"Hey Roomy wake up!" Twilight shouted jumping on top of me knocking the wind out of me.
"Twilight....don't....do that." I told her gasping for breath.
"Do what?" She asked jumping again.
"That!" I shouted once I got my breath.
"Oh you mean jumping on you." Twilight said. I nodded gently pushing her off of me. I looked back and saw she was just staring at me.
"What's up?" I asked looking at her.
"I'm hungry again..." Twilight said.
"So that's not a big deal I'll pick us up something to eat." I said.
"But I'm going to make you go broke!" Twilight cried out.
"Trust me Twilight I've got enough money to spend here and there." I told her smiling as I grabbed my towel and fresh pair of clothes. She looked at me confused.
"Oh where are my manners would you like to take your shower first?" I asked. She nodded I smiled and showed her where the bathroom was she quickly jumped in the shower and used her magic to turn on the shower. I quickly closed the door and went into my room. I sat there and just listened to music waiting for her to come out of the dang shower. I started to fall asleep again until I heard.
"Ok your turn." Twilight said as she walked into her room. I quickly jumped into the shower only to find the hot water was almost gone. I did a quick five minute shower and dried off. I saw the time on my phone and slipped on my clothes I opened Twilight's room and told her to hurry up.
"What's the big rush class is not for another hour." Twilight said looking confused.
"Hurry we are going to miss the breakfast menu at McDonald's!" I shouted grabbing my keys I tripped over a random college book and slammed face first into the door. I was stunned for a second and my nose started bleeding like crazy but I didn't care.
"Are you alright?" Twilight asked.
"Of course just a little nose bleed." I said stuffing a Kleenex up my nose. I unlocked my car and jumped over the little mud ditch we had for the water to go when it rains. I slammed face first into the hood of the car.
"Are you ok this time?" Twilight asked looking at me while I was on the ground.
"Yea I think I broke my nose that time." I told her holding my nose.
"Oh what should I do?" Twilight asked nervously.
"Nothing it's fine I can stick through my classes today I'll just go to the hospital later." I said laying on the ground.
"Ok then I guess we missed breakfast I'll just eat a bigger lunch what about you?" I asked seeing her horn light up. "Whoa wait what are you doing!" I shouted seeing her lower her horn closer to me.
"You'll see." Twilight said placing her horn on my nose I waited a few minutes until she lifted it off of me.
"Whoa my nose it feels good as new,that magic stuff sure is helpful." I said touching my nose like a person touches something after surgery.
"Are you forgetting something?" Twilight asked giving me a stern look.
"Oh yea thanks and I owe you one big time." I said getting into the car. I opened the passenger door expecting her to be afraid this time but she jumped right in.
"Well then buckle up." I told her starting the car.
"Buckle up?" Twilight asked.
"You know seat belt here I'll just do it for you." I said reaching over and trying to make a seat belt work the best it could for a pony. I put the car in reverse and then we were off for the whole four mile drive.
"Thanks I'll see you later roomy." Twilight said as I parked the car.
"Yep just meet me here." I told her running to class. I opened the door only to be met with a lot of stares.
"Ah Mr.Abbott you're late." The professor said to me.
"I had a broken nose." I said to him.
"Really I see no evidence." He told me inspecting my nose.
"Wait though he is living with that unicorn I read they can heal wounds." I heard Jay said.
"Hmm very well next time try to show up on time." The professor said to me.
"Thanks." I whispered to Jay sitting next to him.
"No problem you're lucky I remembered the unicorn so how freaky is it living with a pony?" Jay asked.
"Well actually she kinda has grown on me a little and I owe her big time with the nose thing." I whispered back.
"So then if a murder victim is stabbed in the neck in winter. In Michigan while it is not snowing out and there is liquid around the stab wound what was the murder weapon?" The professor asked and had no responses until I raised my hand.
"It's simple if it's not snowing out and the body is facing away from any snow on the ground, that assuming there is not any. That would mean a sharpened icicle could perhaps be the murder weapon. Plus those things fall on dozens of people, position the body correctly I could even look like an accidental death. So if that is true then the murder weapon is an icicle." I said the professor looked a bit dumbstruck.
"Alright then how would you look for evidence besides the liquid around the neck?" He asked me.
