Blizzaga and Gloom, Part 2
Twilight Gets a Puppy
Season 5
By TDR
Blizzaga and Gloom,
Part 2
[ Crystal Empire.]
“IT WORKED!” Twilight screamed out.
“Oh, well, congratulations? I think.”Fluttershy meeped from the pile of bodies.
“THEY ALL LAUGHED AT MY GENIUS!!” Twilight ranted.
“Honestly darling I don't think any one was laughing at that part.” Rarity huffed.
“BUT I SHOWED THEM I SHOWED THEM ALL!” Twilight continued.
“Yah mean yah showed tha five of us yah invited tah look?” Applejack pointed out.
“WHO'S LAUGHING NOW!?!?” Twilight demanded.
“Not you, because you better be getting off my spine!!”Rainbow Dash growled.
“Bark!” Spike added.
“I'm not, though this is still highly entertaining.” Pinkie Pie pointed out from where she sat outside the pile.
"Well, here's another fine mess you've gotten me into!" Rahs offered.
The group slowly disentangled from each other as Twilight was unceremoniously shoved off the top of the pile by Rainbow Dash.
“ I feel weird. So now what? You managed to jump us all to who knows where with that doohickey you made.” Rainbow Dash demanded. “What now?”
“Actually all my device does is open the portal and hold it stable. Ummm...Errrr, now?” Twilight blinked not having thought that far.
“How about we find a light source first?” Applejack muttered. ”It's a might bit dark in here.”
The group tried to look around peering into the darkness without any luck, at least until Pinkie Pie turned on a flash light, the bright beam lighting up a stone room large enough to hold the dragon that had visited Canterlot High.
“I can see!” Rahs exclaimed, before he winced as the light was shown on him causing him to fall over over backwards with a yelp. ”Nope, I was wrong.”
The rest of the group cried out in panic and fear as the flashlight lit up the large canine creature in the coat that had been looming over them until the light blinded it and it fell over.
“What the heck is that thing!?” Rarity screeched.
“I think that's Rahs” Fluttershy offered.
“Oh .. Sorry.” Rarity corrected.
“Frankly my dear I don't give a damn.”Rahs retorted.
“Language!” Twilight snapped.
“BARK!” Spike offered.
“From you either!” Twilight scolded.
Pinkie shown the flashlight on Spike revealing a purple and green scaled dragon sitting there blinking in the light, his tail wagging light at the attention he was getting.
“Spike?” Applejack gasped.
“Bark.” Spike offered.
“Wait, didn't they call the dragon Rahs?” Rainbow Dash demanded getting the light shown on her.” Gah Pinkie, seriously.”
“Oh my gosh, you're so cute!!” Fluttershy squeed.
“ What the hell?!?” Rainbow Dash snapped looking down at herself. She was a light blue pony creature with wings and a mane and tail colored like a rainbow. ”I look like a bag of skittles!?”
“Yah've always looked like a bag of skittles.” Applejack huffed. “Them blue one's that's sour.”
“Green.” Pinkie Pie corrected.” The blue ones are tropical.”
“Taste the Rainbow.” Rahs agreed.
“Fuck you.” Rainbow Dash huffed.
“Barn door don't swing that way sugar.” Applejack smirked wincing as the light shown on her. “Dangnabit Pinkie stop aiming fer our eyes.”
“Huh, I expected you to be red.” Pinkie Pie pointed out. “You know cause apples.”
“Ah ain't 'all' about Apples.....” Applejack huffed.
“You nearly bit my head off last time I offered you a banana.” Rainbow Dash snapped.
“Cause you were doing it all suggestive like.” Applejack snapped back. ”Perv.”
“Interesting, unlike Rainbow Dash you seem a normal horse or pony. The coloration isn't that far off some of those found in certain breeds, the same with your mane and tail. “ Twilight offered.
“You also kept your hat.” Rarity offered. ”Unfortunately.”
“The eyes are odd though, the skull is shaped weird and the eyes are more forward facing and not slitted. Those are traits found more in predators than prey animals like ponies.” Twilight continued.
“We're going to need a bigger boat.” Rahs added.
“You calling me fat, bird?” Applejack glared at Rahs, who for once, wisely shut up.
