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Dawn Darkness

An author practicing with the world of colorful ponies. I hope we can be great friends, fellow pony fans!


Once upon a time, there was a young man who have had a boring life on Earth.

While his life on Earth has been lonely, he found himself a pen pal who he often wrote to. After meeting his pal in person one day at school, he gets to see the kingdom of Bloodonia, the home of Merlin Spark VII.

After a year living in Bloodonia, Daniel gets pulled into the magical land of Equestria, a world he only knew from stories that his parents told him about while growing up, whereas he would go by a whole new name: Dawn Darkness.

Join the easy-going, fun-loving Pegasus on his journey to find a way to his parents and have his life completed once and for all.

The character, Merlin Spark VII/Solar Eclipse, belongs to Edward Sapphire. All scenes involving him is with thanks to my good friend who has a special place in this story for his character.

This story contains references to various things involving Disney/Pixar ONWARD, Harry Potter, and other things that represent fantasy.

Co-author: Edward Sapphire

Opening Theme: Nameless Story

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 39 )

Huh, nice. I guess we have something in regarding of receiving his help, then. Thanks for letting me know of his previous collaborations, Mister E.

I wonder what his reaction will be like when he’s turn into a pony. Also, this rewrite version is very impressive you did a great job.

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! I am always happy to receive such comments. We appreciate it (myself and Edward).

Yep. I knew he would be surprised when he’s now turned into a Pegasus. Good job on your rewrite chapter this is going well.

You can thank me as well.
I mean, I’m not his partner on that one for nothing.
Also... you’re welcome.

Planning something? It can't be a trap, can it? Oh, wait: IT'S A TRAP!

when did Admiral Ackbar get here

Good question. Why did he think of that? Well, thanks for commenting, Wartank. We appreciate you read our piece. I hope you got a fun time reading that part, good sir.

Enjoy your time here with the story!

He used the word VOLTAR THUNDASIR from the movie Onward. And I really hope Dawn will be able to fly. I have to say you two did a good job on this new chapter. I like it. Also, have a great day!

Well, it didn't work. So...yeah, no luck there with the spell. Thanks, we appreciate you enjoy the story so far!

Hum, getting better keep it up

That was kinda my idea. You see... since both Dawn Darkness and Solar Eclipse both grew up on Earth, it be pretty obvious that they both have picked up different spells from other franchises like Harry Potter or ONWARD.

definite improvement over earlier chapters, would help to narrate more of what Dawn is thinking in general, the part were he goes with RD and talk about learning to fly is actually an interesting deviation and that he already make his first romantic interest was nice. the Part that his grand father was Wonderbolt was also nice and could make for some interesting development. Peek it up

Thanks. We're glad you enjoyed it. Yes, I'll definitely keep it in mind to what Dawn is thinking for what he is in with the Mane Six on their adventures. Keep tuning in for the next couple of chapters.

You drew inspiration from my story (My Journey In Equestria) in that, in chapter 1, your OC meets Fluttershy first! Very good!

No, I did not. It was my own idea with Edward Sapphire helping on that. I haven't even read your story, so how can you say that?

Allow me to throw you a link to chapter 1 of My Journey In Equestria: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/500647/2/my-journey-in-equestria/1-from-out-of-nowhere
Compare that chapter with chapter 1 of your story, and you’ll notice the similarity.

Oh, right. I get it now. You published chapter 1 of your story before I published chapter 1 of mine. My apologies!

No thanks. I'll pass. I have other interests right now, such as reading fiction books (in Danish) and do my own currently. So I have no time to read your fanfic.

What happened to them wanting to punish him because he stood up to glida?

They just scolded him. And the girls aren't ones to talk about not fighting Considering they were ready to do whatever it took including violence against nightmare moon. They never thought about friendship with her until after she turned into Luna and turned out to be Celestia sister.

Instead of just scolding, they did give him a form of lecture to Dawn. It was just off-screen that they gave him the lecture about not fighting someone who has been a friend of his own friends.

So Luna even if she nightmare moon was Celestia sister and they were more than happy to whatever it took to kick her butt. They had no clue how they elements would do it but that was the goal so the fact that he was willing to defend fluttershy and Gilda was prefectly willing to get in a fight against him. She was ready to hurt anyone who stood up to her and he told her off and then gave her what for when she didn't take it well.

Personally I been thinking about this episode and the girls were rude and spike shouldn't trying to get twilight to show Trixie up even if she did give the girls a taste of their own medicine. Yes she was a bit braggy but nobody forced them to stay and watch. And Trixie might actually have some talent maybe she isn't twilight level but that doesn't mean she isn't good at magic. Though twilight was idiot at the end by giving out those mustaches. It looked like she was rewarding them for bringing a giant bear cub to town.

Yes, I might agree with you on that front. Though as for the chapter as a whole, what's your favorite moment in it?

And the girls hopefully getting a lesson in how to show respect to others who are performing even if you don't like them.

because I don't think it is fair to dislike a story when reading it

Umm... Who does such a thing? I personally dislike stories which I most definitely under no circumstances would like to ever try to read again by mistake. I guess there was 3 or so like this over the years. And I mean stories which I actually red for a 10 or even 50 chapters. That case when a story isn't particularly bad, but all hopes for it to turn any better die by a thousand paper cuts.

At the same time it's completely fair not to give it a like when you don't consider it particularly interesting and just read it out of boredom. You know, when you fight boredom with more of it in a different package. Then give it one day when you realize you actually enjoying it. Some stories start slow, but get immensely better over time.

I think it's not fair to disable a rating. It decrease usability of the site for the readers. I think people disable rating when they either don't believe in their own work or it's actually that bad and they refuse to take a hint.

So, you think I should turn the ratings back on?

I think you already did, didn't you? I think you should keep it this way.
Likes and dislikes are an instrument. Some use it wrong, but that's rarely a majority and over time it should balance itself out.
Well, unless you specifically ask for downvotes. There's at least one author like this. XD

Oh, no. I think when people enjoy what me and my co-author write is for the best of the story.

That time when you could have written a story about cyber ninja space pirates, but going to space were too expensive and cyber parts didn't went through assembly particularly well either, so you had to cut down budget to just ninja pirates and then cut down even further and settle on plain old mahou pony.

"How did you know about Princess Celestia?" asked Fluttershy in shock.

Who doesn't?!
Or is she surprised that he knows she'll be there? I mean it's clearly not a secret considering she chose this location and is the centerpiece of the celebration.

"I just memorized it from my memory," I replied.

Dat not haw it works!
I mean, seriously, memorizing is an act of writing sometime down into memory and while technically every time we remember something we rewrite that memory the process is called remembering. In either case "from my memory" doesn't make sense and in case of remembering it's a tautology.

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