A Classy Night

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ThatBadGuy

ThatBadGuy #1 · Oct 27th, 2020 · 2 · ·

I feel there was bit too much food description and not enough description for the sex.

Master Titta

Master Titta #2 · Oct 27th, 2020 · 1 · ·

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Really? I was the impression the food description was a bit lacking comapred to the sex.

ThatBadGuy

ThatBadGuy #3 · Oct 27th, 2020 · 1 · ·

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When you are writing porn, you should always focus on the build up to the action, then how to describe the sex scene, and finally how to prolong the climax. Every other detail is a secondary and should be there to guide the characters, or to set the scene or mood.

When you are writing straight up porn, it is logical that porn is what the readers will come for. When you intend to focus on the story, then you should focus more on the story and have details helping in that department.

ThatBadGuy

ThatBadGuy #4 · Oct 27th, 2020 · 1 · ·

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I feel like you are focusing bit too much on the food instead of focusing at the surroundings, the mood, or the characters.

Once opened, the menu revealed its contents: grilled feta with rocket salad served with balsamic vinegar and oak honey; ricotta balls with herbs and spicy flatbread; cheese fondue with dried algae crumble; Wheatapone whole grain penne with bell pepper and parmesan sauce; fresh pappardelle with three-years-old cheese and pepper; dumplings in dried tomato and zucchini pesto sauce; Florist's Joy mix on the spit with paprika; oven-cooked hay with she-deer mozzarella and fresh yellow tomato, permesan-style; fine cheeses selection; chickpea and black lentil falafel with Saddle Arabian harissa; the usual side dish trio of salad, roast potatoes, and grilled herbs; salted and dried lucerne seeds; butter-cooked spinach.

Describing food is little bit pointless when everyone is here just for the porn.

Jane_Shadow

Jane_Shadow #5 · Dec 21st, 2020 · 1 · ·

If it helps, i came bc i recognised the description from an old prompt collab i reread through sometimes
the food was lovely, and I wish I could've eaten it too, to help immerse myself more

MOW