Not gonna a lie, between the stories of Mailedhoofed taking 'salties' frequently, and not bother with profilacties, I'm half worry for Lily health, players like Mail sound like perfect patient zero for some nasty deceases.

O=w=O

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Good chapter!

Also, that's a hell of a short refractory period XD

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I was worried he may be buddies with Killfeather. That could turn bad to worse any number of ways.

talk about a bucking chapter

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This is the chapter (but not the only chapter) the story was given a Mature rating for.

Very tasteful, if a bit short.

Better be careful. On Days Like These from the Italian Job, ended with a pretty big bang.

You go, Glammerpone! I don't even have a joke to make today. I'm just glad things are working out for the Glammerpone.

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Judging from the general demeanor of the other chapters, even with the M rating, it might be nice for the clop chapters to be marked so. It is just that the other chapters were so very -- none of the first 54 chapters would merit an M rating at all.

It would be nice if they had a rating set for fics where some chapters deviated. IE T/M or E/T where only a few chapters breached the more mature level and weren't 100% necessary to the story. You'd probably have over 2,500 likes with this as a T story.

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Since Lily is going to medical anyways, I would imagine that they run a general diagnostics spell as the equivalent of taking vitals. they would probably notice something.

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You must admit she’s a Miura in form and function. One of my employers had one, and it would work spectacularly… once. Then it would require an extensive stopover for TLC. He didn’t care though, and was quite happy to just stare at it.

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While you're probably right that more people would read the story if it was rated Teen, it would cause some significant disruptions in the overall narrative. I still aim to tell TheManFromAnotherTime's story first and foremost, and moments like this do play an important role in the evolution of the story and its characters, and I'd be loath to change that.

Sechs! And so demure too. She really is in this for the game.

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Didn't Kilfeather comment on how he doesn't like the Captain in the chapter where he tried to blackmail Lily in the Mess Hall?

That... was arguably tasteful.
This story isn't porn wholesale. And having mature themes in a story implies they would be taken maturely, too.
Yet few stories find the right balance between writing a 'sexy' scene and keeping all the action sensible to the established characters. Even an 'AU'-tag doesn't save some stories from being straight-up in bad taste in the end.

This here is good. It shows more of Glamerspear and Mailedhoof as characters and not sockpuppets for porn. Develops a bit of her behavior in the light that's more 'show' than 'tell', too.
The readers have been getting told she's a saltine for a while, but club-going aside, the way she genuinely(?) acts here is the first big proof to that.

Ah. And the porn was good too, I suppose.
Can't really say I was too excited by it, honestly :D
I'm too hype for seeing more of Anon's engineering and/or other guardsmares and/or Anon's getting combat-trained to switch into the "hurr durr, poniez do smexy things, hurr durr"-mindset right now :V

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Is this the longest wait for a clop scene in any story here?

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It might be!

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Meh. Its all personal tastes. I can't get into anything lower than a mature rated story, because most of the popular one just didnt hit the right notes for me. Most don't touch on anything approaching a mature theme. And I'm not even talking about the sex. Which this was done really well. But it's not what's kept me coming back.

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Could've been a lie. We know he isn't that sincere and upstanding.

Really I’m surprised it didn’t all go down in flames somehow.

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I'm not gonna lie, I completely forgot that this was a mature story until this chapter. Needless to say that I was reminded very quickly!

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Except he was telling it to his own squad-mate.

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Same here xD

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If you're interested in a small primer on industrial steel production and some of the challenges therein I recommend a video called "A Brief History of Naval Armour - Successfully Forging Onwards" by Drachinifel.

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European militaries operated the same way as Equestria's military all the way through the Victorian and even into the early Edwardian era. Purchased comissions and an officer corp made up almost entirely of "the gentry" was a tradition that lasted into the twentieth century.

I do wish that I'd had some warning before being thrown into the pool head-first.

It's been a bit different looking at a clop scene from the female POV lol. I also forgot that this was a "MAture" rated fic until this popped up.
Clop isn't really a thing I'm into these days, but the story is awesome so far!

Out of all the thing I've really wanted explained in detail in this story, a sex scene between the gross gold digger and the scumbag cheating on his wife was not one of them. I mean her being a gold digger comes up consistently more then anything else in this story and for the life of me i don't understand why... unless its one of the writers "things" then it is what it is.

I'm not saying she's digging for precious metals. What I am saying is that she certainly isn't associating herself with stallions of lower financial standing.

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Not to spoiler things too much, but the sex scene does serve a purpose in the storyline.

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I assumed it did it was just... written is such a bizarrely positive light, like the dudes a cheating scumbag why should we care how big his dick is and how well he can fuck. That and I have no honest idea where this story is going.

I know there was a sex tag but I genuinely didn’t expect this story to have a clop chapter. Especially not a clop chapter about Lilly and her meal ticket. That said, it was really well written and not just “They fucked!” which is always good. Fingers crossed for a wholesome sex scene between Sparks and her coltfriend.

Initially when I thought there wouldn’t be any sex in this chapter, I also assumed that either Mailedhoofed would be too pushy, turning Lily off or that she would get cold feet. Again, I was surprised this wasn’t the case. Probably for the better.