"Simple you inspect the snow around the victim and look for any traces of frozen water. If there is any ice you remove the snow and use the liquid for any fingerprints. If he is wearing a glove find out if any of the ice ripped off some of the gloves fabric. Other then that the case would still take a long time to solve unless he made one of those crucial mistakes." I said.
"That is correct Mr.Abbott." The professor told me.
"Nice job there wonder boy." Jay whispered.
"Ah Miss Sparkle you're late." Twilight's professor said.
"I know and I'm so sorry my roommate had a broken nose and I healed it so we are late because of that." Twilight rushed out of her mouth.
"Wait really that's like the fourth time he broke his nose." Katie said.
"So you can confirm he broke his nose?" The professor asked Katie.
"No but it happens a lot." Katie said and soon a few laughs could be heard.
"Alright because this is the first day of class I will let this slide." The professor told Twilight.
"Hey Twilight come and sit by me." Katie said. Twilight smiled and quickly ran over next to Katie.
"So how did he break his nose this time?" Katie asked.
"Well first he tripped over a book and slammed face first into a door,then he fell face first into his car and that's how he broke his nose." Twilight said.
"Of course let me guess he tried to jump over the ditch?" Katie asked.
"Yep and then he fell." Twilight told her.
"Of course he did." Katie giggled.
"So then during this time period I wish to start with a dog for all of you to study." The professor said.
"Wait don't tell me they are trying to make us study our dogs like they did a few years ago like they did with my sister." Katie sighed.
"How is this supposed to happen? Also does this type of thing happen usually here?" Twilight asked.
"Well normally no but sometimes you get that crazy teacher who thinks this is like a dog pound and we have to bring our dogs in." Katie said.
"If you don't have any dogs then we will give you some as property of the school." The professor said.
"Wait when did this start happening?" Katie asked.
"Since this year, this is my class and if you don't like how I do things you can leave." The professor told Katie.
"Sorry." Katie said to the professor. Several students did not have dogs every student had gotten a dog besides Twilight.
"Sorry Miss Sparkle but we ran out maybe a neighbor or something could help?" The professor asked.
"Maybe." Twilight said.
"Well how boring was class for you?" I asked hoping into the car.
"Well I need a dog." Twilight said.
"I would get us one but the apartment won't let us get one unless we do it in secret. I'm sorry but the last thing I need to do is get kicked out I would never hear the end of it." I said.
"It's fine maybe a shelter or a vet could help me out." Twilight sighed out. I stopped by Pizza Hut and picked up a cheese pizza for Twilight and I.
"This pizza stuff is really good." Twilight said taking a bite.
"Yea but it's terrible for you." I laughed.
"How?" Twilight asked.
"It's fattening I don't know if you ponies care about your figures but if you do then just give the rest of the pizza to me." I said with a grin on my face.
"I'm not worried." Twilight said pulling the box closer to her.
"Well I'm going to take a nap I'll see you when I wake up." I said closing my eyes and soon passed out on the couch. Twilight's phone started ringing.
"Hello?" Twilight asked.
"Is that any way to greet your mentor." Celestia said jokingly.
"Oh Princess how is it in Equestria?" Twilight asked.
"Still the same but with humans and what about Earth?" Celestia asked.
"Well my roommate is a human male but he is really nice but I had to heal his broken nose." Twilight said.
"What about your classes?" Celestia asked.
"Well I need a dog but we can't get one and it's for class." Twilight sighed out sadly.
"You said your roommate is a human right?" Celestia asked.
"Yes he is." Twilight said looking at me.
"We made a discovery one of a unicorns spells went wrong and it turns out the humans D.N.A can be altered to any animal a unicorn wants." Celestia said.
"So you're saying I could turn him into a dog if wanted?" Twilight asked.
"Yes you could it's like all spells it's the mutation spell but it's results are much more fun on a human." Celestia said.
"I don't know if he would like that." Twilight mumbled.
"Well what is he doing right now?" Celestia asked.
"Sleeping." Twilight said.
"Just use the spell on him right now besides I think he owes you for the nose thing." Celestia said.
"You're right thank you princess." Twilight said hanging up. Twilight walked over to where I was sleeping and place her horn on my head. I was a heavy sleeper so it takes a lot to wake me up.
Twilight walked back and watched the spell take it's effect. She watched in awe as my body changed it's shape and eventually I became a dog. A Beagle to be exact. I awoke shortly after not noticing the spell as I jumped down from the couch and looked up to see Twilight.
"Now sit." Twilight said giggling.