Pinkie Pie shown her flashlight on Rarity who blinked in surprise as she looked down over herself.
“Well now, predator or not I am simply gorgeous.” Rarity smiled tossing her head and making her mane spill over her shoulders.
“You also have a horn.” Twilight added.
Rarity gasped pulling a mirror from some where and looking at her self. She practically squeed as she pranced around in place on three hooves.
“How is she holding that?” Twilight questioned.
“A unicorn, oh I am simply the perfect picture of grace and beauty.....” Rarity began.
“Right grace and beauty, at least until you need to figure out how to wipe your butt with hooves.” Rainbow Dash huffed.
“Plus yer furs white and will show any stain yah git on it, not to mention white horses have an awful time with sunburn.” Applejack nodded.
“How crude. Must you take the fun out of everything I do?” Rarity growled.
“Sorry can't hear you Rarity, you're a little horse.” Dash cackled.
“How long have you been waiting to use that one?” Pinkie Pie frowned.
“Since I first found out I was a blue winged horse.” Rainbow Dash grinned.
“Pony” Twilight corrected.
“Whatever.” Rainbow dash shrugged.
“Not to interrupt, but is any one else concerned where we are?” Fluttershy offered. “I mean the Princess and the others took Sunset back a few days ago, shouldn't we at least see some signs of the damage that all that rubble outside the portal came from?”
Pinkie Pie shone the light across the room again showing smooth walls with odd crystals here and there in strategic placements..
“You're right, this place looks like it isn't damaged at all.” Pinkie Pie chimed in.
“The stone seems different th.. OW!” Twilight began before the light hit her face showing a purple unicorn with glasses.
“You're a wizard 'arry.” Rahs pointed out.
“So two unicorns? Hey if the nerds a unicorn what does that make Rarity?” Rainbow Dash snorted.
“Three seconds from a homicide?” Rarity offered.
“Shutting up now.” Rainbow Dash stated.
“Good girl.” Rarity growled.
“Bark!” Spike stated confused but excitedly at the same time.
“No, I said good girl, not good boy...... Actually are you a boy or girl dragon?” Rarity considered.
“That is something worth looking into.” Twilight pondered.
“I have another question.” Pinkie chimed in. “What are you gonna do when your brother shows up?”
“Why would he show up. He doesn't get off of work until six PM today and we've only been in here about thirty minutes, we have at least eight hours to go before then.” Twilight waved a hoof.”
“Except for the fact it's two AM now.” A male voice stated.
Pinkie whipped the flashlight around to show a white unicorn in full police riot gear staring down at the group from where he had stepped through the mirror.
“Uh oh, spaghettios.” Rahs frowned.
“Portal. Now.” Shining Armor growled. “The entire force is looking for you girls as well as everyone's family. If it hadn't been for Professor Cranky spotting you girls on campus while he was in to deliver his vacation request for his wedding, we still wouldn't have found you.”
“Hey, I didn't even want to come.” Rainbow Dash huffed.
“And yet, here you are. March!” Shining snapped.
Spike barked and rushed back through the portal with Fluttershy quickly following. Rarity trotted through the portal with a bit of worry followed by Applejack and Rainbow Dash.
“This is the find of a lifetime, a parallel dimension I had to investigate!” Twilight shouted.
“Twilight. If it were my choice I would ground you until you were old enough to get a senior discount. Now that I know you're safe anyway But mom and dad have already decided that they are just going to sign you up for softball this season.” Shining Armor frowned. “They're also taking away your basement lab privileges and will be making sure you spend the summer outdoors doing physical activities.”
“What!? NO!! That's inhumane!!” Twilight protested.
“Which is fine, because at the moment you're not a human.” Pinkie Pie added as both of them glared at her. “What?”
“Boy that escalated quickly.” Rahs stated as Twilight moped through the portal.
“Rahs, Pinkie Pie. Go!” Shining Armor ordered.
“Okie Dokie.” Pinkie Pie stated, standing up, brushing her dress off with her hands before putting the flashlight back in her hair and walking through the portal.
“What?” Shining Armor blinked.
“There is no spoon.” Rahs nodded sagely.
“Yeah that's the best I can come up with too. This is weird enough as is standing with hooves and whatever you are.”Shining Armor sighed. ”I hope Cady's not too mad I missed dinner with that friend of hers.”
