Sunset is fighting in her sleep. No, I don’t mean sleep walking and punching someone. No, I mean something else.
She’s fighting against her nightmares that has haunted her since the Fall Formal. But when Anon-a-miss starts(okay, it’s not Christmas, okay), Sunset struggles to cope with her life. Sunset must now find some help... before it’s too late.
Tag: Mane 7(although only mane 6) as this takes place BEFORE Sci-Twi
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This is a GCSE poem, Remains, by Simon Armitage, which is what this story is based loosely on(as well as Anon-a-miss)
Chapters (4)
That comic is a steaming pile of horseshit no matter when you set it. And I think the Mane 7 (EQ) tag was made for Princess Twilight as part of the group. Not Twilight #2.
No way to get around that. Unless there comes a tag change at some point.
Dear Fluttershy,
Thank you for contacting me.
I am so sorry.
Why didn't she tell me?
I cannot visit, I have a friendship problem in my world.
Twillight.
...................................................... *Gives Twilight a PUNCH IN THE EYE, THEN HER TEETH, AND STOMP MY FOOT ON HER HORN AND WINGS*
ME: Are you FUCKING SERIOUS, TWILIGHT!!!!!!!!???????? Sunset KILLED YOURSELF! And all you care about is a STUPID, AND RETARDED FRIENDSHIP "PROBLEM", OVER A DAMN LIFE!!!!!!!!?????? IF CELESTIA HEARD THIS, SHE WILL CLIP YOUR WINGS, CUT YOUR HORN OFF, STRIPPED YOUR ROYAL TITLE, BURN YOUR CASTLE TO THE GROUND, REJECTED YOU AS HER "STUDENT"! AND FINALLY, PERMANENTLY PUT YOU IN KINDERGARTEN!
JUST FOR BEING AN UNGRATEFUL AND HEARTLESS BITCH FOR NOT CARING SUNSET!
Then, she go to the Human World, and GIVE THE HUMAN MAIN FIVE THIRD DEGREE BURNS! LUNA WILL GIVE THEM HORRIFIC NIGHTMARES! FORCE THEIR PARENTS TO GROUNDED THEM AND THE CMC FOR LIFE! OTHERWISE, CELESTIA AND LUNA WILL DESTROY THEIR HOUSES, MONEY, CARS, AND POSSESSIONS! AND DESTROYING THE CHS SCHOOL! THEN TAKE THE CHS STUDENT'S ( That bullied Sunset) PHONES, COMPUTERS, AND CARS, AND BURN THEM TO ASH AND LIQUID!
AND DESTROY THE WIFI TOWERS AROUND CANTERLOT CITY! SO NO WI-FI AND THE INTERNET FOR THE CANTERLOT CITY CITIZENS!
😈 😈 😈
And then DESTROY the Statue, so NO MAGIC OR GOING TO EQUESTRIA!
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I apologize for the big words. But this PISSED ME OFF! Author, can you at least make the story LONGER, and give the Human Main Five, and Twilight more emotions. And could at least give them regret, sadness, and anger on themselves for causing Sunset on Suicide.
Suicide is VERY SERIOUS, and SHOULDN'T be Ignored! 😢
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10496029
You just summed up literally everything wrong with the comic itself, and then every story ever written that used it as a basis.
And don't feel sorry about anything. This story genre needs to be shit on as much as possible.
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Actually, I like most Anon A Miss Fanfiction Stories in here. It's because they Bash and give Karmic Punishment to the Human Main Five, CMC, and the CHS Student Assholes and Bitches.
And there are some stories that made Twilight, Celestia, Luna and even the PONY MAIN FIVE VERY PISSED, and give the Rainbooms, CMC, and CHS Students a living hell and make them regret on hurting Sunset.
Heck, even other Heroes in other Franchises and Crossovers HELP and GIVE Sunset a much deserved LOVE AND CARE. And give the Rainbooms, CMC, and CHS Students and Teachers, a " WHAT THE HELL, HERO!!!!!?????", and "WHY YOU SUCK!!!!" Speech Tropes.
