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Majadin


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When Princess Celestia had not only denied her what she deserved, but cast her out as well, Sunset Shimmer would not let that deter her. She would have what she so desperately sought, even of she had to risk it all to get it. That’s why, armed with only a set of saddlebags full to bursting and the vague, unreliable knowledge on the magical mirror that had shown the unicorn her destiny, she had traveled to the realm beyond its surface, hoping to gain something that would prove the Princess wrong.

But what she found there was nothing short of a nightmare, a hellish realm beyond most ponies ability to imagine....

For those that have read it, this is technically a one-shot that takes place in the same continuity as my main story Cross the Rubicon, though this takes place some years before that...

Originally written in response to a monthly writing prompt on Krickis’ Discord server, I wasn't satisfied with a paltry 1000 words that only scratched the surface of the idea. So I ended up taking it and expanding it. It's a tad unnerving, given that the original prompt was inspired by Halloween month, but its less Modern horror, more dread and suspense.

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Is this a crossover?

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No? Its just Sunset's first trip into the human world, as it would've gone down in the story universe I'm working on.

pink champagne on ice
we are all just prisoners
here of our own device

nice hotel California reference :heart:

ps this in now in the group

Oh Sunny.

I think you've managed to capture the sheer, existential and body horror Sunset experienced coming through the mirror very well. It honestly kinda bugged me just how easily the Equestrians handled their transformations into humans.

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It was a major inspiration for the slow build horror and dread I wanted, and really, its the line at the end that really captures the vibe I wanted. “You can check out anytime you like, but you can never leave.” That horrifying realization of being trapped, with no escape... ;)


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It always bugged me a bit too, but I always attributed it to the audience is human. We dont see our body plan as horrifying. Its normal to us, so it can be harder to grasp how someone else might react to such a transformation.

Im glad i managed to convey the mental horror and dread of Sunset’s experience the way i wanted, and I’m hoping that this as a “starting point” makes her later behaviors in Rubicon make more sense.

You are an artist with your descriptions that really captures the sheer terror and hopelessness she felt. This was sooooo much better than what we got in the comics.

Oof sunset called her mom. That means she is FOR REAL scared. Good one shot!

Poor Sunny, just want to hold her tight at the end there...

I've always wondered just what Celestia expected would happen when she showed her the mirror in the first place, and why she thought dancing around the issue was a good idea.

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