Chapter 5: Broken Promises
Day 31 in Equestria
Derek looked at the magical mirror with a look of dread and disappointment. He slowly paced in place, looking between it and the window, Equestria shined to him on the other side.
He let out a pensive whimper before he turned to look at Johan. The deer was standing next to him, his eyes narrowed and one of his lips raised in a snarl, and his eyes locked directly on his reflection in the mirror.
"I..." Derek started before he was interrupted when Twilight entered the room.
"Ok guys." She said as she wrote in a book with a quill. She stepped up next to Derek and cleared he throat. "I sent a message to Sunset Shimmer and asked her and my friends to meet me at the other side of the mirror before school-"
"Wait what? School?" Johan asked, his brow furrowing.
"Oh yeah, even though my friends and I are like, in our twenties, for some reason on the other side of the portal we are in our teens and at a high school. It's actually pretty lame." Twilight chuckled, before, with a shimmer, the mirror lit up, rainbow light filling the reflective surface.
"Whelp, here we go." She said, taking a couple of steps forwards. Johan followed after her, but Derek stayed put.
Twilight went right through, but Johan stopped, his frown faltering for a second. He saw Derek's reflection. It wasn't coming with him.
"Are you coming?" He asked, looking over to Derek.
"I... I don't want to." Derek said, sitting on his haunches. "I'm gonna stay."
"You're what?!?" Johan asked, quickly spinning around and narrowing his gaze.
"I said, I'm going to stay," Derek said, straightening up and a frown coming to his face. "Back on Earth, I was a loser, we both were. Here though? Here I can fly. I can use magic. I'm actually cool!"
Johan snarled. "So you'd rather be stuck on four legs than have hands? You'd rather stay here with a bunch of pastel horses than go home to your real friends and parents?" He hissed, genuine anger filling his voice.
Derek only nodded. Johan paused for a second before he turned around and kept walking towards the mirror.
"Fine." That was all he said before he was on the other side of the portal.
Equestria Girls Earth
Johan walked through the portal on all fours with a sigh. "Bad news Twilight." He said with a sigh. "Derek's going to stay in- What the heck?!?"
What he saw was almost nightmarish. Impossibly thin multiple colored humans with massive heads. They looked identical to the ponies of Equestria he had already met, the 'Elements of Harmony' as they were often referred to as, plus one whose hair looked like bacon. They looked identical to them if they were twisted into some thin man-like mockery of a person.
They were looking at him like he was the most confusing part of this picture.
"I thought you said he was a human Twilight?" the Rainbow Dash look-alike said.
"Excuse me? Was there a chemical spill here or something? Last I checked, humans weren't blue with rainbow hair." Johan hissed, sitting up. Perhaps he was a little too rude in his tone, but right now he was pissed, and for probably good reason. "Maybe you've never seen a normal person before."
He stood upright, happy to be back on two legs at least. Just then, however, he tumbled backward onto his back. That's when he realized he still couldn't feel his toes or his hands. And then there was the weight on his head that, over the past month he had grown accustomed to, but now only felt all too apparent.
Looking down, he saw brown and white fur, black hooves kicked up in the air, and his deer tail.
"I'm still a deer!?!" He yelled, rolling onto his front and standing up on four legs. "What the fuck!?!"
"Woah woah," Twilight said, rushing to his side and crouching down next to him, a comforting hand on his back. "I'm sure there is some kind of logical explanation to this. Calm down."
"No! You promised me I'd be able to go home through this portal! Instead, all I've found here are flamboyant mutants and I'm still something that's about to be mounted on someone's wall!" Johan shouted at her, straightening up and glaring down at her.
"I'm sorry, really I am. I genuinely thought this would work." Twilight said, a slight frown. She sat up with a sigh. "Where did you live, maybe we could at least get you there?"
Johan sighed. "Maybe I can at least say goodbye to mom... how far away is Salt Lake City?" He asked, looking over at the human versions of the Elements.
"Do you mean Salt Lick City?" the bacon-haired one said, raising an eyebrow. "That's about 2,500 miles away."
And then it hit Johan. This wasn't even his Earth, it was just another Equestria. Johan felt his heart sink. He would never get home now. The deer stammered on his hooves, almost collapsing to the ground so many times that he just gave up eventually.
"W-what... No..." He said as he fell to his knees. "I'm never getting home, am I?"
Twilight pursed her lips and sighed. "I'm sorry."
Johan shook his head. "Let's go back through the mirror." He sighed with a whimper.
Twilight nodded grimly before the two stepped back through the portal together.
Derek sighed as he stood up. Johan and Twilight were taking a while on the other side of the portal. The thought crossed his mind that, he really should have gone through to the other side... at least to make sure Johan was going to be ok.
He shook his head and let out an exhale. He was in the wrong in this situation, he knew it. But he just couldn't give this place up. This was his chance to be something. Back on earth he was and was always going to be, a nobody. Someone who was going to be forgotten and ignored by everyone.
His eyes returned to the portal mirror thingie, and a grimace came to his face.
