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I'm like a god in cervine clothing. Lightning bolts shoot from my antler tips.

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After the coronation of Twilight Sparkle, technological progress skyrocketed throughout the world, only helped by the discovery of a new kingdom of intelligent Deer to the far west, whose diesel-powered inventions revolutionized the modern world in a matter of years. Together, the scientist princess of Equestria and the Kralj of Cervinija have brought about a new golden age for the world.

It has been twenty years since her rule began, but, things are not as they seem under the surface. A secret conspiracy starts to rapidly unravel the world Twilight has built. The second-born son of Cervinija has died during a political meeting between the rulers of the world, an explosion killing him and the king of a unified gryphon kingdom, as well as critically wounding her and three more of the five alicorns ruling Equestria. Cervinija blames Equestria for the death of their prince and have declared war on it and its allies, bringing it's massive and industrial military to bear against the rest of the world.

Now it is up to Princess Flurry Heart, Prince Shining Armor, Royal Guard Captain Gallus, Luster Dawn, and the Equestrian Army to hold the line, and possibly put an end to the war before any more lives can be claimed.


This story is based off Iron Harvest and the Scythe Universe, of which I am a massive fan. Art of this story was done by the amazing Mix-Up, link to his accounts here;
https://www.fimfiction.net/user/195663/Mix-up
https://www.deviantart.com/amalgamzaku

Also, big thanks to my friend Yellow Jack, who helped me translate the language of the Deer into proper Croatian, so it flows properly instead of sounding like a google translate nightmare to any Croatian readers.

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Comments ( 33 )

Just found this before logging off, this, is a whole new frontier.

This story reminds me of EaW stories.
this is very interesting story, and in Croatian lines I understand shit about it xd.

Fun read dude, good world building and setup, can't wait to see when everything goes to hell and mech action beguine.

I'm hoping Twilight, Celestia & Luna survived the blast

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A whole new frontier indeed. Let's hope it's a fun one though right? Hahah.

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Perhaps surprisingly, EaW had little to do with this story. All original lol.
Also, I'm sorry, but I don't understand what you mean by the second line.

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I can't wait either lol.

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They probably did... hopefully. :fluttershysad:

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Tell your friend he did a really nice and good job on the drawing/artwork for the uniforms very good job.




But I do have to say I’m guessing rarity was in charge of making it wasn’t she

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Maybe :3

In reality, it's meant to call back to french uniforms from the start of WW1. If you've studied history, you can probably imagine how they are going to turn out.

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No I’m just saying they did a good job basing it off the early French design in ww1 and yeah at least theirs wasn’t bright pink also in universe who made the uniforms anyways because this has rarity written all over it

Oh by the way what inspired you to make this story anyways.

Again just curious is all

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The Iron Harvest game and Scythe Art, plus the Leviathan book which is honestly really good.

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No I mean is like did it pop into your head one day when you were playing the game. Also haven’t played it yet but looks very fun my favorite is the bayonet mech or the polish mech.

Also what is the Leviathan book?

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Leviathan is a steampunk ww1 book lol.

And I've actually had this idea for a while, I just never got around to writing it until now.

Story is back to life! Yay

Great chapter

But for equestria army I wave this
*waving doom flag*

Oh don’t mind me just waving this flag to your doom.

But still great chapter

Wait where were the other elements during all of this and what happen to spike and luster dawn?

"As you should know, King Grover, magical artifacts have been disappearing all across Equestria. And your crown is the only one we know the definitive location of," Twilight said calmly, clasping her hands in front of her face. "As such, Equestria wishes to secure your crown for the time being."

"Secure it?" Grover growled. "First you want my nation to demilitarize and now you want my crown? What's next, would you like the Idol of Boreas and my lands as well?"

Twilight was quick to shake her head and raise her hands. "What? We want nothing of the sort. But as it currently stands that crown is a threat to Equestrian security."

"And so, in response to this threat, you want my nation, and every other nation for that matter, to demilitarise?" Grover growled, slamming his hand on the table.

he got a point here Twilight. Instead of warning him about the artifact missing and asking him to hide, you want to keep his crown for an unknown time.

we can trust Equestria, we always have been able to."

how about let Equestria trust the griffin first?