“Hasta la vista, baby.“ Rahs offered stepping through the portal with Shining right behind him.
[Crystal Empire.]
The door opened with a bright flare of light that lit up the entire room. The only thing in the massive chamber was a horseshoe shaped mirror that was no longer glowing.
“Woof.” Rahs offered stepping into the room sniffing the air.
“Seems it. The wards have been tripped , something came in and then left.” Twilight offered as she trotted into the room. Cadence, and Chrysalis came in right behind her with Shining Armor and a large guard presence stopped at the door way. Behind them was Sunset and the rest of Rahs' suitors as well as the other Element Bearers.
“So is there anything in there Twilight?” Shining asked from behind the gods. The guards at the door were only there to seal the room fully and sound the alarm if something was heard inside the place. Their orders then were to find the the nearest god and let them deal with whatever came through the portal. No one knew what else Starswirl dumped in the portal, but Forgescale was enough, and several ponies theorized the Sirens had come through as well as signs that they had shown up were around the same time.
“No, nothing in here, it's not like it could hide.” Twilight offered her magic plucking one of the crystals from the wall.
“Bark.” Rahs pointed out.
“Several things were in here? And they smell familiar?” Shining Armor asked.
Twilight frowned and tapped the crystal with her horn, lighting it up. The crystal projected an image on the far wall and the group watched it for a while as the humans turned ponies argued then were made to go back through the portal, before Cadence let out a sigh of relief.
“Well good, nothing that's going to destroy the castle again. Twice is enough.” Cadence huffed.
“Still, now we have to keep an eye out for a Twilight from another dimension.” Chrysalis grumbled.
“Is that something to really worry about?” Shining Armor asked.
“I would be worried. She did jury rig the mirror to open at the wrong time.” Sunset offered.” Plus she's a Twilight, so she's probably worse than anything else that's come out of the mirror so far.”
“That's a fair cop.”
“Gee thanks....” Twilight muttered.
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This had me laughing the most ^^
This outcome has my full approval, the clone cleshe (or however you spell it) is overdone, this is better foreshadowing for other junk, hell maby they will need to push solomon through this thing to get rid of him
As much as I was looking forward to clone fueled hijinks, I will always have to approve of characters doing the sensible thing, even at the cost of comedy.
Aww, just imagine what Twilight squared could do! I can see Sci-Twi getting the Science and Technology portifolios!
well damn they missed each other by this much -pinch fingers together-
It is a fair cop. . . but is society to blame?
Would be typical if Spike the dog that became a dragon retained some small portion and gained one possibility of dragons in dog form.
Then again, given dogs eat Everything, would anyone know, or even realise?
Well that was mildly interesting.
You know I have a theory on why equestria Rahs didn’t turn into a crow that has nothing to do with him being purposely dramatic because the portal should turn those that come through it into a being that is basically identical to their counter part on the other side here it is: Rah’s natural magic absorption made the magic that changes them into their counter parts act wonky having a more extreme effect on him than it should have and breaking the attempt to keep the human side fairly normal.
On another note looks like transforming gave crow Rahs slightly more intelligence as basically everything he said up until the part near the end (“there is no spoon”) made sense and also props for keeping it in the broken quote way that that version talked in.
aww darn i was hopping for way more.
"What? did you expect some sort of trope ridden story where the dimension hoppers went on clone fueled shenanigans by getting confused by all the others before some trope filled ending?"
No, I was expecting shenanigans that can only come from characters hanging out with their alternate dimension counterparts.
I wonder, was this just a one-off? Or the start of something bigger?
You are talking a prison portal designed by logical rational person not something designed by a paranoid nut case. In this I think we got the Starswirl that believed once through the portal none of the prisoners would be able to come back from a world without magic. Otherwise considering what he did with the spell Twilight finished stasis locked would be mild, vaporized more likely though considering what Luna and Celestia have said about him he would've tried to make it worse maybe a slow vaporization or making sure they were broken down into individual atoms rather than just simply vaporized
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Same and totally makes sense as cadence
She's not wrong
I'm sure Rahs listened based on Jynx's good mood after her and Rahs' first date.
Rahs from the human world is always so amusing...
I did want to see some clone shenanigans! But this also works.