I really don’t like this story at all because the girls did not save Sunset Shimmer in time before she killed herself! If this story is going to give me nightmares about this, then I’ll let this ruin my life and my job so I will join Sunset Shimmer too!😠😠😠😠😠😠😠😠😠😠😠😠😠😠😠😠😠😠😠😠
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Oh Hell No! DON'T DO THAT! IT'S NOT A JOKE ON TALKING ABOUT SUICIDE ON YOURSELF! You do realize there are other and BETTER Anon A Miss Stories where Sunset is alive and okay. And the Rainbooms and CMC get their Karmic Punishment. 😳 😰
The hell did I just read?!
10496044
It was kind of an alternate version of like MLP EG beauty and the beast(which i am still working on)
10496248
I do know that, I realised that about 3 months ago. But I’m a writer who writes sad stories or romances. If you’ve read Rainbow Dash’s adventures at Hogwarts, it’s shit, I know, but that was my first big romance. I think if you are looking for a story on a happy note, try MLP EG beauty and the beast(which I’m still working on). Maybe even Forgotten might do you some good.
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well, they were going to, but i decided, it’s too much like the MLP EG Beauty and the Beast.
Twilight saves Sunset.
This feels like how the comic would have ended if sunset committed suicide
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the 2nd alternate ending(or the first if you are reading this)
The first being the original ending.
2nd being this ending
3rd being a Beauty and the Beast ending
4th being a music ending
(i will post the last 2 endings later)
Yeah, this is pretty badly-written.... I'll try to be more constructive than the other comments that seem to just be using this fic as an excuse for all of Anon-A-Miss fics being bad somehow... I love the melodramatic bullshit that comes with Anon-A-Miss fics and other angsty fics for other fandoms.... the overwhelming majority of my bookmarks on Fimfiction and other Fanficion sites touch on suicide, bullying, family pressure, etc.... the genre of angsty garbage that Anon-A-Miss Fics usually are isn't bad, but there needs to be alot more effort put into making the reader feel like their really simmering in each character's thoughts/emotions along with more tact when it comes to the aftermath/recovery or the last second rescue cliche.... this fic really needs work.
-Pros:
*Using a character's associated colors for their writing is neat.
*Minimal Spelling errors
-Cons:
*Wayyyy too short.... No time put into each character's feelings, emotions, etc... this is the kind of thing that needs to stew for a few thousand words with more chapters at least, not 200-700 words between 4 chapters. The small word count does not do this type of fic any favors unless its supposed to be a songfic or some other poetic bullshit or a oneshot specifically meant to just be about Sunset's death with no other characters or something .... or a short crackfic (which would get away with my next complaint). My point is it's really difficult to get invested enough to take the fic seriously with the tiny word count.
*Absolutely no tact for the subject matter. I don't mean how you think or write about suicide, honestly that comes down to how you grow up as a person/writer... or maybe you're trying to take the asshole angle to be different or something. No, what I mean is how the characters react to suicide, sadness, hurt feelings, etc.... I don't mind OOC and I'm not the type to whine about fics not fitting cannon, but what I mean is how unrealistic the reactions themselves are. Sunset Instantly kills herself at the first sign of actual conflict besides her recurring nightmares, Twilight doesn't drop everything for her now dead friend, the way Fluttershy wrote to Twilight so bluntly about Sunset's death... these are teenage girls/young adult ponies, their logic is too goofy for the subject.
10497130
actually, it was summarised.
I could write a lot better but I kind of had to finish this and a piece of homework at the same time.
10496248
Oh, well I’m so sorry about how I reacted to this story it’s just I had a very good day at work until my 2 floor runners were giving me a really hard time than I thought. But even though, if I do have a nightmare about this story I won’t take it out on anyone even at work. In other words, I’ll just go ahead and focus on the other stories where Sunset Shimmer doesn’t die and forgives the Rainbooms and the cmc’s.
