I knew I was forgetting to check for something.
Mission Failed: Will edit more successfully next time.
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Thee is a very rare word, (objective form of you). Plus let's be real, Luna's use of archaic English is stereotypically hit or miss.
She probably just doing it for the lulz.
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Bronies put infinitely more care into details than the writers ever did. It's like that for all fandoms. That's a fair point.
I still hate letting any mistakes pass my attention. Bad AJA. Bad!
Lyra has always been established as a goof, even with barely any lines in the show corroborating this idea.
It's so much fun, and I love this version of her as well!
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I know! I love this version of Lyra as well.
These girls are totes precious.