Almost 2 years in Equestria vs a few days in Dougland.
When the humans and ponies eventually meet, it shall be most hilarious.
Especially if it involves Prince Sombra, a mountain of Crystal Ice Cream, and both Pinkie Pies.
Wasn't fully hoping for clone shenanigans as at least 3 of them would have been found out quickly by the crystal ponies but I was hoping for them to meet each other.
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clichè
While there were a few good chuckles here, I'm honestly dissapointed to see you squander not one but TWO major sources for a deeper more interesting story these last two episodes.
First there's how you completely blew through the death of Diamond Tiara's parents. Everything, from the discovery of the bodies to Diamond Tiara's behavior afterwards was EXPLAINED and not SHOWN.
For something with so many far reaching ramifications, especially given what was revealed in the epilogue, that feels like breaking a pretty big rule of storytelling. How am I supposed to care that Filthy Rich is dead if you don't even allow us to connect with the horror of finding his lifeless body?
Then there's this chapter which was just plain dissapointing. It was like you were too busy trying to show how 'clever' you are by subverting a cliche (which are not explicitly a bad thing need I remind you) that you wasted an opportunity for some really fun and amusing hijinks.
Sometimes I wonder if you don't occasinally let your desire to show you are better then the show writers overtake your ability to tell a good story and honestly? That's kind of sad. Maybe you should take a break from writing for a while and, I dunno, meditate under a waterfall for a while. You can do better then this little rabbit. I KNOW you can.
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I do that a lot though. I've a number of cliff hangers still going on. The Sirens, DT and Solomon, Artemis, Heck even Jynx's godhood is only known by two other gods atm.
Showing the body wouldn't do much to further an already dark chapter. The whole point of that episode was to be up and done quickly. Generally i am still trying to make this a comedy fic, but the dark chapters are needed to further the plot. Brighter the light ,greater the shadow sort of thing.
Trust me when i say there's plans in the works for everything but i need to to pace myself. This season already has more filler episodes than any other for the main story. I'm already on episode 11 out of 24 episodes in the season, and this season hasn't even ramped up yet. It's not a case of my flaunting i'm better than the show writers, and more an issue of trying to figure out how to make half a season i have no plans for have a worthwhile chapter made out of them. Heck Bloom And Gloom was something swapped from season 4 and i had no plans for it then either.
The return of these guys was a spur of the moment thing. and weighing the options on what to do with a filler episode i decided it wasn't interesting enough to make the episode bigger.
There's only so much EQG i can stand, minus Birb Rahs of course. He's fun.
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Well I can't fault you for trying to balance things out if that's indeed the case and I hope I didn't come across as overly harsh. If so my genuine apologies.
Lord knows I have my own struggles with my 'Homer in Equestria' fic. Let's just say I'm starting to understand why you made Applejack a Witch Wolf, she is a challenge to give real character to!
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Nah you're fine. You made valid points and all which is why i tried to answer them without spoiling anything. Hard to lay stuff out and keep it close to your chest at the same time.
That side plot was actualy planned from the get go[ Not all the song lyrics mind you, though they were too perfect in the end] When i first started this fic Applejack was going to be the one Rahs was going to be paired with flat out. At the time it was going to either be her or [REDACTED] before i decided on AJ. Then the Trixie episode hit me out of no where as i was writing it and She became a fan favorite before i even brought AJ into play. Then the Jynx and Saturnia plots came to mind and i just rolled with them.
Sunset is the only one that was literaly a spur of the moment when i was writing the episode she starts flirting. She took the spot i was going to give back to some one else like Gabby or maybe even Gilda again, at the time i wasn't sure.
Sometimes the story gets away from me
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I'm scared of what would happen if the two pinkies met each other...*shudders* that way lies madness.
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And then 16 hours pass in about a minute.
Cause we can't get this party started properly without all the Sparkle siblings doubling up
Awww
......... oh well 
She's probably a little disappointed, but she'll likely try again
Is that a serious question?
Hang on, if Equestria passes 30 years for every 1 year in the human world, then how does 30 minutes in Equestria equate to hours in the human world? Shouldn't it be the other way around? Does forcing the mirror open at the wrong time somehow force the time-difference effect to run in reverse?