"How are you so big did you shrink me or something?" I asked.
"No you don't notice anything different?" Twilight asked.
"Well I sure can hear you much better and smell much better. Why is everything so hot?" I asked.
"Hmm strange your vision is still colored." Twilight observed.
"Of course wait why would you say that?" I asked.
"You're a dog now silly." Twilight told me.
"What you're kidding." I said until I saw paws in front of me I jumped in shock.
"Turn me back into a human." I ordered.
"You owe me remember." Twilight told me.
"Well yea but I mean a dog come on." I said.
"Hmm well let's see I saved you a trip to the hospital." Twilight told me.
"Fine...." I sighed.
"Now sit." Twilight giggled.
"No way." I said until she held up a slice of pizza my mouth stared to water the second I saw it.
"Sit and I'll give you this." Twilight said.
"Must resist urge to get pizza." I said turning my head away from it.
"Come on please this is for my class." Twilight begged.
"What about my class!" I shouted.
"I'll take you to your professor I'm sure they'll understand." Twilight told me.
"You owe me then if I'm missing class time." I said.
"What if this got you out of class?" Twilight asked.
"Hmm I guess." I sighed.
"Now sit." Twilight told me. I rolled my eyes and laid down.
"No not lay down sit!" Twilight said a bit aggravated.
"Sorry I don't see any pizza not happening." I said.
"Fine then lay down." Twilight said to me. I sat up she then used her magic to make me sit still.
"Really I fell for that." I sighed.
"Yes I can't believe it worked." Twilight giggled pulling out a notepad and taking notes.
"Now lay down." She said my body fell as her magic released.
"Good boy." She said rubbing my head.
"This is so embarrassing and could you cut it with the dog crap I am a human." I said.
"Nope you're a dog now." Twilight told me. I growled which made her jump back.
'This is why I did not like ponies because they can do this to me.' I thought. 'Well you had to be nice didn't you.' My other so called bad side of my mind thought. 'Well actually I took a nap and woke up a dog not exactly like I said hey Twilight make me a dog.'
"You're so adorable I could just pet you." Twilight said.
"Not happening." I said trying to move out of the magic bonds.
"I think you don't have a say on this." Twilight told me.
"Wait till I become human again." I growled at her.
"Only if I let you..." Twilight said with a bit of threat in her voice. I whimpered not knowing how to do it.
"Well then I got enough information for now. What shall I do with you for now.?" Twilight asked.
"Let me turn back into human form." I said.
"Sorry but the experiments results would change then." Twilight told me. A knock came from the door.
"Come in." Twilight called out.
"Hey Twilight how's the dog find coming along?" Katie asked walking in.
"I have a dog now." Twilight said pointing to me.
"Oh he is so adorable!" Katie shouted rushing over to me.
"Katie stop this kinda oh wait right there." I said kicking my leg like crazy.
"Did that dog just talk?" Katie asked.
"Well yea it's Tyler I used a spell and made him a dog." Twilight said.
"So wait that's him?" Katie asked.
"Yea it's me I'm not a huge fan of her magic if I can't even sleep without being a different animal every time I wake up." I said.
"This is so funny though you're a dog you don't think this is funny?" Katie asked.
"Let's see Twilight is taller then me now I feel like a midget." I said.
"True I guess if I woke up only about a foot tall I would not be to happy." Katie told me petting me still.
"But I'll tell you what getting pet feels amazing." I said wagging my tail.
"Wait how are we going to school?" I asked.
"I know what if I drove your car?" Katie asked.
"No way besides you'll never get the keys." I said kicking them under the couch.
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Why besides I'm sure my dog would love to have a new friend." Katie said.
"No there is no way I'm being friends with that giant thing it's not a dog!" I shouted.
"Hey now just because he is a St.Bernard don't mean he is not a dog." Katie argued.
"Here are the keys." Twilight said using her magic to hand them to her. I barked at her for doing that.
"You know what though how am I going to sneak a St.Bernard in here." Katie said.
"No you're not just give me the keys and leave." I said.
"Oh I know we could just pick up your dog on the way to school." Twilight said.
"Yea that could work." Katie agreed with a grin on her face.
"You hurt my car and I'll hurt you." I growled at her.
"Not like this you won't." Katie said making fun of me.
"Well I can tell you two are good friends." Twilight giggled.
"How?" We both asked.
"You just remind me of some of my friends back in Equestria." Twilight told us.
