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Heroic412227


Hi, my name is Heroic412227, but you can call me Heroic. I'm still learning how to be the best writer I can be.

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At the age of 6, a young mare named Amara Blossom developed a very rare disorder that stopped her aging entirely. After the last member of her family dies in front of her, she tries to find a new family of her own, but with extremely depressing difficulty.

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Just one minor thing to point out.

"A young mare named Amara Blossom developed a very rare disorder that stopped her aging entirely."

The a doesn't need to be capitalized, Just thought I'd point that out. Not sure about the story itself. But the idea does sound interesting at least.

Not bad,I'd say the resolution could have been a bit slower and smoother. I mean, I think I got whiplash from how fast it moved. Some pretty solid work before then though

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