During the years that followed Twilight Sparkle's ascension to the throne of Equestria, she held several diplomatic meetings with the rulers of different realms. One particular meeting was with Kitana Kahn, the newly crowned empress of the realm of Outworld. In spite of the history between their respective worlds and predecessors, they managed to form a friendship due to a number of similarities between them and agreed to keep good political relations with one other.
And then the conversation turned to balancing work life with personal life...
Kitana is a Mortal Kombat character owned by Netherrealm Studios, a subsidiary of Warner Bros. Interactive Entertainment. She made her debut appearance in Mortal Kombat II, which first came to the arcades in April 3, 1993.
This story is set in the aftermath of the said character's Klassic Tower Ending in Mortal Kombat 11.
Also, this is a birthday present to my friend, SonicStreak5344.
Here's the first question. Why is the title all in caps? Not every letter needs to be.
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I always write the titles of my stories in all caps. Is there something wrong with that?
This is an awesome story! I love the different connections between Twilight and Kitana. And the part that revealed the current challenge facing Twilight and her family had tugged at my heartstrings a little. The only thing that I wanted to bring up was that there is a minor spelling error at the end of the story. The H in lunch is missing.
Other than that minor error, this was an awesome story! Keep up the great work!
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Thank you so much for the compliments. Really appreciate it.
I can't wait to read some of your fictions. I never knew crossovers were good until now... Your title as a crossover king must be it.
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Thanks for the compliments. Really appreciate them.
I admit I'm not familiar with Outworld/Mortal Combat, but this makes me want to check it out.
Regarding the story itself, I feel it lacked direction a little, especially given how exposition- and telling-heavy the first two thirds of it felt. It still flowed rather nicely, but if you included some extra character interaction and broke up the large block-of-text paragraphs, it'd make for a more pleasant read. Also, try to tone down the shocked reactions a bit, they felt repetitive and comedic rather than genuinely believable. However, I really liked the tidbits of lore about Flash and Twilight's family.
Furthermore, refrain from including images in a story. Not only may the link stop working or mess up the experience for people reading this story downloaded into an e-reader or listening to it, it also breaks the story's flow. Some also seen it as a sign of poor writing, since many newbies use it as a way of avoiding the need to describe certain things, places or characters. So, unless you have a very good reason, it's better to avoid doing this.
Grammar- and spelling-wise, there were some random issues here and there, but nothing really terrible. However, watch out for inconsistent usage of Oxford comma, and also for the recurring incorrect placement of commas in direct speech followed by a dialogue tag. The comma or another punctuation mark goes inside the quotation marks, not outside. I can send you a short guide on this, if you want.
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Thank you for your constructive criticism. Really appreciate it.
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You're welcome! I hope it'll help you in your growth as a writer.
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So do I.
Has there ever been an arcade mode ending in MK that came anywhere close to happening? I mean, MK11 actually tries to justify all of that but I'm not sure how that's going to work going forward when we've supposedly defeated the reason for it all...
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Well, those endings are basically alternate futures that happen when the character you're playing as defeats Kronika, but since it was Fire God Liu Kang who defeated Kronika at the end of the game's story mode, his ending is officially canon now.
Well, either his or Shang Tsung's ending, since the Aftermath story expansion gives the players the option to choose between the two as the final victor, just like what Injustice 2 story mode did with Batman and Superman.