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TheVClaw


I'm a shameless neckbeard who has a knack for writing a LOT of smut. I have an Official Patreon page (Patreon.com/TheVClaw), and I also take commissions to help support myself as a freelance writer.

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Yona: Let me smash.

This was very sweet, Yona and Sandbar are so cute together and you captured them both very nicely. The bit between Sandbar and Yonadad was hilarious.
Awesome work as always dude

well this was a fun read, keep it up

Loved this story. Very wholesome and really enjoyed the romance you where able to build in such a short amount of time!

Hmm...

You know, I see your stories pop up all the time, and no offense, but I usually ignore them. Not because they're badly written or anything! I loved Brushed Away (sneaky little self advertisement in here, lol), and What Could Have Been Lost is top tier stuff. It's just that these days you tend to write fetishes that ain't my cuppa joe, ya know? And I won't lie, when I saw that you had written YonaBar, my first thought was, and I say this with love, "Oh, God, what fucked up fetishes is he gonna put in here? Who's getting cucked and/or humiliated and/or peed on this time?" :rainbowlaugh:

But then you went and reminded me why I love your SFW stuff so much. This was excellent! Yona and Sandbar are consistent with what we see in the show, their dialogue felt genuine, and you really nailed the trepidation in both of them. You really sold on them being... not a really new couple, but one that was taking things a bit slow. The dialogue was snappy, and hell, you made me laugh at a "Wanna smash" joke in 2020!! I mean, I knew the moment with her dad was coming, but it still made me giggle. It's like when a movie actually gets you with a jump scare. You go, "Wow! These guys are good!"

It's honestly a bit refreshing that you didn't adhere to the traditional clop formula. You know, "Two bouts of oral, then the main event." But this genuinely felt like how a pair of semi-awkward virgins would do a bit of the old in 'n out. Not some porno type, twenty minute fuck fest, but a somewhat short encounter of two people in love just experiencing each other.

My only complaint, really, is I wish we had seen more interaction with her family. Show him interacting with her little brother who was bigger than him. Then, it wasn't really needed, so it would have just dragged things out. So... why did I even say it? :pinkiecrazy:

I know it sounded like I gave you a couple of back-handed compliments up above, and I guess I kinda did, but honestly it was just a bit of friendly shit talking. You're an excellent author, and this one reminded me of that. It did help that you wrote one of my new favorite ships, as well.

Great job, my dude! :ajsmug:

Wholesome soft core...

Oh good, it's just softcore... when I saw the cover art the words "death by snu snu" floated though my head...

Dan

Happy year of the ox/water buffalo.

no ron. go find becky

Um, is this an Equestria where all the races can freely inter-breed that disgusting condoms are needed?

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There's nothing "disgusting" about practicing safe sex.

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Except that condoms are absolutely disgusting.

Never thought I would read a hetero fic from you, but this was up to the quality of your previous works with Troy and Canvas. Excellent as usual. I love Yona and Sandbar as a couple anyway, so this just made my day. Thanks VClaw.

Incitatus brand condoms... :rainbowlaugh:

Great reference there. I really want to know what the label looks like.

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Googled it, and we kind of have to assume that the setting-wide species shift means that he was an actual politician somewhere in Equestria's past.

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So, Caligula brand condoms?
I mean, Trojan doesn't make any sense either, when you think about it.

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Yeah, and genital warts, herpes, and AIDs are just sexy as hell, right?

Dan

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I've heard Екатерина Inc. are the finest manufacturers of love-making swings and riggings in Equestria. Very safe and secure.

why wear a condoms? there different species

Great story! From what I've read in Brushed Away: the Private Moments and this story, stallions are better endowed than the other creatures.:raritystarry:

Knock-Knock.

My favorite kind of mature story - one with a good built-up, a decent sprinkle of realism and where the sex scene actually means something, as said built-up made me feel invested in their happiness. The 'and they came together'-trope feels a little worn out, maybe even misplaced in a story like this (them being first timers and all that), but that's basically just nitpicking. And goodness gracious, do you write good Yona-dialogue.

Thank you.

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