Celestia has had to deal with many things throughout her reign, laws, deplomatic meetings, acient old threats coming back to modern day (well more like her pupil dealing with them but who's really going into specifics?) and snobs. Celestia has seen it all and hasn't backed down from any of them. But it gets really boring sometimes.
Thankfully we have a green fellow coming to steal the princess! Let's see how that goes, will it work? will the princess get her day off early? Will they eat cake and enjoy a moment of tranquility? Find all that out in this one-shot!
If your asking why make this the answer is simple; To get better at writing sentimental moments with characters, and trying to make them act in character, so if you have any constructive criticism please do share!
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POGGGG FEATURED ON 9/25/2021 FIRST FEATURE AGHHHHHHHH THANK YOU GUYS SO MUUUUUUUCHHHHHHHHH
A bit hectic and at times hard to understand, feels like you could benefit from some more editing and polishing. Where are demn dots and commas?
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I totally get that and I will try to work on that, thank you for leaving a comment and giving me some advice, always appreciated :)
For what, the third time this month?
Wow.... You really need to learn what a period is. I got a headache from trying to make heads or tails of the insanely long run-on sentences.
Fucking wonderful!
This is a good one.
I love it anonymous so cool and Celestia man that was great thanks for making the story and I hope you make more of this :,-)
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This was a very good one-shot.
Very good one shot! Made me smile :)
Would love to see this become a full blown romance story. However, the pacing could use a bit of work.
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Honestly yeah, pacing was a bit everywhere with me not actually picking this story up for awhile. Thank you for bringing it to my attention though! I definitely should've seen that as a issue, I was thinking of making a proper sequel but we'll see.
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A helpful tip, try to make each paragraph 5 to 6 sentences long. It should help a bit.
Awwwwwww
very cute
Is it really a racial issue, or is it an intolerance issue? Or speciesm?
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My bad, intolerance. I think I was putting that subtle message a little too hard.
This was cute I like this
I can only say 1 thing, ANON TAKING THE FULL ON SHOT AT CONFESSING AND GETTING IT OVER TO GET HIS WISH FULFILLED: WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
But seriously this was a really beautiful Story and even comedical at the start, In my eyes the Nobility shall get some manners taught, AND I MEAN REAL MANNERS, more similar to Rarity because she knows the way for true Manners and yet doesn't go over the edge with it even with her Generosity! Oh and if desrespecting the more common ones - the Nobility shall get some taste of their own medicine or even worse
I find it interesting how Anon was able to foalnap Celestia considering how heavy she can be especially after having so much cake.