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And the call has come... the dice are rolling. Does Fortune and Glory await our favorite Kirin? Or does disaster loom ahead?
Stay tuned, same Kirin time, same Kirin channel!
On a more serious note, I did find it slightly hard to keep track of character during the dialogue there. Rushed in a lot of them entering? Otherwise, I very much enjoyed this chapter. Good stuff.
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Not even the gods know how this will end
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I am happy you enjoyed the chapter, though, can you point out which dialogs you found confusing maybe? I am sure my editor and I can fix that spots then
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When Oma and Opa came in, just a whole of characters started talking at once and I had trouble keeping track of who was who until I remembered from the last story. Sorry I can't be more descriptive than that.
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Updated the chapter, I hope the scene you found confusing is fine now
Also thanks again for your feedback! Only with it, I am able to improve my stories!
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Flowed a bit better from my perspective, a quick introduction of each character as they started speaking helped me keep track of who was who. Good stuff.
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Glad to hear that If you notice any other problem in the future, or think something can be improved, please let me know
I didn’t get to write this for the last chapter but it is always crazy reading about characters who you have read since their birth now doing the sex. On another note, why don’t you write out the sexing anymore?
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I write what my readersv ask for Not so many people asked for a sex scene this time, neiter here or in my stories discord server, therefore it wasn't on the prio-list so far.
Now am already a few chapters further into this story than this chapter, but for future ones, there is always room for request by my readers