• Member Since 19th Nov, 2014
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redsopine


hiii just a heads up but anytime somone is kind enough to use my ocs has permission to use anytime (just no clop without me either asking or being asked)

Comments ( 34 )

Any feedback is welcome and again apologies for the suppliers for later episodes in this

10453517
It is moving a little fast but it's still okay but I am curious how he got inside that cave

10455731
I can pm you how and if you know the show feedback on ideas welcome)

10455731
Still thanks for the commenting and the pacing will slow down soon

10455742
If you need any ideas or some OC that you want to add on to your story I can create something for you

10455747
Oc I'm okay with rn to start but ideas to bounce with would be fun but it would be only for current chapters

again comments and feedback welcome

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10459844
Thanks I wasn't sure if people would be mad at a few bits here/if I pulled the characters off ok

Also did you guys notice a subtle chabge in ruby's personality not a big one but a bit more sass behind her

10459874
I take it u noticed lol

Also if anyone wants to know the childhood parts will be in flashbacks to important bits of information

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10459844
Chapter 4 out already what a shocker lol

10460147
For the first part everything was going good but when you got past the line you was moving a little bit too fast

10460293
Ok I'm gonna try to slow down now just wanted to get the hardest part out the way and that's the first episode and all the canon stuff

10460312
Okay I just wanted you to know and you don't have to keep on with the Canon just departs that's necessary

10460320
Yup I know and I also try to keep that stuff but sometimes i flip bits to suit the new narrative like red already knowing ozpin and just being himself and just talking like he would to anyone

A few typing errors here and there but looking good

10463207
Thanks and yes I know spoilers lol

10463207
Oh and the interactions with Weiss will be getting a bit more hilarious untill they finally have a fight

10463219
that i can't wait to see.

10463223
Still I didn't come across to mean did i

Keep up the good work.

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np hope i gave artic abd rust a good mini intro

Not bad. What would really help your story is an editor/co-writer to help extend your chapters as well as take care of any spelling errors

ok currently under a edit thanks to Valiant Charge and could get some chaoter padding

i hope a new chapter is on the way.

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it is i get side tracked alot

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