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Mechawrecker


Writing is surprisingly satisfying.

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It was good, but the clop part during less of the half of the story is ofen not the best, try to make them more long or other next time ^^
It's still a good story, and i have the same problem with my clop.

10593702
Fair enough. I wanted the story to be remembered as more than just clop, but I get how this economy works.:twilightsmile:

10593715
Like i said, i do the same thing so :twilightsheepish:
I understand this

This is pretty good. I like it still.

10593979
Thanks! Any particular problems I need to fix?

This was a good read. I would certainly love to see how they handle an incestious pregnancy.

10594574
I'm pretty sure Frost finished in the wrong hole for that, but I could be wrong.:rainbowlaugh:

10594795
Oh i'm aware he finished in her tailhole, just if they continue like this i mean

10595037
Ah, I think these two have earned a little rest, but they might make a reappearance somewhere else.

*hint, hint*:ajsmug:

10595776
I couldn't agree more. Bro hoof! :rainbowdetermined2:

10595058
In that case i look forward to reading more of their antics

10595790
You can keep adding "really"s, it would still be fitting.:rainbowlaugh:

absolutely awesome

10598205
Thanks mate! Glad you enjoyed it.:twilightblush:

Story is good. Clop is good. You did a good job with this one.

10600535
Thanks mate! Means a lot.:twilightsmile:

10595058
I’ll be waiting.:yay:

10709108
You'll just have to stay tuned to find out.:trollestia:

10594204
a little bit with punctuations.

paragraph 7, 111, there are more....

10739155
Could you quote the specific sentences? I'm not sure how to access the paragraph numbers.:twilightblush:

Comment posted by Flora Blossom deleted Mar 26th, 2021

“BAH HA HA! Oh my Celestia, you ate it so hard!” he cried, wiping tears from his amber eyes.

The gold coins clattered across the counter as he snatched his bag and started towards the exit. The moment he moved, two sets of fuzzy hooves enveloped him while a pair of muzzles sloppily pecked each of his cheeks. “Where do you think you’re going, mister?”

His confused gaze shifted to exasperation as he exclaimed, “Wait, he’s a huge Wonderbolt fan!? Why the hay aren’t you out there getting raw-dogged!? That should have been the easiest mark of all time!”

Her expression darkened as she cuffed him over the head. “I’m not going to jump into bed with just any stallion! Despite what those nasty tabloids would have you believe, my tunnel isn’t that loose.”

Her excited grin melted away as she finished, “But when it comes to the moments in between the badass stunts, not many stick around after the show. It’s always ‘captain-this’ or ‘captain-that’, but no one seems to care about the mare under the uniform.”

She gazed forlornly at her muscular legs and messy mane. “It doesn’t help that I’m not exactly the model of feminine beauty. The extra strength and endurance is great and all, but most stallions see that as a drinking and hoof-wrestling buddy rather than dating material.”

An angry glare flashed across his muzzle. Why should what other ponies thought matter to them? Isn’t finding true love more important than anything else in the world? So what if the mare of his dreams turned out to be his sister? That just meant they’ve had plenty of time to know each other.

When his member emerged from her soaking love tunnel, Spitfire whimpered as her deprived nerves finally received the desired stimulation. Grinning into the bed sheets, she clenched around the tip of his cock, causing him to let out an unprepared moan. “Come on, bro. Don’t tell me you’re close already ~”

The moment she nodded, her eyes widened as his warm tip began pressing against the tight ring of muscle. Spitfire groaned at the sudden discomfort, but kept her breathing steady to avoid clenching before he was in.

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“BAH HA HA! ( Oh, )my Celestia, you ate it so hard!” he cried, wiping tears from his amber eyes.

111

The moment he {moved;} two sets of fuzzy hooves enveloped him while a pair of muzzles sloppily pecked each of his cheeks.

134

Why the hay {isn't} you out there getting raw-dogged!? That should have been the easiest mark of all time!”

135

Despite what those nasty tabloids would have you {believe;} my tunnel isn’t that loose.”

140

But when it comes to the moments in between the badass stunts, not many {sticks} around after the show.

141

The extra strength and endurance {are} great and all, but most stallions see that as a drinking and hoof-wrestling buddy rather than dating material.”

187

Why should what other ponies {have thought} matter to them? {So,} what if the mare of his dreams turned out to be his sister?

224

“{Oh,} my Celestia, I need this so bad!”

251

The moment she {nodded;} her eyes widened as his warm tip began pressing against the tight ring of muscle.

10739793
Thanks! I'll fix those soon. :pinkiehappy:

10742614
Thanks for your input! I'll definitely use it for future stories.:rainbowkiss:

Show me what you've got...

10839100
There are plenty more stories on my page with varying levels of sauce. :duck:

10839113
I'm a reviewer from the Reviewers' Mansion.

Show me what you've got...

^This^, is me simply announcing that I am currently reviewing your story.
Nothing more.
Nothing less.

Although I will say this fic is most certainly juicy.

10839122
Ah, that makes more sense! I hope you enjoyed it. :raritywink:

10839344
:raritywink:
Patience young one.

Hello there!
Your story has finally been reviewed by the Reviewers' Mansion, you can find it here!

10839605
Thanks! I'm really glad you enjoyed reading. :twilightsmile:

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