"Maybe I should at least make sure Johan is ok." he sighed, approaching the mirror. Just then, a pair of purple hooves emerged.
Twilight stepped through with a grim expression. She was then followed by Johan, who looked... broken.
"W-what happened?" Derek asked, concern building on his face.
Twilight sighed, a dry smile coming to her face. "Looks like Johan is staying here in Equestria after all." She said.
The second she finished speaking, there was a blast of confetti as a certain pink horse appeared in the center of the room out of nowhere, throwing her hooves in the air.
"That means it's time for the 'Welcome to Ponyvile' Party!" She cried in a high-pitched voice, rolled up white banners unfurling on the walls, the words; 'Welcome to Equestria.' written on them in bold pink and purple lettering.
"Now's not really the ti-" Twilight started but Johan interrupted her.
"No, please. Go ahead. Don't call off the... 'party' on my account." he sighed, his voice shaky. He continued walking going in the direction of the door.
Twilight grimaced once again before she shook her head and walked over to talk to Pinkie Pie, as guests, who somehow knew there was going to be a party despite there being no invitations, started to stream in.
Derek turned to Johan as he arrived at the door.
"What's going on Johan? Is everything ok?" He asked with a grim look.
"It wasn't home," Johan replied as he walked through the door. He turned and looked at his friend, a miserable smile on his face. Derek saw the deer's eyes water as he tried to put on a happy face.
"Looks like you got your wish. We live here now." And with that, Johan closed the door behind him.
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poor deer boy
Nooooooooo.
Dude Johan just got fucked unbelievably hard. Still waiting for deer boi to snap....
A bit shorter chapter, but it sure stung more than just a little
. And Pinkie seems to have absolutely no situational awareness here; a guy just learned he can not go back home to his family and friends, and you just wanna throw a fricking party
? Not the right time, but they most likely just see the alicorn with the hose between his legs, while ignoring the serious blight of the poor deer boy. At least Twi tried and is clearly sorry. Hopefully it lasts and not fade when the next study thing comes up...
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Well, she was like that in the show
That’s rough, buddy.
There are many types of supporting characters but it seems that our favorite despised character has just been demoted to a simple classmate who as the story progresses appears less and less or becomes totally irrelevant.
But as a secondary character a you can move in this position to:
The comic relief
The support
The damsel in distress
The special appearance
Krilin: haaaaaaaaaaaaaa Goku!
Yamcha.
Or advanced further in this list upwards towards the heart of the supporting characters, this one:
The mysterious and powerful character who is only there to observe or help the heroes.
Supreme kaioshin
Merlin
And even higher up who snatches the protagonists their protagonism, because he organized everything and cemented the whole base of alliances for the final victory of good against evil:
Gandalf the Grey.
There is a lot to choose from.
Ho just use your free will and live a life. I don't know, I'm just saying.
P.S. Elven magic is cool and all. You know the dwarf has Runic magic, I'm just saying that magic can be learned and carved into their antlers or something.
Wait, so is Johan supposed to be the side character? Because I feel a lot more comfortable sympathizing with him than Derek. Maybe it's just me, but Derek seems to be remarkably blind and lacking of a good conscious. His reasonings might make more sense if we had context for his positions, instead of just suddenly claiming, with no rational reason, that the Equestrian Derek is better than the Human Derek. Like, seriously, he's been in Equestria for a couple days, right? What the hell is he talking about? Emotionally charged and irrational if I've ever seen it. This isn't a criticization of your writing either, since this is only chapter five, and it makes sense for explanations to come slowly. Derek just seems a tad dickish. Selfish even. Especially in light of Johan's situation. If I missed something that explains all this, that's cool, but for now, this is how things look to me.
So when the next chapter I can't wait for it please tell me🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺
Oh yeah this is officially my favorite fanfic right now😁
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You forgot The Mysterious Stranger
10870607
you forgot the situation in the last few years where in anime/manga/light novels were the side character who is our protagonist is actually being held back by there current friends/party members and becomes badass and OP after they split up while the other(s) fall apart with out him/her. I love that since it gives us a look at how sometimes you need to cut ties with people who are bad for you. this is how I personally hope it eventually goes and Johan gets a better life and friends.
This all brings a bad light to whatever power brought the two of them to equestria. One of them gets massive power and privilege handed to them for nothing, whike the other loses EVERYTHING and gets nothing in return. Infact, as q deer he has even less than what he had as a human.
It really makes it seem like whatever brought Johan there did it with the intention of making him suffer.
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There is lore to this. Big lore.
All will be revealed in time lol
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To be fair to Pinkie, it’s not like she should’ve known that. Twilight had said that Johan would be staying in Equestria, and to her, that means she can finally set up that welcoming party she’s been wanting to do since day one.
Glad to see some motivation behind Derek's actions, rather than him just being a two-dimensional major douche. Please expand on that in the future.
you are a true hero
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Yes but, time and place man. Celebrating now will only feel like "haha lmao you can't go home let's have a party about that" even when it's not like that.
In some fics Pinkie's smart enough to read the mood, while on others she's just a tunnel-visioned pony. This is... Leaning to the latter a bit, I think?