- Member Since 16th Jan, 2020
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Nagiman
Clop writer involving pretty much anal as my favortie topic, but enjoy writing other things as well. I do not Take Requests, Comissions are rare. This is my hobby in spare time.
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The dirty talk felt a bit out of character. Not that there were dirty talking but rather what they were saying. There were also some moments and dialogue that felt strange. The description of the climax and sex could also use a bit of work. Other than that you have an ok story.
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I know it's no where near what I have written before. It's just been sitting for so long that I just released it to get it out and be seen. That way it wouldn't be a phantom story.
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I understand, but you could try to improve it. Giving it your best is a good way for you to gain loyal readers.