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Neon Czolgosz


"Violence for violence is the rule of beasts" - Barack Obama

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Huh, that was better than I expected. Not exactly my thing, but well written and interesting. You seem to have a very good view into the mind of a dom - personal experience?

I liked that a whole lot. Twilight trembling on the edge of orgasm was several kinds of hot, and Rarity's care for Twilight was lovely. Good stuff, sir. :raritywink:

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Glad you liked it :pinkiehappy: I basically wrote this because of Expensive Tastes, so your comment makes me a very happy writer!

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Thank you kindly! Nah, I'm not particularly into sex at all. I mean, I enjoy it, but I also enjoy writing, cooking and playing Morrowind. If I find a partner who's into kink then yeah, I'd love to do it, but I cba to actively seek any romantic partner out at the moment. Hassle innit.

They have sex so hot they have to negotiate it first.

Oh my that line is amazing.

Well, that was a much needed burst of dominant erotic inspiration. Thank you for the S & M:heart:!

Welp, that was STAGGERINGLY hot. Normally I'm not one for that level of painplay but hopy shit you make it work. My applause. :raritystarry:

Absolutely excellent. Hits pretty much every button I had hoped it would, and hits them well. If you'll pardon the pun.

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My pleasure :twilightsmile:

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:pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy: You have no idea how much seeing that comment from someone who reads and writes as much clop as you do makes me happy!

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Thanks! Hey, didn't you favorite and comment on my first fic, Pinkie: Born before I took it down because it was lame?

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You are quite correct, good sir. :twilightsmile:

This was incredibly hot. Honestly one of the best clopfics I've read in a while.

Not really my thing, but it was an entertaining read. Well done, and well written. :raritywink:

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That's an awful lot of words to say "I'm ashamed of my boner."

1207118 Nah, I think my boner's ashamed of me.
I mean seriously, first it's small technicolor horses, and now it's small technicolor having BDSM.
Look, buddy, I love ya, but now's not the time for this.
I think the question to ask here is what are you NOT attracted to?
:facehoof:Goddamit boner.

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After Pipsqueak's Day Off is finished, there's going to be clop sequels for all the pairings at the end of the story. Aged-up foals. Let's see what that does to your brain.

1207173Oooh! Quisiera esto en mis pantalones.
Wait a minute, since when could you speak spanish?
Since we saw dem bouncy brazillians.
Oh god don't start this now.
Oh yeah, we're starting this now.
Jesus christ why are you doing this.
VOY A ATORNILLAR SU CARA ADENTRO!
HOW?! YOU'RE MY DICK. YOU CAN'T EVEN REACH UP PAST MY STOMACH!
I'LL STRANGLE YOUR BELLY BUTTON! I WILL MAKE YOU THROW UP. I WILL FUCK YOUR BELLY BUTTON.
What is wrong with you?! Why is my dick a psychopath?
BECAUSE CHICA I AM LOCA!
This is perfect, I have a psychotic mexican penis. Please excuse me while I go castrate this thing.

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Your penis is going to be disappointed when he finds out that all the Brazillian vaginas speak Portuguese...

1207265 It's a raving mad mexican boner who I'm beginning to suspect's been getting into my pickle jar. It doesn't care, and it loves the tastes of pickles in the morning.:ajbemused:

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If you keep writing stuff of this quality, that praise will keep on coming-- You absolutely deserve it. :rainbowkiss:
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I would say more, but my brain has entered temporary safety shutdown mode. I believe you and I have some plots and 'plots' to discuss.

Not really my thing, but very well-written. Here's to dom Rarity and negotiating boundaries!

*reads*
...A BDSM fic that didn't scream "very thinly veiled rape?"..couldn't be..
*re-reads*
Holy Celestia it is. :coolphoto:

Hell, if you made this into a series where Twi and Rarity do different things every week, it would be gold.

Super surprised. Not really my thing, and not my favorite ship, but I liked it. :pinkiegasp: Good Job! :pinkiehappy:

Oh, I like it a lot, especially how you talked about beating. I didn't notice it yet, but I always thought of it as spanking, caning, flogging, all those words I associate with the relatively safe aura of a scene, but I never thought about what it basically is. It gives the whole scene a more dangerous touch instead of a playful.

It's very kinky and romantic at the same time. Thank you. :twilightsmile::heart::raritywink:

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I can't find any other words to properly tell you how much I love everything about this story! Liked, faved, and watched :twilightblush:

I LOVED IT!!!! Excellent in all ways! Please, write more like this!?!?!?!?!?!!!! Involve everypony! :ajsmug: :yay: :twilightsheepish: :eeyup: :raritywink: :pinkiehappy: :rainbowdetermined2:

Sexy story + cute ending = awesome, just plain awesome

Mmmm. I'd hit that. Should I now call you S&M AXE? Do you need more pun-nishment? (so... bad...)