"I'm not even going to bother." I sighed.
"Oh I know who's bed I can use." Katie said with the same grin on her face.
"No there is no way you're using my bed or anything of mine!" I shouted.
"Well I never thought about the Xbox." Katie said running into the room and slamming the door shut. Twilight just looked down at me.
"Great now where am I going to sleep?" I asked.
"Oh with me!" Twilight shouted picking me up and putting me in her room she closed the door just before I almost ran out.
"Must get out." I said trying to jump up and reach the doorknob. Twilight saw what I was trying to do and locked the door.
"Come on settle down it's not like I'm going to hurt you or something." Twilight told me.
"This sucks so bad." I sighed.
"Hey maybe you could show me how to learn so stuff on the computer." Twilight said.
"Sorry can't hear you I'm asleep." I said snoring.
"You sure are stubborn." Twilight giggled. I still pretended like I was asleep. Twilight just rolled her eyes and put me on her bed before laying down. I fell asleep only to wake up what felt like a short nap.
"Oh god I have to pee." I said jumping down from the bed. I scratched the door and made crying sounds.
"What's the matter?" Twilight asked.
"I have to pee." I said. She used her magic to open the door I quickly dashed into the bathroom and jumped into the bathtub. I jumped out
and ran around the house for no reason.
"Oh it's all ready eleven!" Twilight shouted picking me up and slammed on my door.
"Oh holy crap!" Katie shouted running out to the car.
"Um a little help." I said trying to get into the car before Twilight picked me up. Katie started the car and backed out faster then I wanted her to.
"Easy with this car otherwise you're going to pay me for any damages." I said.
"Calm down nothing is going to happen." She told me.
"Wait here." She said parking the car only to come out with her giant dog and put him in the back seat where I was. He spotted me and started sniffing me.
"Nice doggy." I said backing up he kept trying to sniff me until he got till a certain area.
"No stay away." I said jumping to the front of the car. Both girls just giggled at what was happening.
"Well then Miss Sparkle an A for you." The professor said after reading Twilight's report. The next two days went by super slow but I stuck through them getting research notes from Jay who only laughed at seeing me a dog.
"Oh my god that was terrible." I said as Twilight turned me back into a human.
"Come on you know you liked it the way all those girls thought you were adorable." Katie told me.
"That part was good but everything else sucked." I said running to my laptop and searched how to stop unicorns magic from transforming you. The answer was eat a banana a week.
"Although I don't have to worry about turning into an animal ever again. Besides I never did like being an animal it felt so strange." I said looking at Katie.
"I can't tell you anything I just thought it was funny." Katie giggled at me.
"I'm surprised we pulled off the whole dog thing surprised no one snitched on us." I said.
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Well I sorta used a spell on you while here making you invisible to the others." Twilight told me blushing a bit.
"New rule no using magic on me without my permission because that shi er stuff freaks me out." I said pointing at Twilight.
"Why?" Twilight asked.
"It's creepy you don't see me turning people into animals or making stuff float in the air." I sighed out frustrated that she turned me into a dog.
"You don't have to be so rude." Katie told me with a little of a I'm going to kill you face.
"No he is right I'm a freak." Twilight said running into her room.
"Really come on you started getting along and this?" Katie asked aggravated.
"Well let's see we were until she turned me into a dog don't get me wrong I love dogs, but turned into that is a different story!" I shouted at her.
"It was for her project and besides you owed her for her fixing your nose you know sometimes you can be a real jerk, no that does not even have the right word the correct word is you can be a real jackass and you wonder why I left you!" Katie shouted slamming the door as she left the apartment. I sighed and just sat on the couch before I went outside and slammed the door. I started my car and took off out of the parking space burning a bit of rubber before I took the car out of park.
"Damn damn and more damn!" I shouted driving to no where special.
"She has the nerve to stick up for the pony after she turned me into a dog and used magic with out me knowing!" I shouted to myself.
"She did fix your nose though." I sighed still talking to myself. "Still she just did her freaky unicorn magic thing on me while I was sleeping the nerve of her." I told myself before turning.
"Great an ambulance with no sirens stopped in the middle of the road how strange." I mumbled to myself. I watched as the ambulance just started up again and let me pass it for it to only follow me. I turned left and watched as it turned left as well following me still. I turned right it turned right I turned into a parking lot and it followed me into there. I stopped and it stopped.
