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The Sleepless Beholder


I just headbutt the keyboard till my ideas spill out into writing. Sometimes it works.

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Pinkie Pie is known as the party planner of Ponyville, the happiest mare you will find, one that's always willing to help or cheer you up no matter what. However, these past days, the mare seems to have been lacking some of that enthusiasm.

Will her friends discover what's causing it before it's too late?

Featured on the day of release :yay:

Reviewed by Jarvy Jared: Review

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Comments ( 21 )

Huh. Most of these kinds of stories are about mental issues, not physical ones, especially when Pinkie Pie is involved. As someone who has heart issues, this one was a bit more relatable, though thankfully, my problem isn't life-threatening.

Overall, this feels like something you've encountered before. Do you actually know someone who's had to go through this?

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Not heart problems specifically, but my father had to go through surgery multiple times. Marble's is the closest to my reaction to the event.

I'm glad your problem isn't life-threatening.

Why do you have to do that to us? Why do you have to write something so beautiful and sad and so very heartwarming at the same time?

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Because I want to use my experiences to show the positives in life :twilightsmile:

Dang... This was so sad and heartwarming at the same time.

Gahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!

This was marvelous. Really very great!

I don't normally like Pinkie all that much, but this one got me good. Thank you very much for writing it.

This is great, mostly because a member of my family had the same problem, she identified with pinkie, the rest of my family and I identified with the feelings of all of pinkie's friends, really, good job
I'm sorry if there are spelling mistakes in this comment, or if I'm a little late, but I'm from Latin America and I'm just starting to work in English:twilightsmile:

How dare you make me cry OP

Who was the donor and why wasn't there much time?

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An organ doesn't last much time when removed from the body, and donors don't usually die in the hospital, it has to be brought to the patient as fast as possible.

As to who was the donor, that's up to your imagination

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Don't wrroy about spelling mistakes, I'm happy you enjoyed it.

PS: I'm also form Latin America

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Thank you very much for reading it :twilightsmile:

I'm a little late commenting, but this one got me choked up. It's really sweet and hit me hard, and the fact that Pinkie decided that making her friends happy at the end as her top priority was a really unexpected twist. I thought she was going to decide not to go through with the operation, but I like this way better. Thanks for such a wonderful story! :pinkiehappy:

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All comments are welcomed. I wanted it to be Pinkie's decicion at the end instead of somepony fully convincing her, so it was really at the last moment she decided to live more and see everypony happy.

Hello, a review to your story has been posted. I hope you find it helpful. :raritywink:

Well, this is certainly something - a very real story for the most cartoon of ponies.

This story was very well written just like all your other stories, but it wouldn't feel right to give it a like due to my main problem with the story:
Pinkie choosing to die young and leave everyone who cares about her behind instead of getting a simple surgery. It doesn't make any sense to me.

“Would you be the same without your wings?” Pinkie asked. “Or Twilight without her brain? Applejack without her legs? Fluttershy without her voice? Rarity without her eyes? Can you really just replace all of those with just anypony else’s and remain the same pony you were before?”

rainbow Dash yes Twilight no your brain is what makes you you, if you really think about it well I'll just brains inside flesh suits

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