The Witch Queen

This story is a sequel to Welcome Back, Night Spark

Equestria has become a peaceful utopia under Princess Twilight's rule. Monsters are under control, bullies are getting along with their former victims and villains are either reformed or locked away.

But Night Spark is still out there, and she has a plan to change how soft the realm has gotten...

A little 'what-if' of sorts I had in my head in the start of the month and decided to throw out for the season.

Happy Halloween!

Chapters (3)

The Setup · 26th Oct 2020 · 789 words
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The Darkest Day · 26th Oct 2020 · 2,553 words
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The Aftermath · 26th Oct 2020 · 2,277 words
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garfan

garfan #1 · Oct 26th, 2020 · 1 · 2 · The Setup ·

bleh

Mystic Sunrise

Mystic Sunrise #2 · Oct 26th, 2020 · 2 · · The Aftermath ·

... Meh. If you've read one story with a pyschotic bitch taking over Equestria by force, you've read them all. Only thing new here is the time frame.

Not sure if that's really Nightmare Moon or not. Or maybe I missed it.

Edit: Never mind. Night Spark you've used before. As an even worse case of Sunset Shimmer Syndrome, in your stories.

Wild Stallion

Wild Stallion #3 · Oct 27th, 2020 · 2 · · The Aftermath ·

Not bad. About what I expected Starlight Glimmer to turn into when she was introduced to be honest.

Altogether your characterization of the other named characters (Twilight and Cozy) was actually surprisingly good as far as the emotional aspect, which was what won me over against the implausible scenario. (At least it wasn't any worse than anything Gen 4 itself was had pulled in the latter seasons.)

Quick note: You might want to consider a editor, or maybe just a second read through to try and get all of those spelling errors. I could PM you at some point with the errors I spotted (if you are interested).

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