"What the hell is going on?" I asked myself before I decided to head back home. I quickly took off and turned only to see a guy driving the wrong way in my lane coming right at me! I quickly tried to turn my car out of the way only for him to slam into the car. The car flipped and rolled and flew into the air rolling into the parking lot. Shard of glass cutting my body all over the airbag inflated and I slammed my face into it only to be unconscious from the impact. I awoke only to find myself awake on the couch. "What the hell just happened?" I asked seeing no one or no pony. I looked down and saw a note that Katie left.
"I know by the time you remember our argument that I slammed the door and just waited there seeing nothing happened I left. I looked inside to see you taking a nap and was about to punch you for not caring about how Twilight feels. So I wrote you this letter just say you're sorry to her after all you are her only real friend here." I read the note out loud. I put the note down and quickly ran into Twilight's room to say I was sorry.
"Hey Twilight I'm sorry." I said only to see now unicorn any where. I ran into my room and saw no unicorn in there either. I found a note on the bathroom door.
"You're right I'm a freak so I decided to leave you alone forever. I don't want you to come looking for me you won't find me by the time you read this letter. There is a whole three months of rent in the kitchen bye for ever ex roomy." I read out loud feeling a bit of tears fill up my eyes.
"Damn damn and more damn!" I shouted grabbing my phone and keys. I started my car and burnt a bit of rubber on the tires.
Sounds an awful lot like "But She's A Pony!" by Uke-Joe, but I'll give it a shot.
Edit: COMMAS, MOTHERFUCKER DO YOU KNOW WHAT THEY ARE?!?
I'ma go put this on read later, cause I'm tired.
Not the most original idea, but whatever.
It doesn't bother me if it looks like another fic, with the amount of fictions written here it's bound to happen sometimes.
But I'm curious so I'll give it a try!
*crack knuckles*
Lez dodis!
1207940 Yep, and "But she's a Pony" is strikingly similar to "Roommate" So this is the third version of one of these stories. Only Pinkie, Rarity, and Applejack are left, so someone better get on that while the going is still good.
Anyway I'm off to actually read this now.
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I have to agree with you. Try to re-read what you write after you think your chapter is done. Read it out loud if you need to. Sometimes by doing so, you realize some parts sound really awkward. You'll realize some of your sentences are very long, and you wouldn't be able to say them without breathing in the middle, place a comma there. It's basic, but it would already be better.
I feel the story is too fast paced. We don't have the time to clearly understand what is going that already something else happens.
It could use, and need, a lot of work.
I like where this story is going so far, but the grammar is atrocious. I could edit for you if you want.
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I had 3 people try.
There's no fucking way.
1208216 Fair enough.
I really don't want to discourage OP from continuing a story even if it's a tad unoriginal. However, it is unreadable as of now. It needs grammar.
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Okay, I usually love to support new writers.
I love to see them experience writing, and get better.
But this, this just crosses the line.
Sorry, OP, I do sincerely apologize.
but plz fix everything
1208307 S'bit harsh, no?
1208312 I concur.
1208312 However, it's not a COMPLETE ripoff! Twilight has an hp, and Fluttershy had a mac.
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Oh, you.
1208356 Not sure if sarcasm.
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Alright lets give credit where credit is due.
Credit to The Roommate for the idea of a pony and a human being roommates, easy enough
Credit to But, She's a Pony for having the roommates have romantic interest in each other, in a weird messed up second person but not exactly style of writing
Credit to My Roommate is a pony for inventing comma-less writing, and heavily leaning off of But, Shes a Pony.
Obviously this guy has read But, Shes a Pony, and it was fairly obvious that the concept of my story was the roommate + romance. But let's focus on the story at and here, My roommate is a Pony.
1. Comma:
com·ma/ˈkämə/
Noun:
A punctuation mark (,) indicating a pause between parts of a sentence. It is also used to separate items in a list and to mark the place...
A minute interval or difference of pitch.
This is the main problem with this story. Look I think it's just GREAT if anyone were to make a Twilight Sparkle version of But, She's a Pony. Imitation and Flattery and all that. But I refuse support a story written by someone who doesn't understand the usage of a comma.
2. Twilight Sparkle. That isn't her. She might look like Twilight Sparkle, sound like her, maybe even smell like her, but she is not Twilight Sparkle. This is a random pony in Twilight Sparkle skin.
