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With a sigh, Pear Butter unsheathed her katana. "Master, forgive me," she half-whispered to her blade. "But I must go all out. Just this once."

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The story that you linked as a prequel to this one? The link leads to a 404 error.

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I submitted that first, then this a minute later. I am VERY annoyed that this went through first and the other is still in queue.

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If you think this is gay you should see the prequel!

Great story so far. If this is just the first chapter, then I can't wait to see what subsequent chapters are like.

By the way, I like what you did with the cover images of these two stories. :)

"As Rarity requested, Ellie lied down"
"As Rarity requested, Ellie lay down"?

And another good story (which despite being pretty much entirely erotica and me being in a hurry sent me out on two Wikipedia trips, one of which ended up at a particular pottery glazing technique and the other at an economic theory, and by the way I'm glad FoME pointed me to you :D), looks like; thank you for writing. :)

"there is anything is to be done"
"there is anything to be done"?

"It was something more that that, which"
"It was something more than that, which"?

"face was coated in not only in Rarity’s slick"
"face was coated not only in Rarity’s slick"?

(And that link mentioned in the author's note seems a good idea, by the way.)

Damn. Talk about getting off (well, not Ellie...) to a good start. Great detail and descriptions, sprinkled again with enough of Ellie's quirks and callbacks to her past/the human world to give this encounter even more meaning.

The way you had Rarity tease her before diving in to her nipples was... Damn.

Rarity nonconsentually dying Ellie's pubes was a nice bit of levity, although, yes, she should've asked first. Love how Rarity's reaction to Ellie asking her to stop was to belie her failure to give Ellie an orgasm. So sweet and caring. Rarity may be a lady, but she's no pillow princess. Damn straight. :heart:

Right, because she was a unicorn. The thing that was synonymous with “something that doesn’t exist.” The thing that gross straight couples were looking for when they messaged her on dating apps back when she presented more soft-butch, years ago now. She tried to stifle it, but she began giggling uncontrollably at this.

So did I. :rainbowlaugh: One of the reasons I've always hated using those apps...

The world needs more hot hornjobs. Daaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaamn. Although, I do like the headcanon/worldbuilding bit of anything sexual involving the horn being scene as more intimate than other sexual acts. It really does make sense, if you think about it. I've never been a fan of horn penetration, but given the delicate nature of both parts involved, I can see that being the "home run inside park" equivalent for unicorns.

No. She could not live with that. She was going to eat out this horse and eat out this horse hard. As hard as her ancestors once rode them across the Central Asian steppe.

Terrible analogy. Easier said than done, anyway.

You nailed the humor in this story. :rainbowlaugh: Little bits of levity to combine with the feels and sexiness later.

And what feels and sexiness there were in this! :twilightsmile: Like I've said before, I'm not into human x pony, but woman x mare is novel enough that I'll give it a look. Both of your stories in this vein have been a delight to read. Not just for the great writing (you know how to get down all those hot little details), but for the additional background/exposition of your wholly unique on both Equestria and the HiE character.

This last chapter was a satisfying climax in more than one way. Seeing Ellie get so emotional at being not just accepted, but celebrated, for who and what she/her body is made the resolution of this evening all the better.

Another excellent story from you!

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Talk about getting off (well, not Ellie...)

Ha! Gottem! :pinkiesad2:

The way you had Rarity tease her before diving in to her nipples was... Damn.

The part with the cloth tape measure in particular was something I had in mind for a long time before putting it down into a story. Glad to finally get it off my... chest.

Damn straight. :heart:

Nothing straight about this! (Sorry, had to do it.)

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So did I. :rainbowlaugh: One of the reasons I've always hated using those apps...

I was pretty happy to find that my first association with the word "unicorn" switched from that to our magical horse friends. To a lesser degree, same for the different association my brain has now with the word "twilight". Thank Celestia for this show!

The world needs more hot hornjobs. Daaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaamn.

Co-signing this sentiment.

given the delicate nature of both parts involved, I can see that being the "home run inside park" equivalent for unicorns.

Oh, definitely! Which is why Rarity is so negative about the whole idea.

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You nailed the humor in this story. :rainbowlaugh: Little bits of levity to combine with the feels and sexiness later.

Thank you! I guess that is somehow becoming a signature of my style. Would not have thought this at the start of my pony writing career.

Seeing Ellie get so emotional at being not just accepted, but celebrated, for who and what she/her body is made the resolution of this evening all the better.

So the funny thing is, it struck me as I was writing this that out of all my stories current and pending, this section might be the one that comes closest to the main theme of your The Sum Of Her? Of course, on a much more compressed timescale and with a lot less gravity.

And what feels and sexiness there were in this! :twilightsmile: Like I've said before, I'm not into human x pony, but woman x mare is novel enough that I'll give it a look. Both of your stories in this vein have been a delight to read. Not just for the great writing (you know how to get down all those hot little details), but for the additional background/exposition of your wholly unique on both Equestria and the HiE character.

Aaaaa thank you for such high praise! It really makes me more motivated to write more of this really weird stuff that I might be the only person in existence who would write.

Gay for Godot has said almost everything I would have said. But I want to add as well just how much your writing immerses the reader. It can feel like it's actually happening with the right details and yours hits the mark.

Poor Ellie though. I think a lot of us know what that feels like.

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thank you! can't think of a better compliment for this type of story, and yes, i think some of us do know what that's like.

I really like what you've done here re horns. Good. God. Up until now I'd hated the idea of hornjobs. It struck me as a piece of bone that couldn't have had that many sensitive nerves since we see them flicked all the time with little more than a mild "ouch." It also struck me as silly for being something extra intimate.

But now that you've taken this approach, with the magical protection around it making it impossible to brain yourself on the horn, letting it be more intimate makes so much sense. And I could see similar things re preening with pegasi, and maybe even something with the hooves for earth ponies. In each case, something so intimate it's considered taboo to do unless you're very committed to each other.

This is amazing and I love it.

Goodness me, the amount of detail that went into this third part. I could picture everything so well, and I thought the use of the voice clips was a neat touch. (Even if I can't not hear "gum on their bum" for the second one.)

I laughed at the East Asian Steppe joke, and I really, really liked the way in which Ellie was hesitating and processing, and Rarity was concerned, and it was so full of good consent all around and aaaaah that alone is so wonderful.

But wow Ellie... very lucky woman she is to get to do that for Rarity. To hear Rarity make those moans and to make her whinny. I wasn't quite expecting that and I'm still chuckling even though it makes perfect sense.

I loved every bit of this from start to finish. And I'm glad I stretched it out the way I did, letting myself absorb it slowly, really hammer in the details. Made it even more fun.

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i really like these ideas! just the idea of each tribe having an extra intimate extra erogenous zone feels like something that would make a lot of sense and is a really fun and meaningful idea in general. and for unicorn horns in particular, there's so much that can be done with the magical analogues of the sensation of touch, and what i came up with is just one example!

and thank you so much for those kind words! i love that you love it

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