We can all go to Equestria, yep all of us. But there's something that you must go through to get there. Follow my journey through it all to be the first citizen in Equestria.
Characters will be added but not shown on the character thingy.
{My second story that may be a flop but I would like to continue to get better and make this a good story for all.}
( I would like to give special thanks to Ryanchopper12 for he is my idea-maker-helper-person, or a shorter word for it that I dont know. I would also thank demanji for helping correct grammer in my stories. Brohoof to you all!)
Chapters (29)
first comment ever if im correct good story lot of spelling errors but tracking anyway will probably fave later though also
FIRST
1315290 good job. i try my best to keep the errors in there cages, but i cant lock them all. thanks for the feed back, will look over it when i get time.
1315630 the thing that just bugs me the most is the lower case I's and some of the seemingly obvious typos
1315640 noted and greatly appreciated.
Eagerly awaiting more
much better on spelling and grammar errors could only find one legit not lagit
oh and
new chapter
1527079 many thank you's.
. the newer chapters might come sooner, if my surgery wound starts to get less painful.
so, have some derpy for your comment.
1531575 dont push yourself if you just had surgery
First and happy nightmare night my good friend!
1539791 happy nightmare night,
be sure to stay on slendermanes good side 
1539806 I have the only thing that can defeat the slenderman..... flutteshy
1549790
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first of all I want to say sorry if my earlier comments were a bit mean but in this chapter I found practically no errors spelling or grammar except for
The red isn't needed
1783698 many thanks for pointing out my errors. i needed to know what was wrong, so thanks.
1789303 many thanks
. Im thinking about adding a pony or two in later chapters, so if you or anyone has a idea's plz let me know. and again, thank you.
1790201 if you want you could indox me some of them. i have a good outline of where my stories going, so inbox me some of the idea's and i'll see where i can place them.
Dat ending line
i was nearing The end and i though: "how can i add a funny element to something like this? hmm"
you've improved greatly
( I have no idea how to word this
) and the only thing I've saw can be called typos any author has also you were right that was the perfect spot to end the chapter
1817299 many thank you's
its good to know im doing a good job.
first
firts:the idea of a bunch of villains/monsters/etc. in one house aint bad
second: i'm surprised I could actually tell what he was trying to say when he had the knife in his mouth
1846283 thanks
I'm thinking of doing a spin of with the house of villians.
1846513 your welcome and I just realized I I didnt spell first right
definently beter
1897089 thank you
I'm currently working on a longer chapter for the next chapter, trying for 3000 words on this one. 
1899121 good job and as for my last comment all i can say is google.com/imgres?q=i+can%27t+brain+today+i+has+the+dumb&um=1&hl=en&sa=N&tbo=d&rlz=1C1TSNO_enUS479US479&biw=1366&bih=667&tbm=isch&tbnid=kx2r40lp-IeIEM:&imgrefurl=http://mylittlefacewhen.com/f/164/&docid=QLtxuoGV9XxE6M&imgurl=http://denver.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw164_130514835704.jpg&w=600&h=524&ei=3gDmUPTTGLLK0AHWqYCAAw&zoom=1&iact=hc&vpx=490&vpy=270&dur=3&hovh=210&hovw=240&tx=141&ty=88&sig=115763455541115511118&page=1&tbnh=140&tbnw=160&start=0&ndsp=32&ved=1t:429,r:11,s:0,i:123
1899130 your speling.....I can deal with it
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i think you mean
from what ive read those are the worst and if you want me to ill look up how to be a proof-reader to help you
that would be helpfull, I wrote this at 5 in the morning since i couldn't sleep. So im not surprised that there were errors. will go back and change those.
1914538 agreed
glad you guys like it
Will be working on the next chapter as soon as possible
1941716 many thank you's
will consider cocky
thanks for your input.
derp for you
1941716 Lol, 'cocky'
1944307 lol
1944815 haha indeed
1981831 I find writing alot makes me learn big words and big words hurtses me head
LOL but will try and make next one longer, party chapter = more awkwardness for me
Oh bon bon.
To all who want to feel special: The next chapter is a party chapter, so If you wanna have a OC make a apperance in it, go ahead an suggest. I'll accept 3-4, any will do and all are welcome.
One question, are you planning to play the herb card?
2006936 Valid question deserves a valid answer: I think you mean "herd" and if you mean that, then I may play that card. I have a sense that you may not want this concept in the story( is that correct?) but to put a "yes" or "no" answer to your question: Maybe
2007221
Well actually, I'm ok if you play that card, I just curious if that will be the case, with he having 4 ponys falling for him, the population being more mares than stallions, Lyra and Bom Bom competing, I though in the explanation, Bom Bom was about to said the word herd, and they actually were competing to see who will be the alfa mare, the mare that take the decision along said the alfa stallion to see if another mare can or not join their herd.
Or something like that
2007727 hmm I see...Well I was only going to have three mare's fall for him: Lyra, Bon Bon, and a secret one that will come into play later on in the story. But your questions and opinions are alwas good to hear. I hope this puts your mind at ease.
2008779
what about Trixie or Pinkie Pie? One kiss him and the other have butterflies as soon as she touch him…and letter on, she never stop discussing with Lyra about him.
2008915 that all will be resolved in later chapters.....and we can expect an appearance
2016510 not exactly, you see I really don't wanna write one of those but the story seems to be going in that there direction. So i might just scrap this chapter and rework it to make it not one. Depending if I want to or not, I'm odd when it comesto this sort of thing.
Desisions are not my forte
But if you guys don't want, then I'll change it.
2016602 I wanna hear your thoughts on this, please speak your mind
2016743 will try harder to post more in one day
Interesting, I see you DID use the herd card, and let the option to Bom Bom, and she is technically the "head mare", I wonder if she will tease Lyra for some days, before declare if she wants or not the herd idea.
Plus we still need to see what happen to Trixie, I worried about what happen to her, and what will be become of Pinkie. Bom Bom looks like a very patience and caring mare, I bet she will be open to share his stallion
2017122 Oh you are a very interesting pony my friend: many questions and opinions. I like that
Do not worry about Trixie, she will get her chapter next just for you. Plus, I will include Pinkie in the equation. The key is pacing, I don't want to rush the main story and do what alot of simi-clot stories do. I.E: rush the story for the cloppy center, I want it slow and precise.
Any other questions or possibly ideas, please let me know.