3. You have some Original ideas. I like that. The keys, the car, the guitar, and he uses an Xbox 360 instead of a Computer, the dog, Katie, you made a joke about bananas somewhere, . You have a sad tag but I have found nothing sad here.
4. Lack of a comedy tag. That is a huge problem. This story is funny.
TL;DR: You need commas, Twilight isn't Twilight, and this story needs a comedy tag, not a sad tag. This isn't a complete hack of But, She's a Pony. Overall, I am eager to see where you go from this. WILL CHARACTER BE A DOG FOREVER? WILL THE MONSTER WHO ABDUCTED TWILIGHT BE FOUND? WILL COMMAS BE INVENTED? Find out next time on 'My Roommate is a pony?'
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What the fuck did you just fucking say about me, you little bitch? I'll have you know I graduated top of my class in the Navy Seals, and I've been involved in numerous secret raids on Al-Quaeda, and I have over 300 confirmed kills. I am trained in gorilla warfare and I'm the top sniper in the entire US armed forces. You are nothing to me but just another target. I will wipe you the fuck out with precision the likes of which has never been seen before on this Earth, mark my fucking words. You think you can get away with saying that shit to me over the Internet? Think again, fucker. As we speak I am contacting my secret network of spies across the USA and your IP is being traced right now so you better prepare for the storm, maggot. The storm that wipes out the pathetic little thing you call your life. You're fucking dead, kid. I can be anywhere, anytime, and I can kill you in over seven hundred ways, and that's just with my bare hands. Not only am I extensively trained in unarmed combat, but I have access to the entire arsenal of the United States Marine Corps and I will use it to its full extent to wipe your miserable ass off the face of the continent, you little shit. If only you could have known what unholy retribution your little "clever" comment was about to bring down upon you, maybe you would have held your fucking tongue. But you couldn't, you didn't, and now you're paying the price, you goddamn idiot. I will shit fury all over you and you will drown in it. You're fucking dead, kiddo.
1208446 if you could please I really need one
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How about we don't go off topic, and we write that into a different fic?
1208216 i.qkme.me/3h0h.jpg I am willing to give a try!
And now for some meaningless random thought from BronyCup!
"I think Twilight Sparkle tastes like Vanilla Ice Cream when you kiss her."
This has been meaningless random thought by BronyCup!
1208636 I'm with Texxy bad enough she stole me xbow pretty much
umm is tyler about to have a de ja vu moment and crash his car... wait did twilight uses her magic on him again so she could leave with out being disrupted
1208819 in good time my friend once I write the next chatper
oh and on another note i would like to say that i agree with tyler that what twilight did was wrong... I mean she betrayed his trust by not asking him permission first and then doing it while he was sleeping where a person is supposed to feel safe.
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1207940 Be nice! He's probably a beginning writer!
Well, I tried to read it. I made it about halfway through the first chapter. The truth is, the lack of formatting and punctuation makes it hard to read. In my experience, readers won't put up with something that makes them work harder to comprehend. Your success is directly proportional to the amount of work you put in.
Don't take it too hard. At the end of The Roommate I encouraged others to write their own versions, so I can't really complain too much.
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Fourth version. Of Wubs and Words features DJ-PON3 and makes me happy.
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There was a story long ago whose title I can't remember now where a guy was living with Pinkie. I just adapted it to college.
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Would that be guerilla gorillas?
