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How so? He likes Metal music like you do. He dislikes humans like you do. He likes ponies like you do. And it's only been 2 chapters and he already ranted about how bad capitalism, plastic and climate change are. So he shares your politics. Those feel very personal.

There are certainly plenty of people on this planet who share those points

Yep, Likes Metal, Check
Dislikes people in general, Check
Likes ponies, (looks around at all the pony porn on the walls) Check
Capitalism, plastic, Climate change bad, Well, two out of three ain't bad.

So Hi Elu, You certainly aren't the only person with those views.

As for Climate change, research the Medieval Warm Period. It was from 800 AD to 1300 AD. and warmed the earth so much Grapes and vineyards flourished in England and in countries above the 55 parallel, where its far too cold for grapes to grow today. Like we have summer and winter, the earth has warm and cold periods. Micro hot and cold cycle measured by the lunar calendar, Macro Hot and Cold cycles measured in geological time. (hundreds of years to tens of thousands of years per cycle)

This story is on my to do list, prob get to it this weekend.

The Monk
"Turning to the now gaping Shining Armor, “listen you little turd nugget, this is the holidays. A time in which no one is supposed to be a dick to another. So how about you pull on your big boy pants, and act like the adult you are supposed to be.” -Morgan83

great chapters! keep it up!

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The author doesn’t know enough about the topic to write about it, and based on the fact that we’re still having this problem years later

I think it's an unfair critique, considering that the story only has three chapters, all of which cover the same day. They establish the protagonist's personality and thought process, and his thoughts don't just go to music right away because his priority is to survive. I can't just start writing about his relationship with music when it doesn't make sense.

Additionally, they can’t help but to shoehorn their misanthropic views in at every opportunity.

I am not misanthropic. I used to be, but now I recognize that humans aren't inherently bad or good - we depend on our surroundings. We are a product of our upbringing along with our experiences. On top of that, even if I were misanthropic, pointing out bad things about humanity and where they could lead is not being misanthropic.

Second, you are reading the thoughts of the character. They may or may not reflect my own thoughts. And do please consider that the character has reasons to feel the way he does. If he didn't, your critique would make sense. Otherwise, you're just saying that you don't like his personality based on subjective reasons, not more objective ones like characterization.

They completely ignore the conventions established by far better fictions on this site, and as a result, even from the first chapter, you can see important problems, from a story point of view, that may have been interesting to see the protagonist take on that are completely overlooked and solved at will.

This is where your critique is fair, in my opinion. I'd like to hear what would actually be interesting to see the character solve from your perspective.

Adding in a slight obsession with the idea of sex that, while I wouldn’t quite call it excessive, definitely does stand out.

All a part of the main character's characterization. You don't have to like the entirety of his personality or traits or wants.

Good luck to you, and I hope I’m wrong

I've taken all the criticism I've received so far to heart even if I don't agree that certain parts of it are fair.

The main character doesn't like the taste of sugar anymore!?! Q_Q Makes me a tad sad, as I love sugar. Basically a sugar-powered fae-like being...

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Another rewrite

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Nope, just the first one. Like a few people before you, you confuse it with Alicorn of Music written by another person, who asked me for permission after reading the original.

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No. Wait. I think I got confused with the adolescence one. My bad