Big Business took the lead from there. "As such, we will be striking first and beginning a preemptive attack along Cervinija's northern border directly into the Velovnik Region, which houses most of the iron and oil the Cervinijans pull up from the ground to fuel their war machine." He stated as he rose from his chair. "Which, after we slam these deer into the dirt, we will be annexing for Equestria permanently."

declare war first and annexation?
this can't be good for Equestria "peaceful" reputation

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Unfortunately, with the Princesses out of commission, Equestria is now in the hands of the Equestrian nobility who canonically have proven to be... less than ideal.

Make no mistake, this story is not black and white. There will be evil on both sides of the aisle. And there will be good. I hope people enjoy that XD. I know a lot of people when writing stories prefer a good vs evil plot, but man I like my villains and heroes complex XD

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Understandable

Also I enjoy those types of story’s too

But still we’re the other elements bearers in the same room when it happen and what about spike and luster what about them

Will the battles take inspiration from WW1 or WW2 like for example how many units (regiments, brigades etc) participated in a certain battle and which units stand out (123th infantry regiment for example). Because many of the stories I’ve read that had a war going on always focused on the individuals then a larger picture, at least that’s my opinion from what stories I’ve read. Granted many weren’t in what we considered Morden times so that kind of standardisation wouldn’t have existed in those stories, back on topic I would love to read about the specifics of the combatants in this story but not in pure numbers like “how many infantry each side has or how many mechs each side has” many retellings of battles from both WW1 and WW2 listed the specific military units involved in those battles to some degree. That’s not say I wouldn’t mind knowing the numbers it’s just most stories I’ve read focused too much on the numbers instead of sentences like “the equestrian army at the time consisted of 40 Divisions rounding to about 400,000 men, 10,000 per Division” if this all sounds confusing then I’m very sorry, I know a lot about military units and how certain formations were structured thanks to this site.


Anyway apart from that LONG rant I look forward to the next chapter.

Well then, lets wait and see how many fall in that invasion to the stradetically important area, that most likely is heavily defended. Alicorn or not.
And kinda feeling an urge to purge that poor excuse of a obviously corrupt parlament…

Keep it up.

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This story is going to be kind of a schizophrenic mix of the two. Infantry will still, for the most part, use slow bolt action rifles, with some more elite units being given early submachine guns, like the German Stormtroopers, and stationary machine guns like in WW1 as well as have heavy reliance on artillery, but the existence of mechs will mean trench lines are not the be all end all of warfare like they were in WW1, cause mech's are stronk.

And air combat will involve mech's with jet engines, cause Ace Combat is a good game.

And trust me, while logistics will play a big part of the story, I always put the fun before the world building when it comes to writing, so it's not going to be a constant barrage of numbers like I've seen some stories do XD

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i do hope you show what a lot of war fics and war movies don't show is the supply lines and the life of the troops at times.

people forgot how much hell it was for troops to eat food that give them the runs at times and more

Sure enough, Gryphon Soldados stood, weapons at the ready and already in neat rows ready to move out. Yet, at the front of the line were the Leão-Classes. Rather unsightly things, consisting mostly of a big boxy sideways L-shaped frame. Four legs came out of the bottom to support it up, while the sides were covered in two sponson-mounted machine guns and a top-mounted swiveling cannon giving it a 360-degree field of fire. A rather new invention in the grand scheme of things actually. Most mechs simply featured fixed guns.

Can I perhaps I a sketch or picture that it’s similar too perhaps?

The unicorn took a second to snarl. "There you are you son of a bitch..."

Good, now shoot him or something

"Yes, quite," The other prince said, tapping his cane on the ground before turning to his forces, still awaiting their orders. They knew what the plan was... only a matter of time now. "In a couple of decades, what do you think they will call the coming battle in the history books, do you reckon? The Battle of Velovnik? The Battle of the Three Princes?"

Or a third name “the massacre of Velovnik”

"Protect them?" Gallus asked, jaw dropping slightly. "With all due respect ma'am, you realize bullets are made of lead right? Lead completely cancels out magic, any shields you put up are going to go down in seconds."

I knew it

Gallus merely stared arms behind his back, grimacing. "Very well, my lady. I'll be with you on the frontline regardless."

Start the clock

Also good job in the map. Wait where are there in the map?

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Velovnik is a region in Cervinija that mostly makes up the nation's northwest, near Fillydelphia.

It's capital is the city of Kvadar and it ends shortly before touching the Cervinijan capital of Konatva.

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