1208454>>yea I'm going to edit this and lol at the last part of your comment with the find out next time
1208470 DUDE YOUR FUCKING STUPID YOUR NOT IN THE NAVY SEALS I HAD TO HAVE OVER 600 CONFIRMED KILLS AND MILITARY SOLDIERS AS MYSELF HAVE NO FUCKING SPIES DO YOU WORK FOR THE CIA OR FBI NO YOU DON'T YOUR A FUCKING 12 YR OLD THINKING HE CAN BE SOMETHING HE ISNT YEAH DUDE COME FUCK WITH ME IM A GREEN BERET SEE YOU GET SO FAR BRO I HAVE BEEN IN THE MOST WORST SITUATIONS POSSIBLE ONE OF THEM WAS HAVING HALF MY SIDE BLOW OFF WITH 3RD DEGREE BURNS AND EXPOSED RIBS AND A LUNG SO DUDE FUCK YOU
1208470 AND ALSO YOU CAN BE DISHONOURABLY DISCHARGED FOR THREATENING THE GENERAL PUBLIC IN CYBER OR PHYSICAL WAYS SO DUDE SETTLE DOWN AND GO HOME AND ALSO IF YOU ARE IN THE ARMY WHAT RANK ARE YOU OOP SETTLE DOWN BACK UP YOUR TALKING TO MAJOR JEROME MORRISON NOW
1210296 Well even if he is in the seals like he said secret missions they don't go through the hell the rest of military does and if he is a sniper sure if he misses a shot he is fucked but other then that every other branch mostly the army goes through hell seeing their friends the next day and possibly gone the next. You never know what is going to happen in the front lines you have to watch your every step I forgot the name of it but every family member of mine has fought in a war since the civil war. But yea my family members have told me the hell they go through on the front lines so I salute you for your bravery
1210323 Its just sad for him to disrespect the seals like that and its impossible to be a sniper in the seal all you can be as far as sniper goes is a squad sharpshooter with a M110 yes we are train with any weapon the army has to offer so we are ready to use it when it come to it but no we don't have paired snipers with: the sharpshooter and spotter we have usually in a squad of six 2 of them are equipted for squad urban sharpshooting and suppressive
1210346 Yea not going to lie I have really high respect for the seals they go through some hell in training and I think are the second most trained force behind the sas and must give you credit for being a Green Baret I think third or fourth most trained force in the world. My pops was Special forces military intel before he was retired. And ouch what about your wound you get an honorable discharge for something like that?
1210373 nah dude I loved it I ended up with a colapsed lung and 6 broken ribs but I got a choice because I was healing well but I only got a desk job now I was only gonna join the army for four years and go off to join Blackwater PMC but I got offered to join the green baret's so I stayed I'm going on 9 years now military service and I'm 30
1210386 Dang glad to hear you recovered well just don't die on us Soldier
1210405 I still have alot of life left in me so don't worry
1210449 Good hate to see some one I even talked to in comments go lost a few good friends hell good friend great friends
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1210469
Oh pls.
You really don't understand the humor of Copypasta.
There's so much you missed.
Obviously it's bullshit.
Chill your toes and nipples thoroughly.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=b5umS7Ff_ps
by the way your OC is bad and you should feel bad
/NO ETIQUETTE.
1209630
Yes.
That was a copypasta.
1210346
HOW is that disrespect on my part?
I've got etiquette, and I'm a decent kid. Believe me, I'd never... EVER... purposely disrespect any military officry for my country... scratch that, any country.
also,
>we are train with any weapon the army has to offer
No, you don't. You train with standard US Military rifles and whatever your [platoon leader] can afford. They teach you recoil control for each standard round, for example the .223 and the .308.
Seriously, before overreacting, get a little knowledge.
Please don't forget that you're on the internet. Seriously. Ya' can't do shit.
1211008 stupid stupid stupid we aren't trained with 308. we are trained with 12.7,.556.,7.62 and 45. also 9mm and many more plus we do train with most weapons the military has to offer and also every other military division I know of does the same thing when called for
1211046
7.62×51mm NATO is the standard round for the AK 47.
Also known as the .308.
You also train with the 7.62×39mm.
I think that's the .355?
Correct me if I'm wrong.
1211008>>1211046 Im with skywind on this one, yes Im a kid, yes I don't know anything about the military, or special forces or anything like that, but skywind makes the best, and most believible arguement.
1211008>>1211046 Really though, if we can't stop arguing between ourselves.... no wonder almost everyone else hates us.
1211797
Can no one understand a simple joke?
Jeez.
I don't see why you guys are getting so serious over it.
It's the internet, and I made a joke.
we'll fucking live, will we not?
1211803 yeah I guess we will.
NEEDS.EDITOR.
1211797 Love and Tolerance FUCK!
1210469
Dude you need an editor as bad as Luna needs a psychiatrist! (What Princesses Need)
Holy fucking shitballs the lack of proper engrish made my balls explode. Jesus its bad.
But the story is good, there is potential.
Commas, they're your best friend.... Please?
Oh and pacing, never forget about pacing
Oh and i kind of see what you did there with "eat a banana once a week" like approved
1.Oh I would be so angry on both of them for that one. And Twilight and Katie have no point i think, He said Twilight should ask and it is never nice to do such a thing without permission.
2. Err what happen with him and the Car thing was he dreaming?
3. Twilight is a bit overreacting i think but i like the story