A textbook example of a shut-in nerd's monologue. Geez, a typical sad fate of a genius. Most of them have IQ but not EQ.
Now I’m just randomly remembering the dimensional mirror from stargate.
I was so ready for the chaos but now I'm disappointed.
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Possibly
Oh boy.... this Twilight is every bit the mad scientist the Equestrian one is, this can only end well...... please don't try vivisecting anything at least, okay?
Do not question the ways of the Pink One. Or even which Pink One this may be, all Pink Ones are mere shadows of the Great Pink One Yog-Pinkoth, who dwells beyond the walls of reality itself!
Poor Spike.... even when he's not the punching bag, he still gets all the humiliation. He is not going to live down ponies seeing this version of him anytime soon. Also no Shining Armor? Boooooooo! Also.... does it count as cheating if it's an alternate reality version of your wife/girlfriend?
.... yeah, probably.
Those are fine.... it's strawberries you need to keep away from her.
The grass in Equestria can fight back or something. Yeah it makes no sense but... magical friendship ponies.
Oh sweet Faust.. she's going to be the hardest one to pull back through the mirror, isn't she? Well... at least till you point out she's naked.
Ponicide!
Because this world runs on dramatic irony and timing. Also..... not the one you are thinking about Twilight.
Oh, it is....... happy time for Cadance and Chryssi?
but.... okay if the time moves faster in Equestria, then how has more time passed in EQG then for the ones on this side?
I'm with her.... that's downright EVIL!
And seriously... all that set up for nothing!? Come on story.. I know you love your anti-climax's but this was just ridiculous!
Smart.
Like I said, I am 100% on board with "Blame Starswirl" for pretty much everything, that guy has earned it.
Twilight.... where is the lie? Huh? Where is the lie in that?
I really, really hope this is setting up for something later otherwise..... what a massive waste.
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The meat of all this is. This was a filler episode. I was planning to go the whole doppleganger trope route before i lost any desire to go that route. Like at all. I kept putting off this chapter because i didn't want to start that story arc.
Then i got the idea of a trope subversion, something i do seem to do every so often. And here's the chapter.
You are right it's been a while since i had a climax worth the build up, but it's gonna be hard to top the Crystal Empire/ Wedding arcs. Even so. I do have a plan for something big.
I might even have something more for the EQG team.
Not gonna lie I am really confused on what this means.
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monty python skit line
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Guessing from outside the movies.
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It was used in the movies once or twice too but it was primarily used in Flying Circus.
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It was in Holy Grail, during the "We found a witch" scene, after hearing the undeniable evidence proving she is a witch, she admits 'It's a fair cop'. Which itself is British slang (hence them using it) pretty much meaning "Yeah, you caught me."
Given info: one (1) year in the human world is equivalent to thirty (30) years on Equss.
This means that the time on Equss is thirty (30) times slower than the time in the human world, i.e: a 1:30 ratio. So, one (1) day in the human world is equivalent to thirty (30) days on Equss. One (1) minute in the human world is equivalent to thirty (30) minutes on Equss.
So how did sixteen (16) hours pass in the human world when only thirty (30) minutes passed on Equss?
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Because plot. :P
Honestly, try not to overthink stuff. I have the same problem. Tends to ruin it.
Twilight Sparkle is a disaster waiting to happen
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Using your own math against you. 1 minute in Equestria is 30 in the EG world meaning 2 minutes is an hour. if they were there for 30 minutes you simply divide that by 2 and you get how many hours they were in there, which is 15.
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time is weird
Trading if they plan to or have the will to make it happen will be complicated with that extream time difference...
you know im thinkin that there could be a bit of sunset and twilight going in and out of the mirror to get more tech and seeing how everyone on the other side is doing with the twilight scienceing the crap out of everything and everyone else will be screaming bout the 2 pinkies putting there power of i reject your reality and insert my own together and throw the biggest party eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeevvvvvvvvvvvvvvveeeeeeeeeeeeeerrrrrrrrrr while breaking everyone's brain doing serious meta thing like she did with cheese sandwich
serious though you should think bout using the mirror more sense this has skued heavily from the main story there is a lot of creative thing to be done with it
I can't believe I somehow missed this.
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Even White doesn't want more than one Twilight Sparkle per dimension