It was nice to see this story not be one of those "first time" stories. They clearly knew what they were doing, and even though it was brutal, it was kinda sweet. Scary, but fun. And thank Celestia they didn't wear any skimpy BDSM skinsuits or gasmasks or anything like that. I think you already fulfilled enough perversions for one fic.

The pacing was nice, but I'dve preferred some more foreplay and buildup for the actual beating. Psychological abuse in addition to the mere verbal abuse would also have been nice, but they ruled it out from the beginning. Did they try that before? Was it not their thing? Also oftentimes a roleplay like that ends up with the roles reversing in the end, which might be worth trying sometime.

Also if I might, this was not BDSM, only DSM, as there was no actual bondage involved. Just sayin'. What it WAS though was a steaming hot pile of lurv that The Love Doctor would happily prescribe. Now Imma go clean up.

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S&M AXE.... Greatest pun ever.

Yeah, this was written because of the dearth of negotiated consent fics on Fimfiction. If i'd wanted it to start from the beginning it would have been mega hassle. So instead it starts In Medio Concubitus.

The lack of SM foreplay thing was mostly my preferences seeping in, partly because it just frustrates me and partly because it's a bastard to write. Also, although Twilight might be a switch, I don't really have Rarity pegged as one.

Thanks for the compliments :twilightsmile:

I'm not one for BDSM, however, this is well written, and the structure of their mercy system doesn't scream ultimatum.

Well written. I don't really dig this kind of stuff, but I like the dynamics of the relationship you explored!

You sire, are one out-standing gentleman and I must profess my admiration for your creation

At first I was all like encrypted-tbn3.google.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcR3KBnMnjalyU2ozrBCKbCnLLKkUwqoeesaEs-UPiRbL4kNjyot
But i will read further to see what happens>>1217266
THAT WAS FUCKING AMAZING!
Shaddup Dick.
But yes that was great

Well not usualy my kind of thing but it has Rarity in it soooooooooooooooooooooo... better lock the doors.:raritywink:

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I second that , might I even be so bold as public humiliation , and a chained up dinner , oh and sex swings , bitches love sex swings

... damn...that was amazing. going to try my best to avoid tmi but that was the most accurate bdsm fic i've ever read. seriously great job! now if you'll excuse me i was just inspired. Where to find a branding iron and blow torch at this hour...?

Even though what the characters are doing is in squick territory for me, I have to admit: the negotiated and responsible sex? Hot as Celestia's heavenly body. :trollestia:

Wow, I've never read pain play before, mostly just bondage stuff, but this was very hot.

I finally read this chuck. I am confused by my feelings. Why did you do this to me?!:raritydespair:

I don't want to enjoy ponies doing it! I don't, but that turned out so well! I am aroused mentally, but scared cause I don't want this to be a genre I pick up the taste for. Damn these feelings!:fluttershbad:

I am working my wife up to doing *exactly* this kind of thing. She's started, and enjoys it greatly, but it's gonna be a while before I can have my own negotiations.
Lovely story, so many ideas, Mistress simply *must* read this...

An underrated fic that I keep coming back to. Whatever you're doing, keep doing it.

1263181:twilightblush: I'm glad you like it, especially since you're into actual kink yourself. The Applejack thing is a damn interesting idea, I still have to finish Pipsqueak's Day Off and its clop sequels (Aged up! Don't worry!) before I do any more clop one shots, but I think I'll give that one a try next.

The pain thing was definitely my mindset seeping in without thinking, since I've done combat sports for years. Eventually you become dulled to twisting, pinching and striking sensations on your skin, which is why a lot of people who do judo/wrestling/boxing/mma think very little of things like pressure points and other pain compliance techniques. A moderately-hard knee to the liver or chin will have me curled up on the floor, but someone grabbing a nipple and twisting it as hard as they can will just make me wince. I remember a time when someone grabbing a big chunk of my skin and wreching me down with it would have brought me to my knees with a yelp, but suffice to say, this is no longer the case....

Loved it. More like this please. :twilightoops::raritywink:

Oh Sweet Buttery Celestia that was beautiful. I'm glad that I'm not the only one that believes Twilight is secretly into BDSM. :raritywink:, and obviously Rarity is the dom. You could do it both ways, but this just makes more sense. :pinkiehappy:

FINALLY, a heavy BDSM fic that very clearly stays SSC and isn't a thinly veiled way of saying rape. For this feat, you win 3 and a half internets.

One part in particular that was good (albeit brief) was the study of the characters motivations for this beyond the base.. desires. And they make sense!
Do you plan to make more BDSM stories with the others?.

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Probably, but it might be a while. My current clop lineup looks like this:

[Aged-up] Scootaloo x Pipsqueak
[Aged-up] Rumble x Lickety Split
Dusk Shine x Eris

But if I get any more ideas for kink, they'll probably go here. Maybe something with Applejack and suspension...

... nicely done. I think you're the one of very few that can write Rarity as a dom and keep her in character.

Wait, another chapter?

Well, I know what I'm reading tonight.

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