Supernova Shadow, a friend that the princesses missed with pain and sorrow, she returned, along with new threats and mysteries, just as thousands of years ago she will suffer the prejudices of her mental nature and connection to evil and black magic. Can she find a place among the ponies? Can she learn about the magic of friendship? Or, does she not need it? Can the world see that "Darkness does not turn you into a monster as long as it is not in your heart"?
(Here are other tags that I couldn't include in the categories: Drama, Romance, Sad, dark and some mentions about sex)
I think you are just making alternatr universes that are separate from yours. You can't control time, manipulate it? yes, control it? No. You can't just get rid of changes in the past.
It's good
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wibbly wobbly timey wimey... stuff
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Out of joke.
A more complex explanation would be that since Zecora's potion makes you travel through time in viewer mode and you cannot alter anything, my idea is that the spell would make the universe not "register" the changes you make because it seems that you were in viewer mode, and it would seem that you did nothing.
Or at least that's my idea, it surely has flaws, but time travel is very difficult to write without making mistakes.
Didn't get a notification for this but this was rly nice.
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thanks.
Sorry for the lack of chapters, but I have been stuck in a blockage with a chapter which I did not want to do, but once I manage to finish it the next chapter will be the meeting in Canterlot which will bring some explanations.
Eeyup, Equestria has guns and I have proof! In the episode "May the Best Pet Win" Rainbow Dash says:
"I need something real fast like a bullet to keep up with me."
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MHf-YnY9k7k&feature=emb_err_woyt (look it here at 0:31)
Which for me makes sense there are species like Dragons and Griffons that cannot use magic directly so it makes sense that they have weapons technology, it is also not like in a chapter I am going to take out a griffon with a UZI in each hand, of course not. The "Laumarenn" is a name inspired by the Laumann 1891, the first semi-automatic gun with automatic reloading capable of firing five bullets, as you see a primitive weapon, I am not going to show anything very advanced.
Is English your first language, if so you need to work slower or get an editor because the perspective changes didnt make sense, one sentence we, the readers, are the protagonist, then then the next sentence we are someone else. Some times this happens in the middle of the sentence.
And work on your grammar
Also is the protagonist a her, him, or it?
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Thanks, I always check what I write before publishing it but sometimes I overlook some errors and they reach the final edition, I will try to get an editor.
So is Supernova a boy or girl? Cause in the first few chapters it was a girl, but in this it said they were a boy?
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Really?, it's my error, fix it soon. She's a mare.
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I already fixed all the errors I could find, thanks for telling me.
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Tell what is wrong with the line hint
look at "twiligt" and at the end
Mouth cords, what
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Thanks for telling me, I already fixed it.
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Thanks for telling me, I already fixed it.
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Good to know
I have proofs of that! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vlbeQxBBrJE
that's a foal talking!
Before I read this, I must know: What is the species of that thing in the cover art?
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It's complicated, it is a draconequus with changeling parts, but we will delve into that in the next chapters, enjoy reading!
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I loved this. Especially Celestia not denying or trying to defend herself just
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Thanks!
Expositions data dump
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I'm sorry but I had to, luckily what comes will not be like that.
Thanks for reading, I have been a bit busy and I could not finish the new chapter earlier, I had to write a blog, create a fictional language for dragons that I will use later, I also moved, re-started school, but calm the next chapter will be out as soon as possible.
Postscript: Sorry.

Uhh...could i get a shortened version cause thats just excessive
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, sorry but I worked hard in that part.
No
Enjoy the reading.
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Yo dude this is realy good man
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Thanks!
This is a good piece and a very interesting premise. The writing however has some mistakes that needs correction to make the story more engaging.
The changing perspective makes the point of view a bit confusing sometimes. There's also the wrong use of pronouns that makes it confusing who is speaking. You can try using more description rather than he or she.
There's also the main character. Her personalities keep shifting without much reasoning. Further reading will reveal it to be her adapting to the speaker but an earlier reasoning would help explain to the readers the reason for shifts.
Then there's also the long paragraphs. Long paragraphs makes it seems dry and require more reading. As a little rule, it's best to stick with a max of six sentences in a paragraph and 4 is optimal. Hopefully this reaches you and you will use this for future chapters. I may still point out some more mistakes in the other chapters tho.
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Thanks! I'm actually thinking on rewriting the whole thing, it was my wirst work so it was really raw.
Seems like our protag here is based on the sociopathic Holmes portrayed by a certain Belinsky Crawlersnatch.
I will not stand for this engineer slander. Sure this may be over generalisation of character but engineers are the ones that have to make the architects blueprints work and tell them when it doesn't. Architects also have to consult engineers sometimes to check whether their design is doable or not. When it comes to the construction business, engineers also work as supervisors to make sure the job is done correctly. So no, engineers are just as important as architects.
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yes, that was an "inside joke" my dad is an architect and he always tells me that sermon. When I was writing this I was very stressed and bored so I put it here to have a good laugh, my idea was that in the future I would talk about how Shadow had a trauma with the engineers, but well that never happened.
Your still uploading right ...right
this is good so far wonder why it is canceled found this yesterday and finished it yesterday thought i left a comment on it but must have forgotten to