Because it gave us some insight in the unspoken rules of salt-licking. Everypony knows you’re fucking that mare/stallion but everypony pretends that not the case. Even the saltie and the salt-lick. And you don’t just start fucking as soon as you’re alone, you still pretend to have polite conversation that “surprisingly” turns into sex. Makes you wonder what are the rules if the saltie wants to upgrade her salt-lick. I doubt you can simply dump your colonel because a general comes along. There has to be some sort of etiquette about how to behave correctly in such a scenario without anypony losing face.

That said this hows that there’s something very wrong with the system if officers and rich ponies are allowed to keep mistresses in broad daylight and nopony bates an eye. Sure, not everyone has a spouse or the spouse may be okay with the mistress for a bunch of reasons. But Honor Bound’s story about her unfaithful colt friend makes it clear that it’s not always the case and that this system has ruined at least a few relationships.

As for Lily herself, she’s an interesting character. A shamless social climber who’s looking for her big meal ticket. A mare who only joined VIP protection because it could get her said meal ticket. A mare who assumed Sparks had the same goal as her and that Anon was looking for a mistress. That both just wanted to go to the theater to have a good time was something she couldn’t image inher wildest dreams. On top of that she’s also slightly racist against Bat Pony (I say slightly because most of her behavior was due to her magical burn out). In most stories that would make her the bad guy. Or at least another scumbag like Kilfeather you want to punch in the teeth every time he shows up.

Yet she’s also a very skilled soldier who received a medal for her feats and a surprisingly good friend to Sparks. I have to say she’s growing to me. Despite – or maybe because – of her flaws.

Damn - fine - chapter. Saltine at the finest i guess

Well, that suddenly took a dive into being porn. Oh well.

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Patient Zero? More like patient 15,000 of 15,000 different diseases

The warning make me hype for this chapter XD

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The story is tagged M for Mature with an additional Sex tag, there's your warning.

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Glamerspear is slightly racist against the bat pony, but then, it looks like pretty much everyone is racist against them (and, from the conversation with Marcos, it looks like at least some bat ponies are racist against other ponies/"prisoners of the sun"). There most likely were legends of "evil servants of Nightmare Moon" from ancient times, then bat ponies did fight for NM in current times. Even Sparkshower believed the rumors that bat ponies drink blood etc and was afraid of Ebonshield in the beginning.

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I am well aware. This was the leading problem with the Royal Navy throughout the first half of the 20th, and was a large reason why the Royal Navy performed so poorly in both World Wars. That being said, what we were talking about back in 13/14 is the Pas d'Armes, something that saw its hay day in the 15th century and promptly expired, being taken up by soldiers whom are decidedly NOT Victorian in nature. Say what you will, but denoting specialties as they are described in this story is a Modern idea, no earlier than the 20th Century. Equestria herein is a strange hodgepodge of Medieval, Victorian and Modern, the latter of the three seeming especially...out of touch. Nothing about Equestrian society seems to jive with all the modern military lingo. True enough, the original author said himself it was done for the audience. I can respect that, but I really wish everyone would just acknowledge it for what it is, and move on. This Equestria is about as organic as MSG. It's tasty, but thoroughly artificial, for our enjoyment and nothing more.

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Equestria herein is a strange hodgepodge of Medieval, Victorian and Modern, the latter of the three seeming especially...out of touch.

Which actually describes the canon version of Equestria pretty well.

As others have already stated in posts above, this was a very tastefully written scene. I like the way you rely more upon subtle eroticism and sensually and less on the smuttier details.

It’s actually quite refreshing!

I actually can’t help but feel a little sad for Lily in this chapter. Despite her somewhat shallow nature and shamelessness when it comes to climbing the social ladders of Canterlot high society, she really is a good pony; a decorated soldier and a war hero, whose bravery was even acknowledged by her nation’s highest authority.

And frankly, she deserves a hell of a lot better than having to get plowed by a married stallion (who probably dedicates a whole two hours of his morning routine to the grooming of his mustache) all for the sake of having a fancy new dress for the upcoming Gala.

It’s ironic that a mare with such a distinguishing taste for the finer things of life, also has such appalling taste in male companionship.

One is a ponce and the other was a punk.

And honestly? Between Kilfeather and Mailedhoof, It’s kinda hard to tell which is worst of the two.

Hopefully, both end up getting some well deserved comeuppance, courtesy of Lily Glamerspear and a certain Royal Engineer.

Great stuff!
Looking forward to the next chapter!

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It was her choice to get plowed by a married stallion. She deliberately went to the Officers' Mess with the intention of becoming his mistress because he has money. So, no, not feeling sorry for her. Besides, it’s not like she’s in a bad situation. She got exactly what she wanted. And I doubt she wasted even a single thought about him being a married stallion or how his family feels about this. Nope she’s as “guilty” as Mailedhoof.

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Yes it does, and it is one of the things the show does that drives me bat-shit.

Welp, it finally happened.

And, oh my.

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Why? It's a well known trope.

Of course there's something of a sliding scale of how much sense something makes within the in-universe narrative.

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Just because it's well known doesn't mean I have to LIKE it. The Schitzo-Tech trope just rubs me the wrong way 99% of the time. It rarely makes any kind of sense in setting.

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Indeed. I think even Dragon Ball fall under the Schizo Tech genre if I'm not mistaken.

This chapter features clop.

Well it's about bloody time!