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Kitsune_Kenshi


A Kitsune swordman wondering around Equestrian and beyond, having much tales to tell...

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Angel Bunny, the stubborn, asshole, and a badass bunny, suddenly disappeared without a single trace. 5 years later, during a manticore attack, the Mane six found the missing rabbit. But he changed, both surprising and terrifying.

Not only his personalities changed, his way of speaking (yes they do talk in this alternate Equestria) changed as well, not to mention those strange yet dangerous killing machines Angel brought back. After recovering from his return, he decided to create something that nopony or creatures could ever thought of; Equestrian Animal Special Operation Task Force.

What happened to him during those 5 years?

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Feel free to leave comments, positive criticisms, and suggestions.

I do like this story, but just from the first two paragraphs I’ve seen the tense changes often.

So for example, when you talked about Twilight testing the portal thing (keep in mind I’m writing this comment before finishing this chapter), since it is narration for the past (it already happened), you don’t use “is”. You use “was”.

So something like Princess Twilight was testing.....

Hopefully I’m correct and this makes sense.

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