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Dreams are what you make of them. Either terrible or fantastic.

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For Hearth's Warming this year, Twilight gets to do two things while spending time in Canterlot: being in a play, and being at home with her parents alongside her friends. One of which whom Twilight has an unexpected talk with.


A last minute Breezie gift for Jinglemas 2020, for Twilight Glimmer.

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the smle now firm

can you spot the single typo in this story?
because i did! :P

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Curses! -shakes fist-

I'll fix this shortly, thank you for finding it!

It is indeed remarkable how little one-on-one time Twilight and Rarity had together on-screen. Unless you count Clover the Clever and Princess Platinum, the extent of their direct interactions in the first few seasons were always fleeting. I always found it odd that two characters who seemed to have similar qualities (eg. their propensity for having explosive neurotic episodes and a shared affinity for some flashy magic) never developed a basis for regular independent interaction. Strangely enough, Twilight seemed to spend more time with Pinkie Pie while Rarity was rather frequently paired up with Applejack--odd couples. Realistically, that was probably done, because they were scheming for comic potential rather than for realistic friendship interactions. Applejack and Rarity always did make for a funny pair, which I would attribute to their respective voice actresses playing off one another like an old school comedy duo.

Still, that left little screen time for the friendship between Rarity and Twilight, which still feels like a loss. Fan authors seem to love having the two exchange witty banter with one another over tea in a way that the other characters are all rather ill-suited for. Rarity and Twilight can sound believable while talking like adults about adult things, even though each of them is as inclined to completely flip out as any of their friends is. As enthralling as verbal sparring over mature topics can be, it probably would not have made for very entertaining children's programming.

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Well put.
I think that explains how this delightful short story just made it to my Favourites list.

10620222
That's very true. And it's part of why I love seeing how people explore these two in fanfiction together. :twilightsmile:

“Of course!” Rarity said hurriedly, nodding her head. “Your home is lovely and your family is too.” Rarity smiled once more. “Your mother’s cookies are quite devine, if I do say so myself.”

*divine

“Oh? And what’s that?” Rarity raised an eyebrow as she was pulled up from the bench - the smle now firm, and not brittle like before. Twilight was glad about that at least, even if she knew that Rarity’s troubles weren’t probably all gone. But Twilight would work on that in the future. For her friend.

*smile?

Also I notice you ending some sentences with a comma over a period, try to fix that.

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If you mean dialogue, the last is not a mistake! That is how dialogue in actual novels are written. It can be seen in the Fimfiction writing guide also. Said tags use commas at the end! Thank you for catching other mistakes though.

This was a nice simple story. I always found the idea of putting Rarity against Twilight's implied upper class upbringing interesting, and this premise of Rarity getting disappointed about how modest that really is is something I hadn't thought of. It was nice to see them share dialogue about that, and just have a conversation.

To pile on with the corrections, you used "people" at one point, lol.

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Thank you for the comment, Sigma! I always love Rarity and Twilight's potential dynamics (and probably would have went with a little ship-teasing if the requester hadn't specifically said platonic!) On a short time frame, I'm glad I nailed the aspect I wanted to get down: a simple conversation.

And ohnoo thank you for finding that!

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