the mockingjay(Here you are alone and you deserve it)

by GRYFFINDOR123456

Return to Canterlot

Sunset POV

I went down the road to see Canterlot High looming over me, the tall building towering over my human body. It felt good to return back after 2 years. “Sunset!” cried a voice. I turned. Applejack waved at me, and there were the others, and this world’s Twilight.

“We’resosorrySunny.Weleftyouwethoughtyoukilledyourselforsomething,” said Pinkie.

I smiled. “I was transported to Auradon.” I replied. “Met my dad and half-sister.”

“I’m sorry.” said Rarity. “We all are. Can we be friends again? This is Twilight Sparkle. Twilight, meet Sunset Shimmer”

“Sure,” I said. “It’s okay.”

Then I was embraced in a group hug with all my friends.

Comments

[darkkoi]

Seem like this could be great just need fleshing out abit. Though I have the same problem tbh

[darkman]

This was stupid. I'm sorry I read this and it dumb, it makes no sense and the way it ends....

[Raith021]

No, just no, it's too short overall, none of the ideas introduced get to their conclusions, and the ending comes out of absolutely nowhere.

Edit: nevermind the fact the first two chapters just get copied into the third, making the story 664 words longer than it actually is.

[Dragonborne Fox]

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[Mockingbirb]

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I was thinking chapters two through three. Which use a song that has a canon EG music video.

[GRYFFINDOR123456]

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according to the rules... you are allowed canon songs from mlp and eg.

And as for that, My past is not today is a song i know from memory- it was a song i listened to a lot when i was younger

[Mockingbirb]

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Oh, I didn't mean to criticize you. Quite the contrary. I just thought that you had helped to provide a context for a canon music video where the original canon video didn't seem to make all that much sense.