Rainbow Dash, looking for the biggest rush of her life, attempts to fly and not stop flying till she bends the laws of physics themselves.
Some set pieces, some introspection, some laughs.
First Pony fic I finished. Hope you like it.
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So...she killed everypony or something?
Take that, Fourth Wall! (And you too, Special Relativity!)
Now if you'd just clean up the punchline, you'd have a winner -- unless you're prepared to argue that Celestia can roll a yes.
Pretty good. Noticed one glaring typo... "The princess rolled her yes."
Still, the idea of Rainbow Dash breaking the universe is fairly funny. Least it wasn't Pinkie Pie this time...
Hey! What do you mean this time?
Shush Pinkie! Stop breaking the fourth wall! I just fixed it.
Meany-pants.
Look Pinkie, you can... And she's gone again. Right, well then. Good story.
Very Good! It wasn't anything extreme, but it was entertaining.
CELESTIA WILL BE PISSED!
...and that's how Equestria was made
Nice read!
Okay okay... In my opinion, the amount of errors in this fic is too damn high! I don't have time to go through them all, but suffice to say you need an editor. I'm an abnormally picky reader when it comes to technical stuff, and things like changes in tense and typos really draw me out of a narrative. It's not a bad idea though. And you should definitely keep writing, because I know you can do better.
The white void: a sheet of drawing paper.
There are a couple typos here and there, but the concept is pretty funny in itself.
Far Beyond The Sun - Yngwie Malmsteen
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But no seriously, it's a lot like this...
Well done good sir!
So I'm reading... and I'm like, this is just getting stupid.
Then I read the punch line.
I lol'd!
So is RD stranded there with Celestia while she creates the universe?
The alternative ending would have Pinkie Pie telling her that she's crossed beyond The Fourth Wall and that she (Pinkie) will have to show her the way back on-screen.
"On screen? What the hay does that mean?"
"Rainbow Dash, we're characters in a children's entertainment and you've somehow managed to fly off of the frame into the undrawn part of the page!"
"Um... What?"
"You're literally outside the boundaries of our reality! I do it all the time but I'm crazy and can handle that stuff. You on the other hand... Well, there are things out here that you aren't ready to see; probably never will be ready. I've got to be sure you don't see or hear it or you'll be crazier than Discord by the time you get back!" Pinkie knocks Dash out with a quick hoof to the head and slings her over her back. "You owe me a focus episode for fixing this Lauren!"
"My pleasure Pinkamina; thanks for your help!"
1202924 and thats how equestria was unmade XD
That was a lot better than I was expecting. :) Very funny at the end!
I honestly have to give it to Dashie, nobody would even attempt to beat the light, even if they potentially could.