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Thank you. I just DON'T want anyone to cause something terrible and regret it. Sure, Fimfiction, and other Fan Fiction aren't perfect. But they do have and could have VERY GOOD Stories. We just have to find them hard enough.
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The only good stories that use the comic are the ones that make fun of it in some way. Usually by having Sunset not be a pushover and stand up to the girls and the school in a not very nice way.
Or, and my favorite, where the Rainbooms come to their senses after Sunset calls out how none of this makes sense if they bothered to think about it and how, even if she was the one doing it, Sunset wouldn't make it obvious she was the one doing it.
Every other story is nothing but a fix fic, trying to fix what can't be unbroken.
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Basically the more Logic and Realistic Scenarios. And Sunset NOT acting like a Doormat or Pushover. And showed the Rainbooms and CHS Students her Bad Side. 😈
I read those stories too, and I like it. 🙂
I'm more with into the Crossovers Fics with other Franchises, and having the Heroes, Anti Heroes and even some Villains befriend Sunset. And I love for them to Harshly Criticize the Rainbooms and the other CHS Students/Teachers for the bullying.
And even calling all of them idiots for not seeing the bigger picture, thinking logical instead of having their unjustified anger and negative emotions get the better of them. And finally having poor evidence against Sunset.
They were all Misjudged Sunset on the fact that if Sunset is REALLY Anon A Miss. Sunset WOULDN'T make it very Obvious that it is her. And WOULDN'T be Stupid at doing it. I mean, she DID break up the Rainbooms in the past, as well as Blackmailing other CHS Students in the past. WITHOUT getting caught mind you. Until Twilight came by and broke out the Obvious in the First Movie. Sunset nearly got away with it.
But what I like the MOST, is having the Rainbooms and the other CHS Students/Teachers get their Karmic Consequences, Punishments, etc..
That's what I like about the Heavy Bashing Fics in the Anon A Miss Storyline. 😁
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Here's the real plot hole for the whole comic, and every story that uses it (no matter what kind it is). It's set after Rainbow Rocks, when Sunset has more than most of it back.
Set the comic during the time between Equestria Girls 1, and Rainbow Rocks. Then it would make much more sense for everyone to be like they are and to think the worst of her.
Look at Forgotten Friendship. That took the same idea as the comic. But gave it more of a realistic and believable reason for the school to be like that. Which I still think the special is Hasbro's way of shiting on the comic and making it non canon.
I still haven't seen anything from Equestria Girls that ever said the comic happened at all.
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Your correct. And Forgotten Friendship has a Good Reason and Excuse for them to act like that to Sunset. ( That being the Magic Memory Eraser Device from Wallflower. I'm GLAD it is destroyed, and the Rainbooms got their memories back.)
Nevertheless, even though Anon A Miss is just a Non Canon Comic, and is Heavily Hatred by Fans. People still use it for Fanfiction and stuff.
Every Author and Writer can make a Story, Canon, or Non Canon. 😀
10495854
That is so fucking right!
Is this a crack fic?
10518911
what? no, of course not! It is a fic I didn’t plan out that well and being a junior writer, I still struggle writing sometimes
Oh, it's one of those.
10519699
Okay then... some advices then:
This is how I personally proofread my outgoing business e-mails.
They will help your sentence structure, grammar and help you bounce around ideas till they can be typed.
10520094
okay, thanks. Admitting it now, I’m not the best writer. I’m not that great at grammar(and french and spanish proves that). What I am good at is spelling.
that’s it.
10521394
Wtf was that ending?!
10599003
I agree worst story ever. Lazy writing.
Hi, fellow Potterhead.
It is an amazing story. Don't let others that doesn't like your story bring your hopes down. I hope to see a sequel or prequel.
11090987
Geez, thanks. I’m not writing a sequel. however, I am writing a new generation story- leading from the movie.
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That is ok, I am lookin forward to read it after it comes out.